OuterRealm3D, just finished this version and man-o-man, I was impressed. I really love the incestous relationship with both the kids and the family coming to grips with their intimacy bonding. Please keep that as the main focus. The Veiled Garden, I'm kind of not too keen on, except I think this is your method for bringing Suzie deeper into the rabbit hole. Will she be used as a prostitute/agent to corrupt politicians, bishops/high ranking clergy, mafia bosses in order for the Garden to gain more power? Will they corrupt her even more by having her perform sex acts with animals? dogs, horses? If so, then all hail the Veiled Garden. Will they use mind control to bring her closer to her own family members? Just food for thought, my friends. Looking forward to the next version. 
One strong suggestion, it would be awesome if we could personalize the names of the main characters.