The first ones detail seems to be a bit drowned out by the dark hair like she wants to gouge out your eyes...... That's not to say it does not look good but she with the dark hair feels like she is here to steal your soul with that look on her face.... HAHAWhich is my regret for thinking about her concept a tad too late.
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But I can darken it out a little more like this:
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