In my opinion I love your idea and I think it's cute and wonderful, keep at it make it a romance concept with slice of life.
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Disappointing. The art is cute. The school setting ... I suppose it's fine, even if a bit cliché. Setting remains very superficial at this stage, and the way characters seem way too ignorant about basic things (... so they can be explained to the player) feels cheap.
It's let down by the writing though. My old arch-enemy, run-on sentences, yet again return. Sentences are ended with a full stop or connected with a conjunction. They are not just randomly put one after another with commas not-separating them.
Just as bad are some of the narrative decisions. Getting an info dump on the bunny girl's brother, for example, which ... thoroughly baffling characterization of this character. Or the utterly bizarre reaction by the protagonist after breaking a wand (which, I will point out, he was perfectly ready to do just 5 minutes earlier with the brother ...) where you then get a load of "well you see you are thechosen one it's all super mysterious" and that's it afterwards. ^^
Naw. Can't say this works for me.
It's let down by the writing though. My old arch-enemy, run-on sentences, yet again return. Sentences are ended with a full stop or connected with a conjunction. They are not just randomly put one after another with commas not-separating them.
Just as bad are some of the narrative decisions. Getting an info dump on the bunny girl's brother, for example, which ... thoroughly baffling characterization of this character. Or the utterly bizarre reaction by the protagonist after breaking a wand (which, I will point out, he was perfectly ready to do just 5 minutes earlier with the brother ...) where you then get a load of "well you see you are the
Naw. Can't say this works for me.
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The writing of this game is a prime example of having good ideas and poor execution. The dev just needs to take some time to think about how the situations they imagine would naturally unfold. Dev has a grasp on dialogue but pacing is a mess, almost nonexistent.
Give people more context. Mebbe give the MC more mental capacity and some observation skills. If I were in his shoes I would think the girls I've met so far are very forward and perhaps ask Miel if it's normal to get asked to bang mid introduction. Don't get me wrong, I'd be hard pressed to resist Skye, I'm still a red blooded man after all. I would however wonder if she's dangerously interested or just easy the whole time.
And the scene with the tiger girl, Why the hell is intervening in that scene an option? It's consensual, they're obviously very familiar with each other and...just why? Don't deny me telling off that asshat of a professor and then give me the option to interrupt those two.
Please work on the MC, he's got mad window licker vibes and it's always a terrible combo with the CHOSEN ONE! cliche. Also I hope the dev is alright with constructive(?) criticism...they're likely to be seeing quite a bit.
Give people more context. Mebbe give the MC more mental capacity and some observation skills. If I were in his shoes I would think the girls I've met so far are very forward and perhaps ask Miel if it's normal to get asked to bang mid introduction. Don't get me wrong, I'd be hard pressed to resist Skye, I'm still a red blooded man after all. I would however wonder if she's dangerously interested or just easy the whole time.
And the scene with the tiger girl, Why the hell is intervening in that scene an option? It's consensual, they're obviously very familiar with each other and...just why? Don't deny me telling off that asshat of a professor and then give me the option to interrupt those two.
Please work on the MC, he's got mad window licker vibes and it's always a terrible combo with the CHOSEN ONE! cliche. Also I hope the dev is alright with constructive(?) criticism...they're likely to be seeing quite a bit.
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Hello! Coder/Writer here! I’m sorry you didn’t enjoy my story or the way certain things were handled. This is the first project I’ve personally written, so I apologize if the current structure feels rough or isn’t to your taste. With each chapter and version, I’m constantly revisiting and refining the dialogues, Miel’s first interaction was actually much more straightforward in an older version!
I appreciate your feedback and completely understand if this project isn’t your jam. I hope you have lots of fun with other projects, and maybe even with ours once it’s out of development.
Best regards,
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Hi! Coder/Writer here! First of all, thank you for trying our game! As I continue developing the dialogue, I constantly go back to earlier sections to fix and refine them so everything feels more natural. Unfortunately, before this project I didn’t have much real experience writing a story (Especially in English, since it isn’t our main language, we sometimes struggle to make the dialogue feel deeper through word choice), so I apologize if the first chapters feel a bit rough around the edges. As I keep learning and improving my storytelling, my goal is to make every dialogue feel more natural and engaging.
As for the context, we honestly didn’t think people would really care about why Skye acts the way she does, or about deeper story details in general. Only recently did we start working on the overall story structure in a more in depth way, since we originally assumed people just wanted to jump in and keep going, so I'm happy to hear you would enjoy knowing more!
Regarding the dialogue options you’re absolutely right. I should add more direct responses to some choices. As for Talia’s scene, she isn’t enjoying the situation, which is why I included the option to stop it for players who would rather not see her in an unpleasant scenario.
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I see where you're coming from about Talia now that you've responded. It came off more like she was trying to please her partner and he was just being a dick to her. In and out of reality that is a fairly typical example of an intimate relationship (not my kind) so I just registered them as a fairly normal somewhat unhappy couple.
I do appreciate hearing back about what I posted too. I'm genuinely interested in seeing more of your game, I hope you're enjoying making it and good luck.
I do appreciate hearing back about what I posted too. I'm genuinely interested in seeing more of your game, I hope you're enjoying making it and good luck.
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Well Tiger girl is dead. What is the point of showing LI's getting fucked by other people I don't get it. It just ruins the LI I have no interest in her now.
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Every love interest is skippable! We make routes for everyone to enjoy, so if one isn’t your cup of tea, you can just skip her!
Some people enjoy muscle mommies, some femdom, some want a revenge story, there is something for everyone and we plan to make many more interactions with many other girls! If that part truly bothers you because of the act itself, we can probably add a second option that prevents the entire scene from happening. We want players to be able to choose for themselves after all! (you would save her the embarassment of having such a bad partner anyway)
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honestly it's baffling that y'all even put that scene in there. It is pretty common knowledge that NTR and NTR-adjacent things like that instantly kills any involved and can push people from the story as a whole.
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Thank you for the feedback!
We originally based this route on something we’d seen another well known game do, but we didn’t realize it was such a widely disliked category. We’ll be releasing a quick patch to make that scene completely avoidable.
Players who enjoy the “stealing the kind girl from a bad person” route and exploring how that dynamic plays out will still be able to do so! For players who may have peeked but didn’t want to see the characters or didn’t want them to have intercourse we’ll be adding an alternate route so they can continue without engaging with that content!
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. Downloading issues? Look here.In so far, I gotta say I enjoy the story, even if it does feel like the pacing is a bit rushed, and a lot of the choices lead to similar outcomes.
Looking forward to the future of this game's development. Out of all the girls' designs, I gotta admit I like Feafy's design the most. Bookworms are the best, bonus points if they're still innocent.
Regardless, if you're seeing this dev, I hope you have a smooth and pleasant time developing this game.
Looking forward to the future of this game's development. Out of all the girls' designs, I gotta admit I like Feafy's design the most. Bookworms are the best, bonus points if they're still innocent.
Regardless, if you're seeing this dev, I hope you have a smooth and pleasant time developing this game.
rogokin
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Me as well but not at the cost of watching the LI getting fucked by someone else.
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No worries at all! We’ve added an alternative introduction to that scene where the boyfriend’s behavior
Letting the scene play out will give more context to why their relationship doesn’t work, but choosing to intervene means you can protect her first time. Both paths are valid, and the story still works even if they never have sex!
Our goal is for everyone to enjoy the story in a way that feels right to them. If that moment was stopping someone from fully enjoying Talia’s revenge arc, adding a secondary path was an easy and worthwhile choice for us!