Here's the thing I don't understand the point of the story, what is the point of the MC stay single if those 2 girls are giving each other more action then him? it seems pointless to me? I'm willing to hear anyone else's options on this story cuz its 5 ch in and the 2 girls in his house are playing way to hard to get even though they want his D?
Considering how dark and lonely this chapter was (literally and metaphorically) I understand your question.
I'm just offering my
opinion, but I don't want be a
Third Wheel. In earlier chapters, I liked spending time with Denise, solving her problems and growing the relationship with her, rather than watching Denise solve Macy's problems and their relationship blossom. Writers can't grant immediate gratification (not if they want a good story), but not being at the center of the Chapter was a depressing experience to me. If that's intentional, it was effective.
Was this meant to be the hero's lowest point, like in an adventure story? You see, hypothetically, if LoML was a twelve Chapter romance novel we're almost at the halfway point; the point where we should be getting into the romantic evenings and relationships. Considering this story is focused on the MC, who is a man, it's strange to make him the isolated observer in a lesbian-romance Chapter.
One of the most memorable moments was napping by a tree while the girls had fun in a lake...
