Niels Holgersson
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I guess it's mostly just because to me, you can make the argument that Naomi or the male lead (Teach) are the protagonist depending on your perspective. Really the story is meant to be told from a third person perspective so I'd be more apt to say there are no protagonists haha.
I think it'd be fair to argue both ways or if anything lean more towards female protagonist since my writing style likes to put the females thoughts in the forefront.
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Great game! I would love to see the queen bee's best friend visit the basement as well.
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I am not quite sure why protags are even listed as it's a kinetic novel. There are no choices but it does change perspectives. So sometimes you see things from the MMC POV and other times it is the FMC's POV.
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Thanks for the update, want to say it's a important distinction: Physiological, not psychological.
Da_Pig
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Amazing work so far.
Words of praise are in the reviews, as this certainly deserves more exposure.
TLDR: Amazing pacing, exciting scenes - The chair! The Exam! Simply brilliant, from framing to poses and expressions that perfectly follow the writing which is spot on.
I just wish the red toy was animated as its 'beads' went in and out.
Only note:
I do feel like the narration would be better served by not being Naomi's, but written in the third person.
While in theory it makes absolute sense as combining narration and an insight into the changes she's going to go through, for me it is the only thing that breaks the otherwise perfect pace. This is more jarring in the corridor scene where it is also amplified by the relative lack different angles and visual reactions.
Since she recalls asking her self questions, these could come directly from her, with the relevant - and oh so usually well rendered - expressions and changes in body language which would elevate those scenes. Definitely not criticism, just a suggestion to do with as you please.
Can't wait for more.
Words of praise are in the reviews, as this certainly deserves more exposure.
TLDR: Amazing pacing, exciting scenes - The chair! The Exam! Simply brilliant, from framing to poses and expressions that perfectly follow the writing which is spot on.
I just wish the red toy was animated as its 'beads' went in and out.
Only note:
I do feel like the narration would be better served by not being Naomi's, but written in the third person.
While in theory it makes absolute sense as combining narration and an insight into the changes she's going to go through, for me it is the only thing that breaks the otherwise perfect pace. This is more jarring in the corridor scene where it is also amplified by the relative lack different angles and visual reactions.
Since she recalls asking her self questions, these could come directly from her, with the relevant - and oh so usually well rendered - expressions and changes in body language which would elevate those scenes. Definitely not criticism, just a suggestion to do with as you please.
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Can't wait for more.
I-Love-Adventure
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For me it 10/10 my type of shit for 100%, my only hope is if we already have some "edgy" staff, that naomi will grow some pubic hair (or even armpit hair 
) over time of her training, it would give us another nice fetish, give more "realism" to story and deeper immersion
) over time of her training, it would give us another nice fetish, give more "realism" to story and deeper immersion
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Ya I have to provide at least one protagonist label so I went with the multiple.
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Really appreciate the glowing review!
On your note regarding the narration, I understand where you are coming from. As you caught on, "white" text Naomi is hinted as being future Naomi. I am hoping that this decision will make more sense once I release future Acts, I'd love to hear your take on this subject once we (eventually) get further in.
Also nice point on the Women's thing. I've corrected it for the future release.
Da_Pig
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It was the least this game deserves, needs to find a bigger audience as while the theme is common it is also very rarely executed well, let alone THIS well.
Having just finished the update I feel the final narration was perfect. What could make a difference and set the tone and expectations would be starting with a small narration by Naomi before the first scene. Also, don't forget that besides your great writing you also have visual tools - in the Tit for Tat scene you describe her being thrown on the bed beautifully, but we've already seen that and got the same impact from the amazingly executed transition. Again, need to point out that this is nit picking of a beautifully put together project, and don't wish to derail the thread to that level when the game exceeds expectations.
Another small suggestion: Minimize camera movement speed on short animations. It does make them more impactful, but also a bit disorienting while reading.
Niels Holgersson
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Am having problems loading the game down, no matter who I load it from Windows blocks it saying there is a Trojan. Anyone else with the same problem?
Did you download it from GOfile? If so try something else as pixeldrain, it worked out for me. For some reason gofile files always pop up as trojan for me too