- Jul 14, 2020
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Very hopeful for the game, love the choice of models thus far and the UI has the same feel as other html games that are actually worth a damn. DEFINITELY needs proofreading, highly recommend fixing grammatical and continuity errors (Like Ashley's dialogue being stated as the MC's) before the next update. Would like to see mind break/slave content perhaps and definitely breeding (personally I think it just goes well with mind control themes.) Can't wait for the next update!
On the 2nd Hypnosis event with ashley, if you decide to play with her, she's supposed to say those lines, but your character does.
otherwise it's been pretty good so far, the UI looks neat and there aren't too many menus capsuled in each other.
What I think would be pretty interesting to take the game in is if there's more than just you being a hypnotist.
In the sense that they're rivals you need to hypnotise as well to not be busted and end up hypnotised yourself or lose some of your hypnotised lackeys.
What I'd also like, and I think is pretty standard is hypnotising the school staff, like teachers, the dean.
If you want to keep the number of capture targets low however, then I'd recommend different paths and different end states for the few targets, like lover hypnosis, cum dump slave, breeding sow slave, mindless puppet, stuff like that. different directions and different severity of hypnosis.
otherwise it's been pretty good so far, the UI looks neat and there aren't too many menus capsuled in each other.
What I think would be pretty interesting to take the game in is if there's more than just you being a hypnotist.
In the sense that they're rivals you need to hypnotise as well to not be busted and end up hypnotised yourself or lose some of your hypnotised lackeys.
What I'd also like, and I think is pretty standard is hypnotising the school staff, like teachers, the dean.
If you want to keep the number of capture targets low however, then I'd recommend different paths and different end states for the few targets, like lover hypnosis, cum dump slave, breeding sow slave, mindless puppet, stuff like that. different directions and different severity of hypnosis.
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Looks interesting, btw, this is the same dev as "Boring Days" so check that out too if you like this devs style.
Also to the dev, i believe you can get the game developer tag for your profile, need to ask one of the mods i think about how.
Also to the dev, i believe you can get the game developer tag for your profile, need to ask one of the mods i think about how.
Hello AntiMyx, I finished going through this demo and had some feedback for you:
- A good start, but it’s obviously really hard to tell how things will progress since there isn’t much content at the moment. Off the bat, I would say that the UI might need to be tweaked a bit for Quality-of-Life improvements, for example: having the option to go straight to the old building and not have to click through the backyard… but no major shortfalls as of now.
- The intro picture – you might want to consider cropping out the woman from the picture or using something else entirely. It gives the impression that she is one of MC’s friends and I kept waiting for her to speak. Also, Woody Harrelson isn’t exactly in the same age range as the rest, so he looks out of place amongst what are supposed to be teenagers. You might want to consider reusing this picture for later in the story, presumably for new characters. Now, if you should decide to keep the picture intact, you would probably need to come up with background for the girl: the first idea is Chad’s sister. That introduces her early on, and could be someone the MC has a crush on but was maybe too scared to ask out due to being friends with her brother. A second option could be Dean’s girlfriend, potentially opening up a storyline where the MC corrupts her as well.
- Landlady’s Husband – not a big problem, but something needs to be added to explain his absence. Even a simple: ‘they got divorced’ after Amy was born would be enough. He could come into the story later as someone that can also be sissified and/or cucked by the MC… or he could be dead - that works too, I guess.
- Hypnosis – this setup needs to be massaged just a bit. It feels like the MC is able to way too quickly grasp the fundamentals of setting up the effect, especially on their first try. You might want to add something like: “As you begin to speak, you almost feel like some outside force is guiding you to the correct words and phrases to make the hypnosis take effect. You’re not sure, but you think it might be the pendant itself.”
- Chad – two issues with this setup. The first, is that even if the MC chooses to corrupt Chad first, the dialog says that the MC already tested the process on someone else, presumably on the ‘landlady’ Melinda. This isn’t a huge thing, but if you feel that Meredith does indeed need to be the first test subject, then you need to make a scene where that actually happens first. The second revolves around Dean, specifically that he would be a loose end that might reveal the MC’s ‘powers’ to other people, especially after witnessing Chad’s first session. It would have been one thing if the action was ‘cluck like a chicken’, but it becomes a potentially major problem if the player chooses Trap content. Unless the MC is a total moron, I don’t think he would make such a mistake. I also don’t think forcing Chad to do a somersault to be that humiliating… clucking like a chicken and trying to lay an egg - now that might be a different story. I also want to bring up the sissifying in general – it often feels like a punishment given to male characters, with the trials and tribulation the character going through feeling way out of proportion to the ‘crime’. Now, this is a porn game and thus I don’t expect things too be too serious, but it would be nice if there was some reason that Chad is forced into modifying his gender beyond the MC being bored. Perhaps, have Chad instead being forced to tell the truth during the hypnosis session and the trap option will reveal that he is already wearing lady’s underwear. Or, if you prefer a more ‘punishment’ oriented style, have him be homo and transphobic beforehand, perhaps in a scene at school, perhaps towards another character not yet introduced. The MC decides to teach him a lesson and thus begins Chad’s transformation.
- Sep 16, 2018
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My author God fucking bless you html, with a sissification tag and its not the protagonis, you are a fucking hero in this delapidated world that for some reason is on a cucking and sissification spress
But praises aside...the game, its nice but i feel like the system is a little stiff you might wanna seee some other html games and take ref for transportation and design yours is a little raw, but well taking in consideration its just a demo its plenty good. now for the caracters, well i feel like the main caracter is not a very good chocie cause he is and has the looks of an adult, and from what i got it chad looks sitll remian to be seen as for the girl in school she could be a little younger looking like lana rhodes or riley but well thats my personal opnion.
Now about the story development:
1- i guess since its a demo you didn't dwell much on caracter development but you could give us preview of what caracters are before and after hypnosis, so we can make a clear distinction of what changed. For example the sis, from the scene where she intrudes the mc room and reads the book I took her has the bitch caracter, but she might not actually be. Give us some more interrections, like you could do a little period after we get the book where we have to study or something to learn hypnosis and during that time we can see how the other caracters are before hypno it will give a little more fulfillment after hypnotysing them, otherwise it will feel like every girl we hypnotized is just one more on the list, which could happen if the game has a lot of girl but there are only 4 targets in this case so making each just another is not good in my opnion. this leads to another point, how the hell is the protagonist first section so pro like, this guy is magician reincarnation or something cause he literally gets the book and the first time he does he is better than you could imagine a pro being and for the friend, i love when mc does sissification on friend but it is little of a dick move to do that for no reason at all, i mean you could like make him a very cheaky and annoying guy or maybe a very bad friend that stole our girl or something, or even that he has a girlfriend you like so for starters your goal is to hypno him to take his girl but well seeing the opportunity we change him to a sissy midway.
2-About the guy friend hypnosis, dunno if you plan on doing something like a futere antagonist or something but hypnotising your friend and showing them you have a magical book and watch that can give you supernatural like skill sounds like a massive idiot idea, in that case you could do fours ideas that wouldnt change much the game, or at least i think so, first is that when the mc gets the book he dosnt actually tell his firends and latter on just says he say a video on internet or something, so they wouldnt have a target to steal. second is very simple, when you hypnotize the guy, you instead or making him go to another room and steal undewear, which shows how powerfull the hypnosis can be you do something simple, like tell him to spill a secret and that can be he steals her undies , as for the other well you can add a little dialog in the end that the protagonist second friend asks if maybe the mc could hypnotize him to be confident, smarter or maybe fitter which would be the perfect way to trick the guy into a 'sissy training', and would correct the protagonist loose ends now everyone that knows about the book is already contained and he dosn't have to worry about being stolen, as for the last way its to leave as it is and later on make the second friend an antagonist in the future, where he steals the watch and book, and we defeat him, which would be the result of the mc being dumb and it is a cringe as fuck outcome but well its porn so....
but all the mentioned abovve can be atribuited to the game being a demo but like the game keep going author see you in the next update~
But praises aside...the game, its nice but i feel like the system is a little stiff you might wanna seee some other html games and take ref for transportation and design yours is a little raw, but well taking in consideration its just a demo its plenty good. now for the caracters, well i feel like the main caracter is not a very good chocie cause he is and has the looks of an adult, and from what i got it chad looks sitll remian to be seen as for the girl in school she could be a little younger looking like lana rhodes or riley but well thats my personal opnion.
Now about the story development:
1- i guess since its a demo you didn't dwell much on caracter development but you could give us preview of what caracters are before and after hypnosis, so we can make a clear distinction of what changed. For example the sis, from the scene where she intrudes the mc room and reads the book I took her has the bitch caracter, but she might not actually be. Give us some more interrections, like you could do a little period after we get the book where we have to study or something to learn hypnosis and during that time we can see how the other caracters are before hypno it will give a little more fulfillment after hypnotysing them, otherwise it will feel like every girl we hypnotized is just one more on the list, which could happen if the game has a lot of girl but there are only 4 targets in this case so making each just another is not good in my opnion. this leads to another point, how the hell is the protagonist first section so pro like, this guy is magician reincarnation or something cause he literally gets the book and the first time he does he is better than you could imagine a pro being and for the friend, i love when mc does sissification on friend but it is little of a dick move to do that for no reason at all, i mean you could like make him a very cheaky and annoying guy or maybe a very bad friend that stole our girl or something, or even that he has a girlfriend you like so for starters your goal is to hypno him to take his girl but well seeing the opportunity we change him to a sissy midway.
2-About the guy friend hypnosis, dunno if you plan on doing something like a futere antagonist or something but hypnotising your friend and showing them you have a magical book and watch that can give you supernatural like skill sounds like a massive idiot idea, in that case you could do fours ideas that wouldnt change much the game, or at least i think so, first is that when the mc gets the book he dosnt actually tell his firends and latter on just says he say a video on internet or something, so they wouldnt have a target to steal. second is very simple, when you hypnotize the guy, you instead or making him go to another room and steal undewear, which shows how powerfull the hypnosis can be you do something simple, like tell him to spill a secret and that can be he steals her undies , as for the other well you can add a little dialog in the end that the protagonist second friend asks if maybe the mc could hypnotize him to be confident, smarter or maybe fitter which would be the perfect way to trick the guy into a 'sissy training', and would correct the protagonist loose ends now everyone that knows about the book is already contained and he dosn't have to worry about being stolen, as for the last way its to leave as it is and later on make the second friend an antagonist in the future, where he steals the watch and book, and we defeat him, which would be the result of the mc being dumb and it is a cringe as fuck outcome but well its porn so....
but all the mentioned abovve can be atribuited to the game being a demo but like the game keep going author see you in the next update~
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- Dec 11, 2017
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I am wildly sorry for this English, but I do not speak English and this is google translation.
Okay, let's get to the essence of the message.
There will be voices, suggestions and explanations, I do not want to offend or hinder the development of this game.
For me personally, NTR for the sake of everything, just not him, it will be terrible, as for me this is one of the most terrible tags that exist, as for me the Sissification tag is very disorienting.
So I talked a little about the fears, I'll move on to my wishes, I wish the appearance of such characters as, Ava Addams (but in fact, everyone is probably already tired of her, she can be skipped in every game), I want to say that the teacher at school was Lana Rhoades, Sorry Riley Reid, but as for me one of the best, I want her as my best friend, or as a neighbor, better friend, Eva Elfie honestly don't know where, but just to be, Oh yes, this character, Maserati !!! She must be here, just a bomb, Angela White (But this is not in the next versions, well, as you please), and yes Codi Vore (maybe a nurse, hmm, I don’t know). these are my suggestions about the actors I would like to see.
Also, if you want I am ready to translate it into Russian, but even though I translate it from Russian into English, I can bring the text back to normal from English into Russian.
Thank you if you read this, good luck writer, although we didn't really see anything, but I liked it.
Okay, let's get to the essence of the message.
There will be voices, suggestions and explanations, I do not want to offend or hinder the development of this game.
For me personally, NTR for the sake of everything, just not him, it will be terrible, as for me this is one of the most terrible tags that exist, as for me the Sissification tag is very disorienting.
So I talked a little about the fears, I'll move on to my wishes, I wish the appearance of such characters as, Ava Addams (but in fact, everyone is probably already tired of her, she can be skipped in every game), I want to say that the teacher at school was Lana Rhoades, Sorry Riley Reid, but as for me one of the best, I want her as my best friend, or as a neighbor, better friend, Eva Elfie honestly don't know where, but just to be, Oh yes, this character, Maserati !!! She must be here, just a bomb, Angela White (But this is not in the next versions, well, as you please), and yes Codi Vore (maybe a nurse, hmm, I don’t know). these are my suggestions about the actors I would like to see.
Also, if you want I am ready to translate it into Russian, but even though I translate it from Russian into English, I can bring the text back to normal from English into Russian.
Thank you if you read this, good luck writer, although we didn't really see anything, but I liked it.
- Sep 1, 2017
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I tried it out with the online version and the text was a bit hard to read for my tired, old eyes.
You might want to use a heavier font that shows up better. The one you're using looks as if it's black, but it's so thin that it looks grey.
Looks like a decent, if abbreviated, start. It could use some fleshing out in the beginning. Right now, you're just dumped into the story with no background on the MC given. It's kind of like reading a book that's missing the first two chapters. (Yes, I know it's porn, but still...)
A proofreader is definitely needed.
You might want to use a heavier font that shows up better. The one you're using looks as if it's black, but it's so thin that it looks grey.
Looks like a decent, if abbreviated, start. It could use some fleshing out in the beginning. Right now, you're just dumped into the story with no background on the MC given. It's kind of like reading a book that's missing the first two chapters. (Yes, I know it's porn, but still...)
A proofreader is definitely needed.
This is a really good start! Much better than a lot of "demos" that get posted.
Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
I imagine you're planning to add more characters, maybe some classmates/ teachers?
Looking forward to seeing how this develops.
I imagine you're planning to add more characters, maybe some classmates/ teachers?
- Aug 8, 2020
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why no NTR?
NTR all the way!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
- Dec 11, 2017
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No, no, no, it's terrible, I don't want it, only if you can change"whether you want it or not".