VN Ren'Py Abandoned Master of Dark Arts [v0.42a Test build] [Moda Softworks]

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Sunny29

Newbie
Jun 3, 2018
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Okay I played it to see the Indian element if there was any. I don't think you need any help there, so far there is little to no callbacks to it. You are good.

Pro's:

Love the artwork, story, renders and characters. Someone has put a lot of work in this and it is really commendable.
The 'magic' element, the extras at the party and the final scene shows how much effort you have put in. Great job!

Con's:

1. Not much story to comment on as of yet, I'll wait for a few releases.

2. I would love to see the 'Health' meter in use. I know it's a kinetic novel, seems like only on romance but I would also love some side characters to add to the conflict of romance.

3. I think you might have missed an edit:
"Go ahead give your best shot, pussy like you can't hurt almighty Arideath."

Should be: "Go ahead, give your best shot. A pussy like you can't hurt the almighty Arideath."
Or you could go with: "Go ahead, give your best shot Pussy! Like you could ever hurt the almighty Arideath."

If you need any suggestions or help with writing you can ping me. I love creative writing and I would do it for free.

Cheers and good luck on your amazing project!
 

Sleeping In Pieces

Active Member
Mar 16, 2019
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I got a simple grammar tip:

If your sentence has a did or didn't the following verb should just be in present tense.
ex:
did you thought think
did you made make out
 
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loikl

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Feb 14, 2018
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"This game is not for NTR, Cuckold, Sharing, Harem, School Setting, Corruption fans."

Funny message :ROFLMAO:, but it is good to know from the beginning which is the direction a game is going to take and make it clear, I hope more devs would do that.

Good luck, I'll keep that in mind.(y)
 

KaneB.C.

Member
Donor
Jan 22, 2018
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Love the game so far. Keep up the good work.
Two things though. Hope it wont be abandoned before it gets somewhere. wait time for update is not 4 months.
 
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Bolero

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Jan 20, 2018
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Quality game. The main girl is gorgeous, and the renders are good. It will probably be a slow burn, but i think it suits the game. I do not see the mc fucking such an angel before there is more connection between them.
 

ddakkal

Newbie
Jun 23, 2018
23
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"
- This game is not for NTR, cuckold, sharing, harem, school setting, corruption fans.
- This is a story first, nudity and sex later kind of game.
- Sex scenes are given as rewards, its not a fuck anything that moves game.
"

Finally some of those types of games! sounds perfect to me!
Thanks for sharing.
 
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