VN - Ren'Py - Abandoned - Oath of Loyalty [Ch. 10] [Silk Ari/REV]

"part 1" went pretty smoothly, the game was pretty average but definitely worth the DL if you are into the whole mafia genre. after releasing the final chapter of "part 1" the dev announced on his patreon that work would not start on "part 2" until he receives £1,440 MONTHLY (currently at £319)

So my final review?

I thought this game was getting about as much support as it deserved, clearly the devs think different. up until this point I would have recommended this game as "atleast give it a try" but now I cannot recommend this game to anyone and keep a clear conscience.

[Ch. 10]

I'm sorry, but the writing and story is extremely weak. Since this is a rather serious take on the mafia genre, I can't just give the horrible writing a pass.

The script lacks any kind of finesse. You are faced with incompetent and ridiculous characters that have zero methodical cells in their body. These excuses for mobsters will constantly just shout and insult each other. Business meetings devolve into shouting matches 100% of the time. There is no subtlety at all. There is no character that shows any sort of presence or seems worthy of respect. The father might seem like one at first, but it all goes down the drain for his character as well by the end. Not because of his acknowledged character flaws like misogyny, but he just starts acting retarded as a Don.

The storyboarding is extremely weak as well. There is very little nuance to the plot developments. Like the characters, the story events that take place are just as straightforward and blunt. The MC is yanked around from one event to the next, having no idea what the fuck is going on most of the time. When he does uncover something, he can't capitalize on it and it just goes nowhere. The main villain of part 1 materializes out of thin air and goes "Ha! It was my master plan all along!"

It's also quite funny how there are no male characters on MC's side. He doesn't have anyone to rely on other than a bunch of women that hold no power in the mob world. Most of them are just damsels in distress. This is what happens when you try to appease some insecure folks by bending the story unnaturally. Wouldn't it make sense to have some loyal Capos acting as major characters? Wouldn't it be nice if the MC had a best friend he could rely on no matter what? Someone that can advance in the world with him?

On top of the broader issues in storytelling, there are a bunch of individual plot events that make very little sense. Character motivations are flimsy, their intelligence is always in question, and the MC actually never shows real character growth until the end of part 1 where he takes the place as the head.

So the mafia part is a bust. Is the porn side any good? Ehh... not really. It's rather short. The sex dialogues are poor to mediocre. Animations are on the janky side. There is very little build up or foreplay. Sexual tension is almost nonexistent. Everything is as vanilla as you can get.

I thought the bulletin board character summary at the end of each chapter was really cool though. The models look pretty nice. Most of them are not very unique models, but well, that's DAZ for you. The male character models are pretty unique and fit their roles pretty well though. The render quality isn't spectacular, but it's slightly above average. That's about it for the positives.

THIS GAME IS INCREDIBLE, those are the only words that i have to describe it.

It's been a while, i was searching for some good game, with good story, and to my luck i find this... Masterpiece! It's incredible in all the way i see it.

Good things: THE RENDERS, the renders and models are AMAZING, i love the Mary or Bella, but the others are incredibly good, i am really surprised with that. THE STORY, It's incredible how we see the development of the MC through the game, is really incredible, and the CHARACTERS too, Bella is by FAR my favorite (with Mary, of course). I was hesitating to try it because i thinked that it would be a boring story, but... NOTHING MORE FAR FROM THE REALITY THAN THAT! IT REALLY ENGAGED ME, I PRAISE THE DEV FOR SUCH MASTERPIECE! Not all the days you find such intriguing stories, it has no time to let you breathe, if i could i would really pay him for such great work on his patreon, but... For certain reasons, i can't. But i really recommend whoever it's reading this that support this dev, i think that all of us (the fans) would like to see an ending (or endings) to this.

Not to good things (personal opinion): The start, it is really interesting, but i think that... All the thing happen fast, like you getting half easily laid, and that. That will change with the chapters, but like i said... It's something that i don't really like much.

BONUS: Personally by an ending of this i would like to see a scene like the final scene of the manga "JoJo's Bizarre Adventure: Vento Aureo" i will LOVE to see a final scene like this (or at least with this position. Obviously with his respective characters... Like the MC in the chair, the mother or something like that on the window and that; THAT DEFINITELY WILL MAKE IT THE BEST GAME EVER, well, it already is):



CONGRATULATIONS TO THE DEV AND PLEASE, CONTINUE WITH THIS WORK, I AM WILLING TO WAIT WHAT IS NECESSARY FOR THIS WORK. Thank you and good evening.

The best game in recent years, everything pleases in it, the plot is logical and dynamic, arouses interest and a desire to move on. The picture is the same pleasing to the eye and does not cause irritation with its political correctness))). The regularity of updates is the same pleases and raises the rating of this game even higher in my eyes. Thanks to the site, which makes it possible to be a member of this wonderful game.

Chapter 8 Official BugFree Release

I had already played this game before and completely forgot about it, but I've been watching its progress.

I think the plot of the game is its strongest suit, the mafia wiseguy power fantasy and there is obviously some Italian family fun in there too. I didn't find most of the romantic interests particularly attractive but their renders do look realistic which helps with the immersion. Overall is a really good game as a product, what is lacking is music and maybe a bit more or better dialogue during the sex scenes that sometimes feel rather brief. 4/5

Generally, the more serious and true to life a game wants to appear, the more nitpicky I get about the nuances. Most of what I found lacking here the first ten minutes couldn't be called a nuance, things that are off with this game are about as subtle as a brick through a window. Never mind the staggering amounts of anachronisms splattered all over the place the first few minutes (genuinely thought this would play in the 30's or early 40's), the inconsistencies don't stop there. How can a cashier who is only concerned with "counting her tips and paying her rent", despite splitting the cost between her and a roomate still "barely making it as it is", pulling totally insane amounts of shifts, afford to visit an establishment like Zanny's? Every single sentence in the first chapter is so cliché, a bot could've auto-generated the entire script, and I'm not entirely sure if it improved later, or if I've just gotten used to reading cookie-cutter sentences, with the usual spelling errors where you see a totally different word that just sounds alike, at some of which I, a non-native speaker, have to resist the urge not to bang my head against the table. Not a good first impression. Then there is our main character, the typical, can't do wrong, good looking rich guy with a big cock everyone has the hots for, family members included, he doesn't even have to try, he just has to exist. At first I thought this HAS to be some kind of a way to set up the perfect life for the MC, so there would be a semblance of apprehension when all of it will be at risk later down the line, but no version of events regardless what story choice you pick comes with any consequence that would make you reconsider your choices, the story seems to be on autopilot. This makes this game an almost completely frictionless pipe dream like VWM, but with less girls and more story, right until the end of chapter 8, which is all of the content that was available at time time of writing this review.

TL;DR: This entire game reeks of mediocrity all over the board, there is not a single aspect where it would stand above the crowd or do something unique it could call its own, therefore, a 3/5 is totally deserved - I'm using all the numbers from 1-5 mind you, I'm not pretending 1 and 2 do not exist, 3 is just that, average -, mainly because it tries too hard to be something more than it actually is and that's worse than if you have a VN with a much smaller scope that from the very first slide totally owns its own niche, because it doesn't bite off more than it can chew. This one needs a Heimlich STAT!

It's rare in this genre that I bother reading all lines of text. With this story, no problem - you find yourself literally sucked into it - great story telling!
That's not even the best part though: the female characters/ love interests are carefully drawn, the sex scenes excellent.
Some characters might bear a bit too much ressemblance, like Sophia and Angela, but that's permissible given that after all it's one big family...
What I really love about them is the small inperfections that bring them to life, like a bit of belly fat, a hint of varicous veins or a c section scar.

Models look great. We see unique and pretty faces, nice bodies and natural body proportions, I'm happy to see a game that managed to avoid going the cow tits route.

Animations unfortunately are not of the same quality, robotic and weird moves at least for me break the immersion and I can no longer enjoy models beauty. Maybe the game would be better without animations if they can't reach at least some acceptable standard. I know daz is not a best tool for animations so I kind of understand but still, I just can't enjoy them the way they are.

And the worst part for me - the story. It starts good but with every chapter it goes worse and worse. Mc is clearly not don material. At first I though he'd get smarter with proper choices but in fact the story is pretty linear and in most crucial moments the player has no real control how it goes. And it really feels like mc is evolving from clueless innocent idiot into clueless not so innocent idiot.

Later chapters become ridiculous, at some point player faces some random woman he knows nothing about and decides to save her against some beanie hobo without even knowing what is going on, some other dude with black hat that is not even on the screen tells mc to get lost so mc attacks the first dude and we have the choice of letting him go (?) or kicking him in the head (???). At this point for full lulz we only miss the woman saying "Thank you for helping me with this guy defending his family, I tried to kill them all but run out of ammo". Of course in the game the woman magically turns out to be a damsel in distress and feels the need to kiss him for his bravery in front of his soon to be girlfriend who conveniently appears out of nowhere like a wild pokemon. I mean, shit, I didn't try hard to be a proper godfather heir, caring only about the family, with everyone else being just business, picking up every possible cruel choice the game offered to deserve this...

Charming game. Interesting story with a mafia theme. I like the prospect of having multiple sidegirls without a nonsensical harem. I am looking forward to see where the different relationships go and maybe collide.

I definitely recommend listening to the Godfather soundtrack while playing.

Im gonna was gonna give it 3 which is decent for the current state but some annoying bullshit happened and i hate it, so i leave it at 2 mainly for the graphics part and the originality.

Writing is decent but i feel like dialogues are not fluid in many ocassions they feel like separate sentences, in sex scenes was pretty obvious to me. The game promises stuff that so far I didnt see, maybe the future will be brighter, but so far, the result is pretty much underwhelming, mainly because the part of the relationships is kind of way too short, there is way too much stuff that is not related to sex in any way.
Im guessing that stuff is building another part of the game that so far is not much present, from a fapper point of view, almost that entire part is skippable.

First annoyance (spoilers):
MC has sex with Jan and Daniela, and added to the the sextalk that is really bad, before the party the mc asks Daniela to behave, he actually scolded her and later fucked her without remorse. His girlfriend doesnt even aknowledge that she is his cousin.

Second:
Mc buys his sister a dress, as personal recomendation and paid in full. At dinner his father calls her a whore for wearing that dress. Its ok that his father is an imposing figure, but being the man, he was the pussy, the women of the house left, and he stayed. Didnt even check on his sister later. The mc is a pussy and an asslicker, i can not like him.

Third:
In the end of some sex scenes the image and text are out of sync, so the text is still describing the scene but the image is showing the effects after the sex based on your cum choice. I get that doin it that way the dev saved a lot of render time, but its obviously lazy.

Fourth:
When he is at the beach and the thug is trying to hurt his sister Mc's reaction is "You know my uncle?" He could just tell him " im gonna tell my mom!" Seriously this guy is a pussy.

Fifth:
Mcs girfriend showing in the precise moment where the rescued girl kisses him, choice that you can not avoid. This is a Chinese drama moment, this happens like once every 5 episodes of any Chinese drama.

Also, for this random girl he even crushes the thugs head. It is funny if you compare it with what he did for his sister which is nothing.

Sixth:
The same girl SPAWNING again out of the blue to interrupt an important moment in the precise instant. I say she spawns because it is a park which is an open space with plenty visibility.

The person who wrote these things i describe is trying to make a story about Mafia. I hope it gets better, cause not much people is using this models that look good, it would be sad seing this good assets wasted.

Super boring "mafia"plot - made me sooo tired after only 30 minutes... letting me wish to skip it all!

So this short "review" is only about the prologue and part of chapter 1 (v0.7), cause I had to quit the whole "game" then due to:

• clichés over clichés, starting with the characters and not ending in the whole development of the story
• meaningless, trivial and sometimes even ridiculous dialogues, in particular those with "sentiment"
• below average renders, mostly as dizzy as the plot itself
• super-short sex scenes and quick animations
  (and the mc is "exhausted" after that quickie ;-/ )
• the mc, a super-naive prince charming of a sensitive pantywaist and how he's being confronted with his "family" business....
• some special fx-sounds ... as the annoying laughing accompanying every mediocre amusing statement of our prince charming
  ... or the crying of his sister (pardon: friend) - which made me laugh instead of being touched
• the way being forced into intimate relationships without choice (don't like that very much!)

.... and that was only the very beginning of this VN .

This may be an average one that could be a 3 star, but for me too disappointing and tiring to give it more than 2.4 stars.

Alright, after playing through chapter 7 I just to finally give my two cents about this game.

It is awesome.
The girls look great and are of a very wide variety in character, body and age. You go from girls about the same age as the protagonist (mid twenties) to hot milfs and young blooming beauties of perhaps 18-19 years.

There is incest if you so decide to put in the relationship and are willing to go there, there are casual flings and at least two serious relationships outside your family.
The story is a classic mafia one, with the usual character troupes, but that's okay, with the mafia it is like with noir stories in general, you are fine with the stereotypes, if they are done right, BECAUSE they are essential for that genre.

It's about the Italian mafia, not the Russian mob or some other gangs, so pretty much classic setting.


The sex scenes are not sparsely, but also not completely gratuitous, for the more taboo relationships, there is a slow build-up, apart from with your wild cousin, she instantly jumps you.

The writing is also very high for the standard of these games, so no complaining there.

All in all, I can't think of a single reason NOT to play this game.

Recently played this after recommendation from someone, and I must say I think this game is great.

Right off the bat, giving the player a choice between the type of "racket" gives a varied option in terms of gameplay, and story is written well (it really goes in depth as to how the mafia life is operated).

There's real sense of variety in terms of characters (both male & female), that MC really interacts with, gets in conflict with (and MC trying to juggle around all these relationships is very entertaining).

Looking forward to how the story continues.

So this is like an actual visual novel with some porn scenes in it.

The story and writing is excellent, the characters are believable and they all look like actual people. No over the top T/A on the girls no giant 40cm dongs flopping around, nope, actual people with albeit very above average bodies. As of chapter 6 the story is setting up some things and I hope it will pay off with some twists and turns but it really got my attention. The sex part of the game is pretty weak as far as build up and choices go but the animations and graphics are very good.

Definitely worth a playthrough 5/5

(Review for ver. 0.6)

It is amazing!

Detailed, hi quality renders.

Wonderful women, all with their kinds of beauty and personality.

Captivating story with precise writing.

Good interface. (I haven't noticed any influence of Gift Cards on relationships though.)

Chef d'oeuvre, 20/20!

This is a well written and enjoyable storyline
The models are attractive and well rendered.
I like the system of choices and point system.

Really my only negative is in the sex scene dialogue. It feels generic and repetitive. Not in every instance, but in most.
What I am referring to is dialogue that goes like this (as an example):
'Fuck me with your huge hard cock'
'I am going to stick my huge hard cock inside you'
'Oh I love your huge hard cock so much'
'Baby, how does my huge hard cock feel inside you?'
You get the idea.....
The Dev just needs to read some more erotic novels to get better dialogue for the sex scenes.
I'm just saying - every other sentence shouldn't be huge hard cock or tight wet pussy.
Use a thesaurus dude.

A VN about mafia life ? count me in it is actually surprises me that this VN is not gaining the fame it deserves

Pros :

• CHARACTERS, the girls are pretty and i'm impressed. I can't pick a favorite based on looks alone, but Angela got a whole package of looks and great personality
• STORY, so far it is great and i enjoyed it a lot. The story branches out well and not just 1 plain story, we could explore other routes too with other girls but it has consequences so beware.
• THE BACKGROUND, great and goes well with the theme.
• BUG, so far hadn't found any on my playthrough.
• ANIMATION, smooth and have several camera angles for us to enjoy, and i really appreciate that the dev took time to provide additional angles for the player to enjoy.

I have played all the 6 chapters available and it was time well spent because i really enjoyed it . The story is great and there are plenty of scenes on the side for the horndogs out there

One minor thing about this VN tho, if we spent the night with a girl after hot and steamy night, the story just jump to the next event without a scene about the MC and the girl woke up, chatting and say goodbye or even go for more before jumping to the next event, it just doesn't sit well with me

It's not a big problem for me tho, so this VN deserve a 5 stars. 6 chapters in and the dev Aced it!! and i couldn't wait for more

100% HAVE TO GIVE THIS ONE A RIDE!

As of v0.5.1

At the moment it's an excellent game with only one detraction from my point of view.
First thing that popped out for me was how smooth everything is. Art is great and the actual animations are smooth. Sex is kind of vanilla and imo, too fast with some characters, but nothing off putting or too . The story board (the only actual UI element in the game) is running well and feels natural. The characters are... well, most of them are fucked up in one way or another. Not really surprising, considering the situations they are in.

The only problem I have, and the only thing stopping me from giving it full 5 stars is the (what I can only call) the Karma system. In of itself it's not a bad system. The execution is a little bit off putting, tho. It's obviously meant to deal with how the MC reacts and deals with things, but there are just too few non-girl related options to gain points. I don't know if it's the philosophy of the developer, limitations on the amount of content or something different, but you can't have it both ways. You can't be a nice guy to the girls you like and you can't be a ruthless bastard to your enemies. Mostly because there aren't many non-girl interactions and choices. Now most choices have obvious consequences, but... I wish there was more business to actually do, so that I can pick my actions. Not to mention... it seems it doesn't work sometimes - point in case - the cop chick. wtf?

I think I get the idea behind it, but just as a personal preference I don't like it. Might not be everyone's cup of tea. Still, I enjoyed the game and recommend if highly. It's a VN where choices seem to have pretty heavy consequences. I will follow it with interest.

Okay numbnuts, listen up! I`m only gonna say this once...
This game is good, Capiche?

It`s got a nice gangster storyline, it`s got fucking hot broads...it`s got good quality renders...it`s got story choices on whether you go drugs route or gambling/protection..or both. Pretty sweet heh?

Okay, okay, the MC looks like a fucking pussy....and he acts like a pussy in the start...but we are gonna toughen that bitch boy up into the new fucking Scarface!

Don`t take my word for it, just play the fucking game...unless you want a long walk off a short pier in concrete boots...