I beat it with no errors, maybe I was lucky.
The writing is quite improved in the revision, the idea that Dee is her own character, that she only cares about herself and that she is barely going to listen to you no matter what you choose was conveyed much better, I specially liked the part where its implied that "Dee" is becoming just another personality for her that she can turn on or off, she is so manipulative and devious and going insane in real time I love it. I still think you can do an even better job in this department but like I said it was really improved over version1.0, characters feel more defined and less like floating tags if you know what I mean.
Also funny thing the hottest sex scene for me ended up being Dee´s mom with her new female lover over the computer, I did not expect to be so turned on by that at all, amazing! I think you might have a knack for lesbian scenes specifically, you wrote very hot dialogue with Candy/Tiffany.
Oh yeah and thanks for the FMF recommendation at the end, I will be checking that one out today!