Ren'Py Mobile of Desires [Ch.6.46.9] [QuantumBunnyNovels]
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memeLordo
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I like the current trajectory of the story. Usually cheaters appeal in from of their partners in a light, caring facade, but when the problems, strike, instead of speaking clearly to their partners, they tend to express their true emotions on the side, becoming completely different person, that tries not to get themselves caught. This double edge is what keeps cheating story exiting (and painful). And so far you, dev, managed to represent it accurate. Maybe too accurate. Speaking from the experience 
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.I will wath your career with great interest.
QuantumBunnyNovels
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July 5th. But I'm completely remaking the game by adding NTS and love branch, so I'll post here at once new unmade game at once remade first and second chapter
The story development is good. What's here is elegantly presented and reads like a compelling and surprisingly believable relationship drama. For the sake of just creative momentum, I would probably urge the author to continue with writing a story that they were satisfied with first. Yes, it means ignoring the rest of my own rant. Don't focus on creating additional branches or populating other possibilities. Just deliver good or better scripts.
Afterwards, leverage the scaffolding of stats that you've created, and then add in possibilities.
The existence of the meta statistics were enough to get my interested into the choices and even into seeing what was happening under the hood. They are definitely a smart inclusion. I do agree with some previous comments where the BJ in plot 8 seems forced. There's plenty of outs where an NTR-optional set of activities could be insinuated instead if the stats are leveraged.
More logic leveraging the statistics would be great. There's a few ways statistics could be used to mitigate or direct different results. Arousal becomes a feature that builds up over time when the player makes any decision, and once it reaches a particular point, she decides then to commit to an activity.
With high corruption, Lucy could indulge her urges in a publishing to an OFs. Low bond she commits to cheating. High arousal, but no relief at the end of the plot might result in a reward of a "sexting" session, justifying an arousal reset when going into a future plot, keeping things almost episodic. Given the current framework, one could probably plan for 3 possible outcomes during any given episode, all the while avoiding branching story complexity.
I, generally, hate renpy vn's. But this one is rather good as it is so far. So, doubly good on you
Afterwards, leverage the scaffolding of stats that you've created, and then add in possibilities.
The existence of the meta statistics were enough to get my interested into the choices and even into seeing what was happening under the hood. They are definitely a smart inclusion. I do agree with some previous comments where the BJ in plot 8 seems forced. There's plenty of outs where an NTR-optional set of activities could be insinuated instead if the stats are leveraged.
More logic leveraging the statistics would be great. There's a few ways statistics could be used to mitigate or direct different results. Arousal becomes a feature that builds up over time when the player makes any decision, and once it reaches a particular point, she decides then to commit to an activity.
With high corruption, Lucy could indulge her urges in a publishing to an OFs. Low bond she commits to cheating. High arousal, but no relief at the end of the plot might result in a reward of a "sexting" session, justifying an arousal reset when going into a future plot, keeping things almost episodic. Given the current framework, one could probably plan for 3 possible outcomes during any given episode, all the while avoiding branching story complexity.
I, generally, hate renpy vn's. But this one is rather good as it is so far. So, doubly good on you
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Thank you for the detailed answer, I plan to completely. Change chapters 1 and 2 by adding the NTS and love branch I am also currently working on chapter 3. On July 5th I will publish here updated chapters 1 and 2 with new branches, and chapter 3 will be available to subscribers on Patreon
Looks great so far, putting this on save for later updates. Unfortunate that you'll be going to the paths route, it bogs down games greatly and reduces frequency of updates for things people want/came to the game for. But, hey, you'll be able to get a larger potential fan base and can extend subscriptions much longer. When are you adding Femdom path/route with Scat? j/k
A little note though idk if it's been mentioned before; fix your preview photos, having to click to view and close on each one instead of just pressing left etc. is annoying.
A little note though idk if it's been mentioned before; fix your preview photos, having to click to view and close on each one instead of just pressing left etc. is annoying.
QuantumBunnyNovels
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Don't worry. I'm on schedule and the new part will be out on the 5th.
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