- Updated pacing and changes: I've never shied away from the fact that this is a porn game. This is not something I'm ashamed of, and I have no intention of ever being any kind of slowburn. That being said, I do think I treated some characters unfairly in my initial writing, and I wanted to give them a second chance. This means that certain early game H-content that I deem rushed, forced, or exceedingly unromantic has been removed from the game. This primarily affects Nora and her two scenes, both of which have been removed from the story (though the scenes are still playable in the game's gallery). This is the right choice for her. She deserves romance, wining and dining, etc.
Just a few thoughts that I had when playing the new version of this VN. Personally, I felt that the first thing you should have done was change the main menu options choice, white text is almost unreadable for the first 2 options. Another thing that also needs addressing is the gallery menu options. Having large images of the female characters as options is very tacky and doesn't look good. It would be better with miniature versions to select from on multiple pages or even just scraping that idea all together and make another menu system with the character names for users to select from which appears more cleanly and professional.
animations wise, Miss Landa's cleaning doggy style scene looks weird because her legs are disproportionate to her upper body size and the cycling animation of how her shirt goes up and down on it's own looks weird. Also, I didn't know they made fishnet pant's with flares and on closer inspection did her tit just fall out of her bra while she was cleaning??
Also, Miss Landa looked old when you initially meet her during the start of the MC's day at the school. However, later on when she's in her bedroom checking out her underwear she looks a lot younger when looking at her face. It might be a good idea to compare them and consider optimizing the images so that the way she looks is consistent with her current age range.
In all honesty, apart from what I mentioned previously I liked both versions of the story but I can understand your reasoning for making the changes that you did.
I can't provide too much detail without providing spoilers into the plot, but the second personality for all intents and purposes is still the mc it's just another version of himself. Normally the mc is kind, thoughtful and conscientious. His other personality is aggressive, forceful, and uninhibited. It's still the same MC, so the "ntr" argument doesn't really seem fair.
I was considering the idea that it was his mother being protective of her son through a telekinetic approach. However, that might be tough to spin later if the dev decides to kill off the mother.