- Nov 2, 2022
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Finished the game. No major issues found. Mostly just the stuff everyone else has brought up with the UI/character cards. I did notice a missing(or misnamed) image at the end of the Yuna morning BJ scene. Definitely could use a proofreader going over the script, but I probably notice more than most, being a proofreader.Please do let me know if you come across anything.![]()
Overall the writing is very good, but I did notice a lot of missing words, a lot of extra words, and a fair few misspellings. My schedule is pretty full at the moment, but feel free to hit me up when episode 3's script is done. I may be more available by then, if you're interested.
On a side note, that conversation with Emily would have gone very different, if it were up to me. Something more along the lines of "You have one hour to be packed and on your way out of the state. If anyone sees you in the same time zone as my sister, ever again, I'll put you in the ground faster than you can blink." I get that she needs to stick around for story reasons, but I don't think I've ever hated a female character as much as I hate her. I've done unspeakable things to people that tried to hurt my sister. A line doesn't exist, that I wouldn't cross for her sake.