Well, as a criticism, I would say that the faces of the MC and the women should be better.
Cynthia needs to touch up something, just her face.
Jacquelyn too.
Jennifer too.
Katia is fine, if she can be retouched a little bit better, but it's not a priority, she can be left for the last.
Lauren, she needs a few small touch-ups, but it's not a priority either.
Maria, several touch-ups.
Meghan, Mom, Talia and Teri don't need a lot of retouching, they can be improved but for the last ones together with Katia, it's not necessary, you can leave them like that and it will be acceptable.
Zoe needs a lot of retouching.
Josephine also needs a lot of retouching.
Catherine also needs a lot of retouching.
The rest of the girls need a little touch up, it's secondary, not for the last but it's not the most important thing.
The main character needs URGENT touch ups, he's supposed to be a young guy in his twenties and he looks more like a 50 year old guy.
The story for my taste is going well.