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I am currently doing a much needed spell and grammar check, jumped a bit too fast on that one. I'll find that sir and get rid of it.Plus 1.1 million reservists, another half a million in the National Guard, and another 17.4 million veterans. (We don't just forget everything once we've been discharged, unfortunately.) Then there are family members of active duty and veterans who are familiar with how rank works, because you tend to learn that kind of thing when your spouse is in the military.
So your numbers there are way undershooting the amount of people who will notice discrepancies like this (and the others I mentioned in my edit).
Regardless, no one should write about something they are entirely unfamiliar with. Research is absolutely necessary for those of us who want to write about things with which we don't have firsthand experience. It's fine if you make minor changes to how something works in reality for the sake of the narrative, but there are limits to that once you've pushed far beyond the realm of what's believable. And at the very least, the characters involved should sound like the kind of people you're writing them to be. Jargon is important, and lends authenticity.
I'm not trying to shit on this developer's story. He might have a very good one here. But it's very hard to continue past the mistakes being made, both factual and grammatical. (The latter being another serious issue here. Dev clearly made no effort to ensure their grammar, spelling, and punctuation were at least consistent if not correct.)
I was not in the US military. I have not lived where LR supposedly is, nor have I lived in US society.
I'm sure that will shine through too. I have spent countless hours researching have no doubt about that, but there is no knowing if I asked the right question.
My own service was 20 odd years ago, so it's been a bit. Even had I used my own military I could probably have been wrong or dated. A lot has happened in 20 years.
I'm sorry to be too far off the mark for you to enjoy it.
All I can say is that if you got to the last scene then you will know that Christa doesn't buy Jack's story either. So maybe that part will be more believable when more is revealed later on. Then again maybe I will make it worse who knows
End of the day this vn is a hobby, I don't have an editor it's just lil ole me. I had fun doing it if somebody enjoy it then that's good, if it's too far fetched for others then that's a shame.