Why did you (as the reader) think that they were mentioning checking their eyes in the first place? Isnt it mentioned in game that the eyes are how lune are identified? Either way the larger issue is that in the span of a few seconds despite nothing changing the MC suddenly goes from "i have no feelings about these bank robbers trying to check my eyes" to "oh shit these bank robbers asking to check my eyes must be looking for a lune!" why did he not react like that the first time?I would have to disagree with this. You make it sound weird, but that was the first time the MC encountered his enemies that are out to get him, and this is in a dangerous situation. I didn't find it weird at all. I guess it's just a difference in opinions. I played tons of porn games already and this is one of the good ones story wise. My only problem is the really early parts, but it's not that big of a deal if you're playing the latest updates.
Maybe the overall story is better but a lot of the moment to moment stuff is nothing special and the stuff that goes "beyond" the average porn game story tends to not hold up to scruitny