a lot of suggestions so here's mine. only consider the meta-criticisms: few save spots/no recollection room, very short/abbreviated game. your taste is good. you should be confident in your own story as you expand your game
yeah, so I really like this suggestion. Doing it in this way would actually fix an issue I would've had further down the line where you would get an option to let the GF go on her own. I'm a big fan of the "minigame" where you have to go around the map looking for a love interest that's doing something in secret. So I was having trouble figuring out how exactly I'd do that. This way would give me a few options. I'm already thinking of some scenarios where such build ups can happen. And it'll make the progression I had in mind make so much more fucking sense LMFAO. Great suggestion.well if u want suggestions I would say that u should "not" allow any sex with "others" until we reach the "free-roam" part.
what I mean is, that when we finally can walk around and also decide (as I hope there will be choices) it would be nice that the MC can be involved with the whole thing.
example:
- u and GF go to the cinema and theres this dude that u notice are looking at your girl
now u can decide to tease him, maybe u start kissing her and (depending where this dude sits) u allow some skin, maybe u lift her skirt or u show a bit of boobs. but u can also decide to "not" do that.
if u "activate" this dude, there will be future events with him, maybe next time u approach him and tell him to sit together, and while u watch the movie u both touch her legs.
and so on.
the thing is that it should feel as a progress and that u give a bit of your GF to "whomever" slowly.
surely u can do the same for school. also here, "levels", we start slow, as she already show booty, we can use that to tease the boys. but to take it further, there need to be planning and objectives and targets. it can not just be "everybody" as it seems as mess and hedonistic. surely, as an end-game route, why not! but its nice with progress and see her allow more and more instead of everything in one go.
giving choices will make more people enjoy your game. some will want to make her a slut fast, some will want to be picky and only allow specific dudes, or maybe even allow to a certain point and never take it to fucking (maybe that is enough to fantasies for the couple and not take it further)
but if thats not what u have in mind and more of a "kinetic"-novel with rpgm-system, u can still create progress that makes sense.
Yep! I agree. As of right now, I'll keep going with her having unprotected sex with her ex just to finish up what I have in mind. I think it'll hit even harder after considering other options for buildup, where she'll use condoms with everyone else before. (Yuuji's the main story, just in case I'm not beating a dead horse here LOL). It's just what I find hot.This is a promising game. I liked the demo so far. The art is really nice despite being AI. I also like the characters overall. Hopefully the pacing will be improved over time and there will be more player agency. But overall it hit the right triggers for me, which is not something all NTR/NTS games can do.
Personally I would disagree a bit with people on the whole other men fucking the gf without condom while MC can't being a bad thing however, as I do like the humiliation/tease/denial type of netorase, and this sort of thing can be a part of it, so I liked it. But as it is right now I agree it doesn't make much sense given her reasons.
I think it could be kept in (maybe with some kind of choice given to player to allow it or not beforehand, like when they are setting the rules, so people can avoid it if they want to) and then play up the tease/humiliation aspect more if player opts to allow it, or even have a full on denial route if that's something you might be willing to do, along with some kind of more pure swinging route.
I put out this prologue exactly because I wanted productive critiquing so I'm glad to hear it.The character interactions are nice. The writing isn't inherently bad or anything, it's pacing is just absolutely all over the place, lol. The core content is enjoyable, but the intro feels like a cinematic sequence that has skipped over the real intro, the beginning, the middle, and has now thrust us immediately into the endgame, without much in the way of steady plot buildup. The art is fine. Lots of NTR/S games have AI, and I think of all the different genre types, having AI art is the least problematic in this genre, because the most important part isn't the porn as much as everything else that leads into it.
You have the potential to make a good game, and I enjoyed what I played, so don't take this as me being hostile or anything, but rather as productive critiquing. But the broader plot could probably do with a re-write white keeping the character interactions, throw in a few extra side characters, even non-sexual ones, to add an extra social dynamic and add to the excitement of some scenes. Add some non-sexual character interactions between the two main characters while maintaining a balance with the sex stuff so that it doesn't feel grindy. I think a general rule for porn games should be that the sex scenes should feel like a payoff for the plot's writing, and this is especially true for NTR/S stories. If you jump too much from sex scene to sex scene without buildup between, it comes across as crude and gets boring. I've seen this with other games to their detriment.
The whole unprotected sex and creampie thing is fine. The denial element to it has it's charms. But I wouldn't recommend having their first cucking event sex with another guy+unprotected+creampie all in one go. There's 3 new juicy plot elements here and you blew your load, so to speak, in one go. Should be sex > plot buildup > unprotected > plot buildup > creampie. That way you get 3 plateau moments rather than just the one. Having them all in one go doesn't make that 1 moment 3x better, and gives you a kind of whiplash feeling.
I hope you continue with development, and good luck!
This is/was planned! I'm shit at making maps, so right now there aren't any bus or train scenes (even though i want them), so that's later down the line.Loving the start of your game, good luck with it. The gf is such a cutie and I love cuties. Would love to see her bending over in that schoolgirl uniform wearing transparent panties, flashing the class. How about a parttime job in a cafe with very handy customers, or better yet in a sleazy bar where she has to wear a skimpy outfit to entice tips from her groping and molesting drunk customers? Her bf (us) sometimes visits her and has to endure her being groped by other guys, and she loves knowing that you are watching her and she even enjoys it, knowing it torches you.
As she gets more corrupted, she even starts to accept money from customers for special favors in the restroom, and you spy on her and she knows you are watching.
On the train or bus, she flashes riders and sometimes gets groped right in front of you, even when you go to the movies, other guys are trying to get their hands on her.
Where's that second image from if I may ask?
HahahaCurrently shitting myself reading all of these comments.
I see, i did say it might not be the case with this game, and apologize if what i said was a bit harsh, just that it happens so much with this niche that we all get kinda doubtful.I do not plan on monetizing the game in any way! This is a learning experience for me, so that's my reward for making the game.
283582Where's that second image from if I may ask?