VN Ren'Py Abandoned Lust Ascension Story [v0.2a] [Merlinfate]

[RPJames]

So far it seems ok, but I do recommend that you search through your story for the name Jack and replace it with the variable you set up. That way the game uses the name the user enters instead of a hard-coded name.

Also, there are some grammar issues, but that could be fixed easily enough.

 

[Deleted member 21439]

Younger sister is 18 but step-sister is 19? can someone explain?

 

[RPJames]

Younger sister is 18 but step-sister is 19? can someone explain?

She could be the stepdad's daughter from a previous marriage or woman.

The sister is from the original missing dad. I am guessing.

 

[HorizonD]

Hm, the start reminds me of another game.
Nevermind, go for it. Looks interesting.

 

[Deleted member 21439]

At least its fappable

 

[Deleted member 21439]

She could be the stepdad's daughter from a previous marriage or woman.

The sister is from the original missing dad. I am guessing.

That's why its weird cause the step sis is older than younger sister. If step sis was born first, did the mom go back to the dad to get fucked again?

 

[Deleted member 21439]

Hm, the start reminds me of another game.
Nevermind, go for it. Looks interesting.

Bastard Girls?

 

[I.W.]

Its cool, has a nice concept. I'd like to see the script revised version but good start.

 

[I.W.]

That's why its weird cause the step sis is older than younger sister. If step sis was born first, did the mom go back to the dad to get fucked again?

it is possible that during the however many years his mom and stepdad were together she was pregnant prior to the dad leaving and stepdad arriving with his daughter.

 

[HorizonD]

Bastard Girls?

No, Sins of the Father. It's pretty similar.

Forgot to add this for the Dev:

You must be registered to see the links

This machine translator is not perfect but a good one. Try it.

 

[RPJames]

it is possible that during the however many years his mom and stepdad were together she was pregnant prior to the dad leaving and stepdad arriving with his daughter.

That is how I see it.. lol

 

[I.W.]

No, Sins of the Father. It's pretty similar.

Forgot to add this for the Dev:

You must be registered to see the links

This machine translator is not perfect but a good one. Try it.

Is that a deep learning translator??

 

[HorizonD]

I don't know how exactly it works. This is how they describe it.

Artificial intelligence for languages
DeepL develops artificial intelligence for understanding and translating texts.

 

[Deleted member 21439]

it is possible that during the however many years his mom and stepdad were together she was pregnant prior to the dad leaving and stepdad arriving with his daughter.

That totally slipped my mind. Thanks for clearing that up

 

[darkoraclegirl]

Barely five minutes into the game and already the spelling and grammar mistakes are bugging me. And I'm horrible with both spelling and grammar in the long run.

 

[ToXical]

Please add patch with 'the good stuff', otherwise unfortunately not gonna bother with this one

 

[I.W.]

Please add patch with 'the good stuff', otherwise unfortunately not gonna bother with this one

What's this "good stuff" you speak of?

 

[Papa Ernie]

This is confusing.. it tagged incest but he lives with his adoptive family and no incest patch. There are some incest game in this forum that doesn't tagged as incest but it has. I guess i'll try it and see if you can edit the relationship in-game.

F95zone uses this definition for it's incest tag.

 

[Halfelf]

ok like i have seen already i agree with the name thing Jack was mentioned several times when i named the MC myself so that was a little off putting. And the grammar was bad as well in alot of places. But over all i thought it was a good game. And one other thing what if i didnt want to go home to have a coffee dang it i wanted to go to a coffee shop geez.

 

[tonny]

sex scene in airplane only switching between 2 pics,whn she is riding you, no movement like when Mc watches his mom. that is crap, dont understand games where anything but the sex gets movement/animated... sooo crappy work or is it just the dev being too lazy? might as welll just do a comic..