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Ok, if the MC isn't watching the scene, why do we have to watch it?
Quite frankly, the hideous tattoos on the MC from the sample screenshots is stopping me from trying this out.
Something like the ones the Yakuza games used would've been much easier on the eyes.
Best of luck for your game though, look forward to your future games after this game is completed.
Something like the ones the Yakuza games used would've been much easier on the eyes.
Best of luck for your game though, look forward to your future games after this game is completed.
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In that scene there is a phone call between two characters. That's why I wanted to show both scenes. If this scene bothers you, there is a poll on my patreon about the scene that is currently there, you can take the poll. I apologize if this scene bothered you.
- Jun 26, 2018
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I just watched the scene and I really don't see what the game gains by including it, it's not necessary at all and all it can do is piss off the game's player base. In fact I would completely remove Daisy from the game.
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I think you need to make the MCs head a bit bigger, it seems too small for his body, or is it just me. Plus, yeah man Daisy, I don't want sloppy second's bro. But as long as she is not a LI, I don't care.
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May want to hire someone to proofread localization or get community help. There are a few places where you use "him" when referring to an identified female character instead of "her" and vice versa. he/him/his = male vs she/her/hers = female.
There are some places that are not translated such as meeting Nadia "Merhaba ben Nadia. Nasilsin?"
The unknown knite at the start states "..Running away changes nothing. The result is interchangeable." the correct sentence would be "...Running away will change nothing. The result will be the same."
When Talking to Nia the first time there are multiple places where t is used instead of "the" MC: "is that t manager?"
When meeting Adele in the classroom for the first time she says "I had no intention of intervening, but I cannot ignore his rude behavior." in this case the correction should be, "I had no intention of intervening, but I cannot ignore your rude behavior." The original makes Benjamin as rude when Adele is defending him, instead of the MC as rude.
This should be "I thought I told you not to make a scene!" the current one is contradicting what happened as she did in fact make a scene. There are a few other dialogues in the game where there are similar contradictions in meaning.
You also have some places where characters repeat themselves or multiple characters stating the same thing just slightly different in the next frame, this does not add any information nor does it make an impact and just bloats the game's dialogue into feeling repetitive.
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The story overall so far is decent, this post is mainly a critique to help you improve your skills and the game and not a negative take. You are doing a decent job overall even though its not your primary language, keep up the practice and looking forward to future updates.
May want to hire someone to proofread localization or get community help. There are a few places where you use "him" when referring to an identified female character instead of "her" and vice versa. he/him/his = male vs she/her/hers = female.
There are some places that are not translated such as meeting Nadia "Merhaba ben Nadia. Nasilsin?"
The unknown knite at the start states "..Running away changes nothing. The result is interchangeable." the correct sentence would be "...Running away will change nothing. The result will be the same."
When Talking to Nia the first time there are multiple places where t is used instead of "the" MC: "is that t manager?"
When meeting Adele in the classroom for the first time she says "I had no intention of intervening, but I cannot ignore his rude behavior." in this case the correction should be, "I had no intention of intervening, but I cannot ignore your rude behavior." The original makes Benjamin as rude when Adele is defending him, instead of the MC as rude.
This should be "I thought I told you not to make a scene!" the current one is contradicting what happened as she did in fact make a scene. There are a few other dialogues in the game where there are similar contradictions in meaning.
You also have some places where characters repeat themselves or multiple characters stating the same thing just slightly different in the next frame, this does not add any information nor does it make an impact and just bloats the game's dialogue into feeling repetitive.
Example:
The story overall so far is decent, this post is mainly a critique to help you improve your skills and the game and not a negative take. You are doing a decent job overall even though its not your primary language, keep up the practice and looking forward to future updates.
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Thank you very much. I will definitely take the things I mentioned into consideration and fix them.
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Daisy's model seemed nice. sucks we dont get her. and had to see that scene
What is the point of letting Ben see all the girls naked? Immediately kills the vibe.
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Although there are some mistakes, I think you are doing a good job, as far as I understand the first game, there may be mistakes, but I trust that you will fix them in the future and give us a great show, all my support is with you, I hope you will come to good places.
Did bro get his nipples blown off in Vietnam or something?
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Wait, is this the game where the Mc returns after intensive training with his sensei and takes revenge on his mother, step brother and his blue haired ex girlfriend was it? or am I mixing it up with another game? that game was amazing.
Edit:Can someone please help remind me what game that is if you could. It had a similar mc as this. It's been a while since I have played that and I can't seem to remember the name
Edit:Can someone please help remind me what game that is if you could. It had a similar mc as this. It's been a while since I have played that and I can't seem to remember the name
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damn I just wasted 10 minutes looking for the name of the game. you were quicker than me