VN Ren'Py Abandoned Life of Your Dreams [v0.5] [DirtyNovels]

4.70 star(s) 7 Votes
Jan 15, 2018
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Really like this
Animation is great
not too shabby
a few minor things though
On Carol's sex scene right before you and Jack finish her hair kind of goes inside of her head
-this is kinda the theme for most of the minor things

On the more corrupt route with your sister Annie (the Grace concert route) after you take the pics for your classmate, the bj scene her hair does kinda go inside of the pillow about half of her hair.

The last day scene with your sister, after you finish and she says "T... Th... Thank you too, brother ..." it was quite noticeable to me but her left eye is slightly open rather than fully closed/ winking.

Last one is gameplay wise
There isn't really a problem per say, I just don't like Andrea and it feels kinda weird that just helping her with books guarantees the lewd scene.
 
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WaerM

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I'm a german guy and i don't need / want a german version , because i prefer good english instead of really bad translated german.And nobody here were asking for it so dunno why you said sth like that . lel
i don't believe it is as bad now as before the younger population in theese countries use internet like everyone else, the problem earlier in my opinion was that theese countries choose to do woiceovers (dubbing) on the movies and tv-shows rather than use english voice with subtitles in their native toungue.
Therefore you don't pickup the english language at the same pace as the countries with english as a second language ( education from age 7 or 8)
 

SomeOneButNotMe

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Really like this
Animation is great
not too shabby
a few minor things though
On Carol's sex scene right before you and Jack finish her hair kind of goes inside of her head
-this is kinda the theme for most of the minor things

On the more corrupt route with your sister Annie (the Grace concert route) after you take the pics for your classmate, the bj scene her hair does kinda go inside of the pillow about half of her hair.

The last day scene with your sister, after you finish and she says "T... Th... Thank you too, brother ..." it was quite noticeable to me but her left eye is slightly open rather than fully closed/ winking.

Last one is gameplay wise
There isn't really a problem per say, I just don't like Andrea and it feels kinda weird that just helping her with books guarantees the lewd scene.
Thanks for the feedback, I'm planning to fix the animation problems in the next update.
 

Reid7

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Not to bad for your 2nd update. I like the changed interface where it's click and interact rather than the choose from the list that was there before. Also glad it was changed to a step-family relationship rather than straight incest. That's what I prefer, though this should also protect you from Patreon's policies. Of course, for those who do prefer the actual incest you could add an optional patch that changes up the dialogue a bit so that those folks will be satisfied and make it so. Of course, that's up to you. You do what you want and don't make more work for yourself if something like that feels nitpicky and decide to leave things be.

Again, kudos on the animations. That's the real highlight of this game so far. Really good, different angles, last for a good amount of time. Can't wait for future updates with more animation.

It's a bit to early right now to give good judgment on the story. It's only the 2nd release so there really isn't much to criticize in terms of writing, though good on you for getting an editor to touch up the script. It's not perfect, but head and shoulders above what it was written like before. So far though, it seems to have started similarly to many other adult games here. Like I said though it's early and I'm sure you've got plans for how to develop individual storylines so I'm just going to be patient and wait for more content before giving a verdict. Looking forward to when actual sex happens. Grace looks like she's almost there in her path.

Good changes for the Abby and Monica models. Monica looks way better and while I didn't have a problem with Abby's previous design, her new one looks fine too. Hope Helen gets an update. The red-haired party girl's face (forgot her name) also looks a tad odd for some reason I can't place, but that's just me being nitpicky. Ignore it. Looking forward to what other characters will be added in. Really curious how the stepmom will look...

All in all, good job. Also neat that you posted the results of the polls at the end of the update so people can see the direction the game is headed. And while the polls will give you an idea about where your audience's tastes lie, this is your game. Listen to your audience, accept criticism, but don't pander and be sure to ignore the haters. You do you, man. Plenty of potential and room for development here.

So yeah, this is a great start. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more.
 
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SomeOneButNotMe

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Not to bad for your 2nd update. I like the changed interface where it's click and interact rather than the choose from the list that was there before. Also glad it was changed to a step-family relationship rather than straight incest. That's what I prefer, though this should also protect you from Patreon's policies. Of course, for those who do prefer the actual incest you could add an optional patch that changes up the dialogue a bit so that those folks will be satisfied and make it so. Of course, that's up to you. You do what you want and don't make more work for yourself if something like that feels nitpicky and decide to leave things be.

Again, kudos on the animations. That's the real highlight of this game so far. Really good, different angles, last for a good amount of time. Can't wait for future updates with more animation.

It's a bit to early right now to give good judgment on the story. It's only the 2nd release so there really isn't much to criticize in terms of writing, though good on you for getting an editor to touch up the script. It's not perfect, but head and shoulders above what it was written like before. So far though, it seems to have started similarly to many other adult games here. Like I said though it's early and I'm sure you've got plans for how to develop individual storylines so I'm just going to be patient and wait for more content before giving a verdict. Looking forward to when actual sex happens. Grace looks like she's almost there in her path.

Good changes for the Abby and Monica models. Monica looks way better and while I didn't have a problem with Abby's previous design, her new one looks fine too. Hope Helen gets an update. The red-haired party girl's face (forgot her name) also looks a tad odd for some reason I can't place, but that's just me being nitpicky. Ignore it. Looking forward to what other characters will be added in. Really curious how the stepmom will look...

All in all, good job. Also neat that you posted the results of the polls at the end of the update so people can see the direction the game is headed. And while the polls will give you an idea about where your audience's tastes lie, this is your game. Listen to your audience, accept criticism, but don't pander and be sure to ignore the haters. You do you, man. Plenty of potential and room for development here.

So yeah, this is a great start. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to more.
Thanks for the feedback! It's really nice that someone spend time to write a detailed opinion about the game !

It's really nice that someone pays time to write a detailed opinion about the game
 

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Well I gave in and tried the demo... Glad I did too.

The animations so far put My New Life to shame and I like that you have to click to see the next scene/camera angle rather than it being timed or you having to control the movement. Plus the fact that the game is in Renpy means that the flow is so much better rather than having to fucking walk everywhere. Plus I didn't encounter any freezes or bugs which was good. In terms of the character models I like the shapes and sizes, Grace being my chubby favourite. Only thing I don't like is the purple eyes on certain characters, but its not a major put off.

Looking forward to seeing more from Grace and Monica. Hopefully get some big arse action from the brothers girlfriend too.

In terms of story I'd consider it on par with most cheesy porno movie stories. Its not realistic and has a more funny vibe so that the sex happens quick and stuff.

I did see the brother fucking his girlfriend but then reloaded and chose to leave them alone. Not sure if that effects anything just yet but does offer the possibility of multiple playthroughs and on Renpy thats not a chore because it flows so fast.

So my score so far would be 8 wanks out of 10 lol. Keep up the good work dev.
 
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Sleepy0703

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Loving it so far. Animations are some of the best i've seen and the models overall look really good. Don't have any complaints besides minor stuff like model clipping but it wasn't anywhere near bad enough to ruin the scenes. Great job an keep it up dev!
 

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a suggestion to the game that should be make while the game is still new

-make gallery option (when games get too large or contents, it will become harder to compile into a gallery)
 
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I felt kinda shitty for handing nude pics of the sister that I really like to some scumbag to get a ticket for a sister that I don't like at all... Mind you I look forward to stealing big dickhead bro's woman ;)
 
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Paitryn

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Really like this
Animation is great
not too shabby
a few minor things though
On Carol's sex scene right before you and Jack finish her hair kind of goes inside of her head
-this is kinda the theme for most of the minor things

On the more corrupt route with your sister Annie (the Grace concert route) after you take the pics for your classmate, the bj scene her hair does kinda go inside of the pillow about half of her hair.

The last day scene with your sister, after you finish and she says "T... Th... Thank you too, brother ..." it was quite noticeable to me but her left eye is slightly open rather than fully closed/ winking.

Last one is gameplay wise
There isn't really a problem per say, I just don't like Andrea and it feels kinda weird that just helping her with books guarantees the lewd scene.
All of these are limitations of TK17, you wouldn't be able to fix them.

I feel the game is too linear all the time. I like the linear story, but while playing this I definately miss the sandbox of MNL where at points I could just go around fucking girls or seeing sex scenes. I love all the outfits though. I mean were in a porn lets get slutty as a theme just makes it great.
 
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