You should take a look at went wrong here:
Keep that feeling alive, it will be present until the end. That's all you'll take from this.
No. That isn't even the problem. The writing is VERY bad. The pace of the story is too fast. The plot is very thin, almost not there even. This isn't because of bad English, this is because of bad writing.
I know Well, I also play to many of them. (like DOD,TON,etc.)
Good. Maybe this will go somewhere.
Well, yeah I just did it for Dora but it's look good so I added it. Also, I already say if I find a proofreader. I will update you in a couple of weeks.Good. Maybe this will go somewhere.
There's also the Beds on the lest scene with Dora, they changed size a few times, but mostly they are gigantic.
Look, the problem is NOT Linda's breasts. Is that every woman looks like this:
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One or two can be fun. ALL of them... no.
But your biggest problem is the writing, really.
Peace
the main reason why we are all here, the grammar and the depth of the stories. yes
Its like the meat of the sandwich, like sure two pieces of bread and some veggies will fill you up and for some it's very tasty, but for a lot of people, it misses something. And good writing is like that meat in that sandwich.the main reason why we are all here, the grammar and the depth of the stories. yes
