VN Ren'Py Abandoned Life is Hard [v0.3.6.2] [MarshmelloGames]

[m3nic]

I just checked this game out version 0.0.1, and here are my thoughts so far.

The Good:

The renders are nice in terms of models and poses.

The story has been told before, but it is a good story to tell. Corruption based female protagonist.

The fact that you have choices / can reject advances is nice.

The Bad:

The opening line, "Don't forget to support us on Patreon to keep us going" is not the best opening line to use... Gives that feeling of, "If we don't immediately start making good money we are going to abandon this." feeling. A better line would have been something like "If you enjoyed our demo please consider supporting us on Patreon.", and it's better to put such a thing back end not front end. Better as the last line instead of a first line.

Needs incest patches (possibly rape patches too judging by where this story seems to be going) if you are to continue on patreon.

I think it is a mistake to release a game this early. It's like serving people undercooked food. There is a couple of minutes worth of gameplay, and 20 renders. My yet to be released new game is significantly longer and not close to being released.

The Engrish is strong in this one. It's clear that it is written by a non-native English speaker.

The Renders often times have grain on them and need to be retouched with GIMP or Photoshop. Also, I noticed some lighting changes in between renders on the same scene.

The wrong transitions are used sometimes I think. It's always a "fade" sometimes a "dissolve" would be better used when shifting from two images in the same scene, but fading from 1 scene to next is fine.

The pacing feels... "Off" for lack of a better term. Perhaps this is due to a lack of any character development. After the patreon statement here is the first line of dialogue:

"Gosh, What should I do? He died a month ago who was spending money on us"
"There is no time for sad"

This makes the character come off as cold / money hungry. The Engrish makes it even worse. Better written would sound something like (which is just me off the cuff writing her dialogue).

"Has it really been a month? It feels like only yesterday since his heart attack. Now he is gone forever. I miss my husband so much."
"I have to be strong for my children's sake, they are suffering too. I don't want them to pity me. I need to be strong for them like their father was. It would make me even more depressed if they saw me crying. I can't just mope around all day anymore like I have been doing. I have to take action and be strong. The bills are not going to pay themself."

Characters need to be written with passion and feelings, and not like robots on a mission.

Also, something seems illogical in the story so far. Apparently, they are "New to the neighborhood", but the husband just died a month ago, and she doesn't have a job yet. I would presume they are still living at the "old house" where he lived with them as she has not started work yet. So a better opener would be to start at some fancy pants mansion, then showing them having to sell off some stuff at an auction maybe... toss ina moving van to the more modest home... The downgrade, if it happened, is not yet shown (only loosely implied), and if it didn't happen it doesn't make sense for them to have just moved.

Android port plz

 

[Virulenz]

You play as a woman who lost your husband, now living with a teenage boy and girl in a small house. Supporting the household now falls to you, but you don't really have a job. It's now up to you get the skills to make some money. How? That's up to you!

Up to me? Really? I can send the boy working overseas and enjoy his salary with my girl?

 

[John Dirt]

ok

 

[jackp0t]

so this update advanced 1 mm in the storyline???

 

[Bobber Tail]

A couple things, English needs work. I would go over it before it gets too long if you send me your English script.
Next, you give us options we can't use because it is impossible to get enough points when they show up. This makes no sense.

 

[Redmoon82]

Can't figure out how to change the language in the game?

 

[Deleted member 2380185]

Unwatch.......This game had potential but didn't quite make it

 

[FatBoizSlim]

Cya in a year or two, when there's some actual content.

 

[ILCjr]

Cya in a year or two, when there's some actual content.

That is if they quit rebooting the story and making it worse than before...

 

[erw255]

no content if you wanna go lesbian path and keep all the creepy rapey AF dudes and son who needs a beating at bay...so us lesbian fans...nothing here for us.

This is why most female MC games are complete garbage. The only males you have an option with are complete scum, and all too often, you're not even given an option at all.

Me: "Can I not sleep with the disgusting asshole scumbag?"
Female protagonist game: "No, you're totally going to sleep with this disgusting asshole scumbag and a dozen other guys that are even worse. We're not giving you a choice in the matter."
Me: *Deletes game.*

 

[JanisL]

And where are the other languages? Where are they added?

 

[tulfo]

Where to DL Andriod port?

 

[lordofhirunds]

And where are the other languages? Where are they added?

Go to main menù click on options and there you will see LANGUAGE click on your language

 

[xXwankerXx]

This is why most female MC games are complete garbage. The only males you have an option with are complete scum, and all too often, you're not even given an option at all.

Yep. Same boring shit expect to see lots of blackmail, groping, hobos and shit she "has to do" for money. We already have the token fat fuck and lots of creeps to choose from, now let her and her daughter's descent into slutiness and prostitution begin, gotta wank that dick, fuck a decent plot, right ??

But joke aside, the renders are really good and both women are hot, sadly the daughter is a gold digger that would rather become a slut than earn an honest dollar and the son is the usual creep in incest games. I already like the neighbor kid, he knows how to go incognito. Probably learned that from an ostrich. Anybody else noticed the BaDIK UI and fonts ??

This can become an interesting game if it would have an actual plot to make players come back for more ... some seduction, character development (the sister is a gold digger, but she can be do better) and different paths to play. There's a "good wife" stat in the RP menu... her husband's dead, why is that stat in the RP section and not the characters the FMC interacts with?

The game needs some polishing and some proofreading but it can become an interesting prospect with the necessary improvements assuming the dev won't abandon it.

 

[pepette]

Go to main menù click on options and there you will see LANGUAGE click on your language

Perhaps I'm an dumb girl, but I can't find the languages in the options (I used the nopy link)

 

[Spyderwraith]

So why is there a point in the story that is behind a "you don't have enough points with person A" when there's only 1 point given up until now in the story and then another one when i have 3 points and apparently thats not even enough.
seems a bit ridiculous

 

[pepette]

So why is there a point in the story that is behind a "you don't have enough points with person A" when there's only 1 point given up until now in the story and then another one when i have 3 points and apparently thats not even enough.
seems a bit ridiculous

I think you speak about "peeking on the son" in the morning.
To have enough points you need to go home and don't speak to the daughter and her BF in the park

 

[Megalomaniak]

When its ported to android?

 

[MrLakes1579]

personally i prefer making them lesbian sluts

I really wish I could find a game that pulled off both the "lesbian" and "slut" part together. It's usually one or the other. I know people who play lesbian routes tend to prefer romance usually I do to. But I think it would be hot just once to do a lesbian game where you're in a room full of women and all of them have had you and they all know it.

 

[MrLakes1579]

Also on sluttiness in general I know some people get off on the excessive domination and being put into a position you don't want to. If I'm playing a slut I want to play it like a super confident porn star, someone who has a train pulled on them and has a sexy little joke for each guy as she says "next."

Just once I want to play one of those super confident and in control sluts who's not getting blackmailed into anything. If she wants to fuck you she will, if not she won't end of story.