Here's my thoughts.
Positive:
-The girls look good. Especially the library girl Annie and Ms. Collins.
-This had quite a lot of content for a first version.
-It's nowhere new story-wise, but it works out well so far.
Negative:
-The renders are not always showing what the story explains. Like in Rin's dream when her hand is inside her pants, but not in the picture, or in the closet, or when we met Annie (she supposedly looks away shyly, but we don't see that and yet later on, we have a render where she does exactly that, so why not use that in the library as well).
-It's really true that there aren't enough choices, at least we should have been able to decide which dream to visit first It really mattered in the way, that I found the story less engaging, because I had no actual influence on it)
Apart from that, a few more points.
I'd like me some of that Ms. Collins, she's fucking hot, but not really as her sub. Either consensual on equal terms or the MC being the domme.
Is the BFF actually the douche bag David from Dirty Pool and he sent the MC a picture of his younger sister?
The gift from the goddess is a good method to bring up incest sooner, but I like how the mother feels repulsed by her own actions.
That's what would normally happen in a situation like in the game, so it works.
Yeah, well.... the writing. It's obvious for me that Pirot King isn't a bad writer, so much is evident, even in the English game version, but there are still many avoidable errors.
It has been pointed out, that there will likely be people in the community who would proofread, so it's sad that so few devs seem to be willing to look.
The game is a solid effort, with the potential to become really good, but only if the dev keeps at it, provides regular updates with a size that offers enough content. More renders and a proofreader would also help.