VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Long Lost Daughter [Ch 1-8 fix] [Tawny Fairquim Frolics]

Holy fuck, the writing on this one. There's no immersion. It doesn't matter which character is talking, it genuinely feels like the writer is talking directly to you the entire time, and it gives major "you'd never want to talk to this person in real life" vibes.

The sex scenes suck, it's the same default Koikatu animations and the MC has the same unnaturally cylindrical dick. I didn't make it far enough to see if anything got better when the art style changed.

Steer clear.

TL;DR Watch MC get dunked on by his family any time he makes an attempt at independent action that does not push their plans for him as their faithful pet/sex toy while leaning on the CRTL button so you can watch them cuck him with each other while getting away with it cause they didn't bleed yet.

This game not only gets bogged down in metaphysical exposition. Which is to say it talks a lot about jesus, god and vague semblances of the two and christianity in general. It makes the supernatural elements to...boring. They're just there to fill plot holes, not actually be a part of it.

Let me try to distill my viewpoint of the writing of this game...

It feels like the product of someone breaking with their faith due to some sort of crisis in their life. The juvenile dialogue ( a kissy? a huggy? ) and the use of strange terms like "filing up" imply that there's still some lingering influence from the lost faith. It's like being completely sober for 25 years then waking up in the hospital with alcohol poisoning makes one a professional drunk...

It doesn't...

The concept of being "someone's first" is lost as well. It thoroughly misses the concept. As long as she bleeds on your dick, you're her first is how this game takes it.

SPOILER!
The title character very nearly lets the MC have that special first instance of love making twice but flees to give it to her grandmother instead.

This is the precedent of the whole game, the MC accepts his role as the family dildo with aplomb and they're nice enough to let him walk around without a leash.

The author frequently alludes to the MC having little to know agency under the rule of his owners (see family) and just lampshades it with tired husband jokes and euphemisms.

The visuals are HORRENDOUS. I get that it might have been going for a 2D style like comic strips, but everything has this slapped together sort of rushed feel.

Case in point The title girl is forced to wear what her mother considers an appropriately modest uniform for her christian(sorta) school. Said uniform has a brooch with a pentagram motif.

The posing and animations are pretty weakly handled as well. Short, often janky custom animations, still images with limbs in unnatural and occasionally impossible positions. How often the MC is folded in half almost off screen just to illustrate the size of his forearm length dick...poor bastard's better at yoga then "wifey" teehee.

Thought went into the soundtrack, it's bad in some instances...I personally can't stand that "green light" track. Otherwise it's fine, well cept for the sound track for the android. I'm just glad she didn't order flied lice during the dinner date.

Yes I don't like this game. Why? it's another example of good ideas handled incredibly poorly. Why'd I play so much of it? Because I wanted to see if it would evolve because let's be real, watching a diamond in the rough get polished is fun. Too bad this one's turned out to be a turd.

After 7 chapters dev switches to awful 3D graphics it's awful! I avoid 3D graphics than to do this to the faithful followers after 7 chapters! This is the shittiest move you can pull on anyone!

Enjoyed the game for quite a while 7 chapters worth than the dev just decides to change the entire art style.. they look older and it's awful 3D!

Anyone that can enjoy a game when graphics are switched out 8 chapters later must love having the damn finger from the DEV saying fuck you all!

Yeah, I can't do it.

I mean, the into is literally just the author repeatedly smashing you over the head with a sign that says "I'm a religious nutjob and philosophical wannabe," now enjoy having my poorly disguised beliefs shoved down your throat.

The dialogue is incredibly long-winded, and you're left constantly feeling like you learned nothing despite spending that last couple of minutes reading line after line of text.

The sexual content, and just writing in general, comes off as really immature. I mean, the main character is a middle-aged man who's gone through some shit, yet his inner monologues come across as some teenage virgin who just got magical powers and is setting off on a mission to screw every woman alive. It's incredibly jarring and unbelievable to read.

The sex itself is generic, uninspired fantasies we've all seen a thousand times before.

And this is just a comment about the production in general, but starting on chapter 8 the author decided to totally change art styles, and while that's totally up to their discretion, they can do what they want, it's their game, good for them. In my opinion, an author who suddenly, without warning makes a shift as large as that on a whim, with no plans to update the prior content to match that new style, is not one I can trust to not only make a cohesive and continuous story, but to finish a story in general.

Don't get me wrong. I don't think a whimsical, free-spirited attitude is all bad in a creative sense. No. You definitely need some of that. But there is a limit. And this author, again, in my opinion, can't be trusted to respect that limit.

I hope all who read this have a great day/evening. And I wish good luck to the author for this and all future endeavours. I know a lot of people enjoy this story, even if it isn't for me.

The dev really pulled the 2D cartoon style off and has a great writing style (a bit silly at times, as are some scenes, but that's fine).
But I gotta day: I really dig the new art style!
Sure, the colors/saturation isn't perfect, but maybe that his twist on this 3D style?
I don't know, but I think this is a GREAT game!!

I really enjoyed playing this game . First of all just to be able to read a history that's written with proper grammar and spelling is such a rare occurrence in this erotic novels, and the characters are well developed you get to like them more as you progress in the game, your choices in game matters and you can shape it to your liking...
The only downer is the change of visual in the last chapter, I hope it goes back to the way it was.

The game for what it is is good, but the Dev switched the art style mid game. That was one of the big selling points for me is that the game was made with Koikatu. For me, changing it mid-game is a fatal mistake.

I'm thinking that is the Dev wanted to change it that bad, he should have remade the whole game in HS2, not after people got used to the art the way it was.

I'm sorry to say, but this game is dead to me now. If it gets remade in HS2 or finished in Koikatu, I will give a better review. But until then, a 2-star it will stay.

Can be of higher quality but it makes up with uniqueness and the first game I've ever seen that goes down to the deep ends of incest fuckery.

Are you an incest fan ? You must play this game if so and you are in for a good run.

I hope dev gets more support to make it better and better!

For a game with as much yuri and incest as it does, it still manages to fail on so many levels for me that I cannot really enjoy it, with the 2nd star only being for effort.

The art is atrocious and very offputting. I've been made so uncomfortable by the characters and how unnatural they look, especially when they cry with their eyes totally wide open staring at you. And this happens so many times. It seems like the entire early part of the game, the girls cry life half the time, which is always creepy.

As far as writing goes, I at least can see that the writer has a style, albeit not one that I'm interested in, and not one that lets me connect to the characters and the game well. The intro section was certainly a huge warning for me, and the game often seems like an attempt to sell, or shoehorn their own beliefs, but the bunnygirl herself was charming, which didn't last too long before the game returned back to what it usually is.

Improving the art alone would go an incredible way for me, because I wouldn't be so put off by the characters even before they say a word, that I could engage with the game. Likely I wouldn't be creeped out by the h scenes as well or in general when they talk. This would make me more receptive to the story, which I skipped after getting creeped out by the visuals early on.

It tries to be funny, but didnt even chuckled once, it is a pseudo humorous-pseudophilosophical constant bash to the head. The first 20 minutes make you want to kill yourself, just to not deal with the insane amount of exposition.

Being a Novel of this nature, of course it had to have fanservice scenes where you just are given things, because sexual content tag is way better in early stages than the alternative, from a bussiness point of view.

When this middle aged man, instead of telling his wife that her tits are hot, he thinks for himself, like the rest of the adult wannabe Mcs out there.
I understand that, if you are talking to an outsider, you may refer to your daughters as "my daughters" but if you are talking to your wife or husband "the kids" or "the girls" should be the way to go.

I dont think i can keep playing with the 3 options Bunny girl provided:

Getting to lewd scenes quick, which i understand it will be fanservice out of nowhere sex.
Getting to know characters better, so far the game is heavy on exposition and i can not trust the writing capabilities of this particular dev.
And philosophical pseudoreligious rant?

If writing was good, i would go or it, but it is not, it is quite unsufferable.

In the graphics department all the girls i have seen are 11 year olds with big tits, blush and big heads. Boring.

I like the scenes, the game has a lot of content and some of the models are fine, but some aspects of the game can be improved like the models and dialogue. Overall a very good game, hence my 4/5 rating.

i enjoyed most of the game, and found it very cool in how it fixed certain things like the make up issue in chapter one. however what is making me both lower my score and essentially drop the game and never pick it up again is all the religion.

i mean you start the game and the mc is named and then called a pastor. and there are others that are pastors in it too. and that's fine, im not against games and media having religion in it. i however draw the line when religion becomes a major problem.

for example, in this game so far as i can tell there are only 3 characters that dont immediately fall into the sway of heavy religion one of them being the first of the twin daughters, whom is an atheist gamer. a fact that immediately endeared her to me.

the thing is in one of the chapters( cant remember which) shes in HER (which i dont remember is shared with the twin or not) room playing games in front of her twin and two stepsisters all of which are HYPER religious, painfully so, i can see the stepsisters being that way since they grew up under a hyper religious overbearing cunt aptly named "The Matriarch" how ever the twin grew thinking that she was "one with God" and all things. im sorry what? no, that was one thing and nearly killed the game for me but i continued.

what really killed the game was scene was describing, atheist gamer twin is playing games while talking to "i hear God, and everyone thinks thats ok" twin and the 2 stepsisters that grew up under the matriarch's and her minime's thumb. well the girl kills a dude on screen and the two stepsister legit blow up at her yelling and quoting the bible. and right as the gamer is about give a just as good as she got tongue lashing right back, her twin yells at her telling her to stop and she is in the wrong putting the poor girl into tears.

im sorry what? no. that killed any suspension of disbelief that i had kept. i tried to continue anyway, but just found that i personally couldnt keep going.

this game is dominated by religion and not in a good way. its overbearing and in your face at all times quoting verses and theology on top of getting philosophical. and i can usually handle that. this though, puts all the negative things about religion in one easy to see area and no one in the game is trying to fix it at all.

so no thanks. i think this is a hard pass for me.

artwork, and coding are good though, dont think i ran into a single bug at all. and i also tip my hat to the creator in providing a free game not bound by the societal rules of other sites in order to get cash. if they make a game that isnt so heavily bound by religion i will happily give it a go and even toss some cash their way.

until then, i shall have to find my fetishes elsewhere.

Review of Chapters 1-6

This game is unlike any game available right now. For that reason, people will either love it or hate it. I can't imagine it will produce many ambivalent responses. However, in my experience, that means you're dealing with a truly unique work of art.

The story deals in Christianity, mysticism, universal oneness, time-traveling incest impregnation (no, seriously), and familial love. Lots and lots of familial love. To the devout, it may be offensive (but then why are you here anyway? *CLANG* SHAME! *CLANG* SHAME!). To heathens, it may be boring or eye-rolling. To someone like me, an agnostic who has an intellectual fascination with religion and spirituality in general, this story is fantastic. The characters spend a lot of time deconstructing Christian dogma and reformulating it into a new faith that drives the game. The behaviors and motivations of the individual family members are tied closely to this faith. For some, the faith is a good thing. For others, not so much. In either case, the faith is at the core of the drama found in the game. I find it all very fascinating and it provides a uniquely fresh set of motivations for a fetish that has been done to death.

Speaking of that fetish, this is a tremendous incest game. The titular daughter is only the tip of the iceberg. New daughters seem to crawl out of the woodwork. An unseen deity provides opportunities to time travel into the past to correct sexual missed opportunities. These corrections have immediate effects in the present. I don't want to spoil the story, but suffice to say if you are into incest impregnation, then this is the game for you. Other fetishes are present, but are optional.

The writing is very stylized. There is a lot of narration and emphasis on the "novel" part of "visual novel." The prose has style and flare. The narrator is loquacious and frequently deals in hilariously descriptive metaphors for sexual acts, genitals, and bodily functions, not to mention ample amounts of alliteration. If you possess a big vocabulary, then you'll be fine. If not, keep a dictionary nearby.

Some may find the visual style a bit stiff, but honestly, the writing is the main attraction of this game.

Strangely, it is both completely wholesome and unbelievably filthy. The game deals in redemption without a hint of corruption. Create a tag for "dirty vanilla" and slap it on this game because it has created a whole new subgenre of VN. You will nut like never before and have a warm glow in your heart to go along with your empty balls.

I find this game incredibly hot and endlessly interesting. It's currently one of my favorite games. But it is unlike anything I've ever played before. If you are open-minded about your porn experiences, then you'll want to check this out. I can't guarantee that you'll like it. I can only guarantee that you haven't played anything like it before and you will probably never play anything like it again.

Highly Recommended!

Absolutely incredible. You have really made something incredible here. its deep in ways that you never see with games like this while still dripping with content. Continue making the game according to your vision!

NGL - I'm not fan of anime. In the times of more realistic 3d games - anime is not that appealing, also bcz it usually comes in combination with horrible engrish.
Yet after reading the 'Self-Indulgent Shit' paragraph of the walkthrough - I got intrigued (BTW I shared the musical taste except the gun's and posers)
The game is a pleasant surprise!. It is well written erotic an witty -the game is very entertaining providing the flexibility for tailoring it to your likings. ex. - it gives choices like futa, skip the more philosophical parts etc.
The animations are fine too - a bit shy for my taste, most penetrations are not as explicit as I would like them to be, but that's just me.

Shit gets weird.

TLDR: "I'm my own grandpa" the VN, with timeline fuckery, with a dose of "like a train wreck, you can't look away".

Pacing is bad even if you skip the philosophy and worse if you don't. Layers upon layers of incest/impreg kink if you're into that. Also gets really weird with religion, and I don't know where to even start with that.

Anyone who thinks that incest is best, who believes that the family that lays together stays together is going to enjoy this game. The story is engaging and the fapping material abundant. Some hardcore atheists may be turned off by the spiritual aspects, but this atheist finds it quite novel and it is a moving force in the story. So go ahead and suspend your disbelief for once, this game is worth it.

This is a well thought out story line, and progression does make sense. And the illustrations are also well done. If you like this type of story then you will love this one, and will keep coming back for each up date.

I think this game is very hit-or-miss, and that much seems apparent based on the ratings it has so far accumulated.

On the other hand, if it does hit with you it will surely be a good time. So keep that in mind for my review.

Pros:
+ It's 70% sex, 20% talking about sex, and 10% religious talk. That 10% is skippable. If you're looking for a deeper story, this may not be for you.
+ Quite a few good jokes that made me crack up.
+ It knows what it's about (a porn game) and doesn't pretend to be something else.
+ All the decisions are pretty clear choices.

Cons:
- Sometimes a bit too silly.
- It's a bit lacking on the visual side.

Overall a great game IMO.