There are some things that really stick out visually, like the sad puppy facial expression that is used excessively and the MC's parents looking exactly the same and wearing the same clothes 10 years apart. It's not a simple fix, as it will basically require the dev to get better at DAZ, but there is something else you could remedy.
It's incredibly silly that MC's parents are perpetually referenced as Mama and Papa, even by the adult MC and the narration. You could give them a name... and let this grown ass hard boiled MC refer to them as Mother/Father instead of Mama/Papa.
It's incredibly silly that MC's parents are perpetually referenced as Mama and Papa, even by the adult MC and the narration. You could give them a name... and let this grown ass hard boiled MC refer to them as Mother/Father instead of Mama/Papa.