VN Ren'Py Long Road Home [Ep.15] [OBDGames]

[Kaos_Theory]

Are you playing the latest Episode 10.2 Hotfix?

Mega

I used the files from the 10.2 hotfix for my proofreading, there was still some wording that needed adjusting, like the use of the word you when it should have been yours etc,... I've fixed those and used a USA English grammar checker to run over the whole lot and change only what made sense to change, I wanted to further enhance the story, not destroy it by changing it from your original vision, if you wish to peruse my alterations, I'd happily share the changed files with you

 

[Dimitri57]

I used the files from the 10.2 hotfix for my proofreading, there was still some wording that needed adjusting, like the use of the word you when it should have been yours etc,... I've fixed those and used a USA English grammar checker to run over the whole lot and change only what made sense to change, I wanted to further enhance the story, not destroy it by changing it from your original vision, if you wish to peruse my alterations, I'd happily share the changed files with you

What format are they in?

 

[Kaos_Theory]

The same format they were in when I downloaded them, I just copied the lines over and ran them through a checker, then after I was done, copied them back into the .rpy file and saved when it was all done, I may have missed a few minor points here and there, but I put that down to me trying to get them done in a timely manner.

If you're happy with the changes, assuming you can spot them, as I've just gone looking through a couple of rpy files and I can't even spot some changes I've made

 

[Dimitri57]

The same format they were in when I downloaded them, I just copied the lines over and ran them through a checker, then after I was done, copied them back into the .rpy file and saved when it was all done, I may have missed a few minor points here and there, but I put that down to me trying to get them done in a timely manner.

If you're happy with the changes, assuming you can spot them, as I've just gone looking through a couple of rpy files and I can't even spot some changes I've made

Thanks, but I'll pass not knowing what was changed. I use a lot of slang, colloquialisms, common speak and localisms. People don't speak perfect grammar in conversations. If the dialog it is too sanitized, it comes off robotic.

 

[Kaos_Theory]

That's fine, the primary change was done for me since I would always spot the occasions of "you" where "your" should be and vice versa, it would irk me lol. I'm just a unique person. Either way, I truly love the game and the fact that the story even evokes emotions without visuals, truly tells the reader of your skills as a story writer.

 

[PapaPhat]

The same format they were in when I downloaded them, I just copied the lines over and ran them through a checker, then after I was done, copied them back into the .rpy file and saved when it was all done, I may have missed a few minor points here and there, but I put that down to me trying to get them done in a timely manner.

If you're happy with the changes, assuming you can spot them, as I've just gone looking through a couple of rpy files and I can't even spot some changes I've made

Tried doing that myself. It never works out. The spacing in Ren'Py code is lethally crucial. The game will not even start if you mess up even one line's spacing. And, Dima is right...

Thanks, but I'll pass not knowing what was changed. I use a lot of slang, colloquialisms, common speak and localisms. People don't speak perfect grammar in conversations. If the dialog it is too sanitized, it comes off robotic.

He's picky about what he will and won't change... even when he is dead wrong, y'all. Yawlz in Dima land is the perfect example. Y'all's or Yall's would be closer to actual colloquial English but Dima insists on typing it out incorrectly. There are a few other places where we butted heads like a couple of old goats when I submitted four chapters worth of edits for Dima's first dialogue grammar fix.

Not saying that you don't know what you are doing, my friend. Just saying that Dima is tough to please and does things his own way. Right or wrong, I love him like a brother. So, I put up with some weirdness. I'm fucking weird too!
Hahaha

Adventure ever on, Phat

 

[Dimitri57]

That's fine, the primary change was done for me since I would always spot the occasions of "you" where "your" should be and vice versa, it would irk me lol. I'm just a unique person. Either way, I truly love the game and the fact that the story even evokes emotions without visuals, truly tells the reader of your skills as a story writer.

I'm glad you are enjoying it.

It's tricky using a grammar program on the rpy files where the text is embedded in the RenPy coding. I know I've fucked up the coding when I run the script through spelling/grammar check programs.

I want to fix my fuckups, but it's too risky for me to plug in ryp files back in that I don't know what's been changed.

 

[PapaPhat]

I'm glad you are enjoying it.

It's tricky using a grammar program on the rpy files where the text is embedded in the RenPy coding. I know I've fucked up the coding when I run the script through spelling/grammar check programs.

I want to fix my fuckups, but it's too risky for me to plug in ryp files back in that I don't know what's been changed.

You can export the Ren'Py into a format that has spell check/grammar edit functionality but you cannot just edit the text then copy/paste the whole thing back into Ren'Py. Each edited dialogue line must be copy/pasted back into the .rpy files one at a time and ensure that NO spacing is changed! The latter part is the tricky bitch.

 

[divingmedic]

Look at you fecker's getting all geeky about proper English and shit. I wouldn't how to change shit. Hell it took me a week and 5 different videos to just install script extenders so I could use mods for Skyrim and Fallout.

 

[cxx]

Yeah, it's a perfect place for the Harem since the MC is renovating the rooms as they cum!

not rooms, overall hotel like elevator etc.

 

[HornyyPussy]

not rooms, overall hotel like elevator etc.

He renovated Angelica's and Rin's room already.

 

[Timodjin]

Sorry for being anoying but the urination, is that worth playing for?
Is it a theme or just somebody taking a leak?

 

[cxx]

Sorry for being anoying but the urination, is that worth playing for?
Is it a theme or just somebody taking a leak?

taking a leak.

 

[Timodjin]

taking a leak.

Many thanks!

 

[darlic]

Many thanks!

That's absolutely not correct, there are a couple of piss drinking scenes (that are great in my opinion, just in case you're digging it)

 

[portiamento]

hi I saw incest and pregnancy tags, is it for ending only?

 

[HornyyPussy]

hi I saw incest and pregnancy tags, is it for ending only?

Incest is only some brief encounters between mother/daughter and yes, I think the pregnancy will be endgame only.

 

[Kaos_Theory]

hi I saw incest and pregnancy tags, is it for ending only?

Incest is from fairly early in the story and carries through, pregnancy was featured in the good guy ending, and is being introduced into the bad guy route.

 

[McLOVINu]

hi I saw incest and pregnancy tags, is it for ending only?

As stated somewhere above my post, its just an early ending, an a single render too, if I recall. AND non nude, just fully clothed.

Since this game has taken place in span of a couple weeks?, we will probably never ever see non-ending pregnancy scenes, certainly not nude, and no pregnant sex scenes.

And just mentioning "i'm pregnant" shouldn't yield pregnant tag like it does in many games threads here at this site, very very sad.

 

[Dimitri57]

As stated somewhere above my post, its just an early ending, an a single render too, if I recall. AND non nude, just fully clothed.

Since this game has taken place in span of a couple weeks?, we will probably never ever see non-ending pregnancy scenes, certainly not nude, and no pregnant sex scenes.

And just mentioning "i'm pregnant" shouldn't yield pregnant tag like it does in many games threads here at this site, very very sad.

Depending on your choices, a couple of pregnancies will be in Chapter two. It won't be an end game event.