I just checked this game out version 0.0.1, and here are my thoughts so far.
The Good:
The renders are nice in terms of models and poses.
The story has been told before, but it is a good story to tell. Corruption based female protagonist.
The fact that you have choices / can reject advances is nice.
The Bad:
The opening line, "Don't forget to support us on Patreon to keep us going" is not the best opening line to use... Gives that feeling of, "If we don't immediately start making good money we are going to abandon this." feeling. A better line would have been something like "If you enjoyed our demo please consider supporting us on Patreon.", and it's better to put such a thing back end not front end. Better as the last line instead of a first line.
Needs incest patches (possibly rape patches too judging by where this story seems to be going) if you are to continue on patreon.
I think it is a mistake to release a game this early. It's like serving people undercooked food. There is a couple of minutes worth of gameplay, and 20 renders. My yet to be released new game is significantly longer and not close to being released.
The Engrish is strong in this one. It's clear that it is written by a non-native English speaker.
The Renders often times have grain on them and need to be retouched with GIMP or Photoshop. Also, I noticed some lighting changes in between renders on the same scene.
The wrong transitions are used sometimes I think. It's always a "fade" sometimes a "dissolve" would be better used when shifting from two images in the same scene, but fading from 1 scene to next is fine.
The pacing feels... "Off" for lack of a better term. Perhaps this is due to a lack of any character development. After the patreon statement here is the first line of dialogue:
"Gosh, What should I do? He died a month ago who was spending money on us"
"There is no time for sad"
This makes the character come off as cold / money hungry. The Engrish makes it even worse. Better written would sound something like (which is just me off the cuff writing her dialogue).
"Has it really been a month? It feels like only yesterday since his heart attack. Now he is gone forever. I miss my husband so much."
"I have to be strong for my children's sake, they are suffering too. I don't want them to pity me. I need to be strong for them like their father was. It would make me even more depressed if they saw me crying. I can't just mope around all day anymore like I have been doing. I have to take action and be strong. The bills are not going to pay themself."
Characters need to be written with passion and feelings, and not like robots on a mission.
Also, something seems illogical in the story so far. Apparently, they are "New to the neighborhood", but the husband just died a month ago, and she doesn't have a job yet. I would presume they are still living at the "old house" where he lived with them as she has not started work yet. So a better opener would be to start at some fancy pants mansion, then showing them having to sell off some stuff at an auction maybe... toss ina moving van to the more modest home... The downgrade, if it happened, is not yet shown (only loosely implied), and if it didn't happen it doesn't make sense for them to have just moved.
