Just played most of it, so let me throw a bit of input and personal thoughts:
Pros:
- Liked very much the reworking of the map. Having all locales of the game in one main area to explore with a branch here and there is nice, convenient and i believe, should make exploration much more entertaining as you expand your adaptation.
- Making Anghie a childhood friend that sometimes crashes in the house's guest room because their moms are friends and ok with was a nice bit to make this story more your own. That said, Meghan just calls the MC "her sister's friend", when i would expect her to be more familiar than that, based on Anghie's dialogue. No big deal, just some tweaking in dialogues to make the idea of that connection more consistent/solid (maybe some joke comment from the MC about "his greatest motivation as a churchgoer" when staring at the booties of Anghie & her mom
).
- Same for the monstergirl cocksucker or the twin shopkeepers. Nothing too big, but those small bits help to make this remake more your own thing.
- Maria being turned into an airheaded hobo stoner, well, i loved it, really.
Bugs/Issues:
- Anghie speaks of finding her bra, but considering she's also without
panties, i think
underwear would be a more precise word choice.
- In the dialogue with Mom, she adresses the MC as Harold instead of the new name i picked (only one with this bug, afaik).
- The phantasmal chains still appear in the scene of the MC facefucking the monstergirl. Editing them out would be a good idea as they make no sense here.
- You find some cross in the abandoned bus, Ashley gives the MC a handjob? I think
a little more work in the exposition might be good, i guess...
- I really feel the lack of an intro, as it serves to set up a context and give us an idea of what kind of story we might be getting into. The Inner Voice saying "got to catch' em all, kiddo" just felt a little too vague/bland, more so with a porn game, "where banging anything you can get away with" is pretty much the one cosmic constant.
- If the MC watch Alexa in the night, from then on
every time - morning, afternoon or night - one tries to get in her room she's streaming, what means if one skipped the boobjob scene it's now impossible to do it. Also seeing Alexa stream makes the game mix nightime with whatever time it is: shops and church are closed aand the monstergirl can be found in the alley, even if it is supposed to be morning.
PS: gave the drugs to Maria, went to the shop. No "drug +++" option, just "sex drug" and "VR". What might be going wrong?