Glad you enjoyed the update. Thanks for the kind words and heads up on typos. I had caught some of them and have corrected in the script already. You found others that I hadn't. I returned the favor and caught a few of yours...Another great update!
More characters and plot lines keep appeareing, (appearing) so this is shapping (shaping) to be a really detailed game. Awesome job, dev!
Between Ashley and James being the traitor... everything seems to point to James, but the traitor not being shown in the phone call makes me think about a bait ans (and) switch. She was trying too hard on making MC like her at the end. And the cameras that James installed and Ashley is not aware of might be what allows us to find Ashley out.
Jessy: ... Have fun changing her Depends... (dippers?)
MC: I'll be right down after (I) give Juanita the rent money.
Jessy: You should know what (I) like for breakfast by now...
Stan: MC isn't cut out for management or even a bartender, but I figure he would make (a) good doorman.
Rachel: ... You don't have anything but suit cases (suitcases) to move(,) right?
Chaz: What? I was just messy(messing?) around with Rachel.
Jessy: ... I'd go naked myself if there wasn't(weren't?) all these building(s) around.
MC: Fuck. I'mgoingnot going to last long if she keeps up like that.
Rachel:*Whispering* Mind (Mine) are very sensitive...
Larisa: Don't worry Jessy. She's played with mind (not sure of same mistake or her way of talking) since we were young girls.
MC: It's not too bad, buy it hasn't (been) busy.
Jessy: Just make sure I'm wet Trent... (not sure if missing something or a mistake in coding to call up MC name)
Mickey: ... He('s) my brother and I love him, but be prepared,...
"Depends" are a brand of adult diapers. (Sorry for the mental image that just flashed in your brain...)
"Trent" is a reference to the lead singer of "Nine inch nails". You'd need to look at MC's prior dialog to understand the reference. I made another song reference this episode. I don't know if anyone catches them or am I just amusing myself. Probably the latter...
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