When Lilly shows up and makes a scene a line saying "Why did you bring two strangers into the house?" is incorrectly attributed to Billy. (Also, shouldn't it be your house rather than the house?)
One of the conversation choices with Rina in that scene reads "you trick her" which should probably be you tricked her.
In the scene where the MC talks with Billy at the bar Billy says that Lilly is "more about actions than forgiveness" after the MC proposes giving her a gift. Giving a gift is also an action so it seems like a weird rebuttal.
He also says "remember what you used to do to her" which reads a bit sus, the ear thing he's talking about was also already do-able if you visit her at her house before this scene happens.
Once you help Fauna to the farm Dolla says "did something happened." which should be did something happen.
After that, Fauna says "the damn van has broken down again." which feels somewhat wordy for what little i've been able to gather about the character the damn van broke again. seems more fitting.
Dolla insists the MC stay by saying "you're not gonna make him go after (...). Aren't you?" Which I believe should be are you?. Fauna then says "(...) after all the way here" which seems to be missing walking,
MC says "Since a few weeks." which should be For a few weeks given the preceding sentence.
He follows it up with "Although I used to live here when I was little, but I've come back to spend some time." which should be Although I moved away when I was little, but (...).
One of the conversation choices with Rina in that scene reads "you trick her" which should probably be you tricked her.
In the scene where the MC talks with Billy at the bar Billy says that Lilly is "more about actions than forgiveness" after the MC proposes giving her a gift. Giving a gift is also an action so it seems like a weird rebuttal.
He also says "remember what you used to do to her" which reads a bit sus, the ear thing he's talking about was also already do-able if you visit her at her house before this scene happens.
Once you help Fauna to the farm Dolla says "did something happened." which should be did something happen.
After that, Fauna says "the damn van has broken down again." which feels somewhat wordy for what little i've been able to gather about the character the damn van broke again. seems more fitting.
Dolla insists the MC stay by saying "you're not gonna make him go after (...). Aren't you?" Which I believe should be are you?. Fauna then says "(...) after all the way here" which seems to be missing walking,
MC says "Since a few weeks." which should be For a few weeks given the preceding sentence.
He follows it up with "Although I used to live here when I was little, but I've come back to spend some time." which should be Although I moved away when I was little, but (...).
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