Nice graphics, nice story, not too much talking, but the grammatica could be a bit better. A few strange sentences, like:
- his new GF, tells him she should go back to his daughter, not her daughter ?
- and when monica come(s) back I'm sure (s)he'll be glad to know....
- he's leaving (he left?) as soon as I (I would say HE) regain(+ed) consciousness
I know dev is not english, doesn't matter, I wish I knew dev's language, because I she the misuse more often, I wonder what's in their language of that kind.