VN Unity Out of Touch! [v3.58] [Story Anon]

[WhitePolarFoxxx]

Leah will mention she has no mother

Errrr... Didn't you think it was a metaphor?

chapter 38 it starts with a big screen of "8 MONTHS LATER" only to if you check out Vic's side story 3 that you can check out a few mins later she will mention she's surprised it's "only been a month" since Chad got back. Which makes the 8 months later kinda ridiculous since since it had already been like 3 weeks since the "time skip" so instead it seems like the time skip was only a week but it was written as being 8 months.

Errrr... Didn't you think what side stories could happen somewhere in timeskip?

In the story I don't think it's ever really explained exactly whar Cro did to him when he asked for immortality.

Literally gave him the immortality

It is mentioned at one point that she somehow broke his soul into pieces

Could be metaphorical thing again. Or some foreshadowing

 

[ixcez]

Saying "I have no mother/father/sister/etc" is a common English idiom that means you've essentially disowned them.

Everybody in that conversation understood she didn't mean it literally.



All of the Ch38 side stories take place during the time skip. That's why Jamie's hair is halfway in length between her old hair and her new hair (and she takes CJ's recommendation to grow it out more), and why every side story says it's been X amount of time since Ch37.




It has not been explained how she did that yet, as Cro has been on speaking terms with CJ again for all of one chapter now. Nobody during Ch22 was preocupied with the how, as they were busy trying to either save Jamie or not get turned into a monster.


Cro did what she did to Hayato when Jamie's father was a baby. The next time we see him, Jamie's father is in his mid-twenties. And per his own words, he didn't have to do much himself. He just benefited financially from it and then reinvested.



The fact that he could see Cro at all would indicate he had a natural predisposition to spiritual power, this coupled with having quite a bit of free-time and almost unlimited funding led to him making a large amount of progress over the next 25+ years.



Did you miss the part where the people on the other end of that portal were 99.99% of that? The city that Ch22 takes place in is nearly depopulated, and the half-souls they became would throw themselves into the massive rift in the crater.
That was his plan.



Because he wasn't murdering tens of thousands of people in the mansion.




He didn't exactly accomplish much spiritually when alive besides learning the basics of the four goddesses and accidentally opening the portal and having to keep it from growing. The majority of his spiritual work has been done while dead, including overseeing what happened on the other end of his portal.



Remember the talk Jamie and Shayla have in Ch39 where they debate the origins of CJ's gene mods.



Hayato tells Jamie in Ch20 that the maids were not for him.




We've had people say this for years, but the problem is that on F95 the Female Protagonist tag means something very specific (generally that the porn is female led) and that when OoT did have that tag, it just pissed people off. The mods decided to just get rid of the tag, and I supported that decision.

Thanks for pointing out a lot of stuff I probably missed.

On the parts of side stories I can understand that however with how the world is with all the gene-modding + medicin to make you eternally young or something a persons hair length doesn't really tell me much since I would think they could just change that willy nilly. There is also the fact that Vic + Chad talks about his mom which made me believe it happened shortly after the main story, though again it could have been any time since it's not made apperent outside of it was a month after he returns and with the 8 months later it should have happened before but since the talk is about his mother happens straight after just meeting his mother it seemed to have happened after. It was however hard for me to tell if it was a miss in writing or it just becoming that way in my head because of how it played out.

And yes I seemingly missed/forgot the part about the people in the city since my understanding at first was that the one's inside the globe where the one's he had brought from their planet while the one's walking around outside were the ghosts of the city. Which makes my thoughts about the tens of thousands in the mansion wrong.

On the whole empire thing and gene mods I'm not sure what to think since as mentioned during the talk with Shayla, or at least this is how I understood it. Chad is gene-modded or geneticly engineered in a way that is impossible with the reasearch they have which is why the previous reasearcher just saw it as an error but Shayla saw much more and it is seemingly impossible to replicate with the knowledge they have at the time and is probably generations ahead. Generations ahead is kinda hard to put a time frame on since in the tech industry it could mean some decades since most generations are about 2-5 years or if it's human generations then hundreds of years since that is usually something like 30-80 years depending on how you see it. So her take on it was that the easiest would just have him to breed with everyone to make a new generation of super humans. Which in turn makes me wonder how they were able to reverse engineer what was done to the grandpa just like that. Together with the fact that just letting him sit back and reinvest which in turn built him an empire and being the forefront in gene-modding. Again maybe I'm colored quite a bit here from my personal background/knowledge in economics/buisness since it's not just enough to earn money and reinvest since that could easily mean you would get everything you own either lost or taken from you.

On the female tag I don't quite get it but I can understand, there are multiple games on here I believe that mentions they have multiple protags and use both male and female protag tags but I had no idea people were being vocal about it or what not and it does sound silly.

Lastly I would just like to say I really appreciated the overall storya and it really got me hooked since I spent the last couple of days just playing it and reading most of the stuff, though I clearly missed some parts and I honestly did fast forward some so that probably helped. I really liked the fact that each character is being developed instead of this being some power trip for the MC where he just collects dolls for his doll house.

My dude, the side stories are during the timeskip, I didn't think anyone would need it spelled out for them.
Leah says she has no mother, because from her pov she doesn't because she hates her, she doesn't actually think she doesn't have a mom.



It's a lot easier to reverse engineer something then invent it. Also gene-editing does currently exist with CRISPR. Also in a story of Gods and Demons you're trying to make it sci-fi when it's fantasy.


We know he lived for at least 100 years because Jamie mention's him being a young man in the 80's and OoT is in ~2075.


Those 20,000 souls came from the alternate world, where he killed billions by opening that portal in a metropolis, not his world.

Honestly mate I'd recommend you do a second playthrough, the first playthrough can be a bit confusing since you forget details. The second is like a whole new game with you seeing the code of the matrix. There's a lot of foreshadowing you wouldn't have noticed and some sentences you interpreted one way on your first playthrough that on your second you understand.

Yeah I would probably need a second playthrough with all the info that I read in the last couple of days but I'll wait for a bit more content before I do it again.

I'm not sure how I made it sci-fi when a lot of the story revolves around how the everyday life for everyone in the world has changed because of how the changes made to the grandpa was reversed engineered and then made available to the rich and then to even the public, since almost everyone in the story is gene-modded or taking drugs that make them young. So yes this is fantasy and I totally agree but again a large part is fantasy, magic or whatnot is used on grandpa and then science is used to reverse engineer whatever was done and then made readily available to everyone. Again this is an inconsequential part of the story that is just used to setup nad world building it doesn't actually subtract or diminish the story but it does at least for me make me go hold up does this make sense?

Errrr... Didn't you think it was a metaphor?

Errrr... Didn't you think what side stories could happen somewhere in timeskip?

Literally gave him the immortality

Could be metaphorical thing again. Or some foreshadowing

Yeah maybe the mom thing just went over my head at the time since there was so much talk about Chad + Vic's mothers and then Leah just went I have no mom and then we are introduced to her sister but she's adopted but then she's not really adopted but actually her half-sister.

On the immortality part yeah she just gave it to him

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[Story Anon]

Thanks for pointing out a lot of stuff I probably missed.

On the parts of side stories I can understand that however with how the world is with all the gene-modding + medicin to make you eternally young or something a persons hair length doesn't really tell me much since I would think they could just change that willy nilly.

That's not true since gene modifications are done at birth. There's no magical "make hair grow" button installed on Jamie and I have no idea why you would think there would be.

On the whole empire thing and gene mods I'm not sure what to think since as mentioned during the talk with Shayla, or at least this is how I understood it. Chad is gene-modded or geneticly engineered in a way that is impossible with the reasearch they have which is why the previous reasearcher just saw it as an error but Shayla saw much more and it is seemingly impossible to replicate with the knowledge they have at the time and is probably generations ahead.

The important part is that Shayla is saying his modifications should be impossible, yet he has them. Jamie thinks they're supernatural in origin.

That's a hint towards what you already saw with grandpa.

Lastly I would just like to say I really appreciated the overall storya and it really got me hooked since I spent the last couple of days just playing it and reading most of the stuff, though I clearly missed some parts and I honestly did fast forward some so that probably helped. I really liked the fact that each character is being developed instead of this being some power trip for the MC where he just collects dolls for his doll house.

Thank you, glad you've enjoyed it so far.

 

[ixcez]

That's not true since gene modifications are done at birth. There's no magical "make hair grow" button installed on Jamie and I have no idea why you would think there would be.

Not sure how I couldn't think that way to be honest, yes I know it's been explained gene mods are done at birth but they are still taking medications / treatment for eternal youth so if they can make medications for eternal youth, which at least according to science today would mostly involve preventing our cells/DNA from decaying and if it can be rejuvinated we can live if not forever for a very long time and so growing hair if this was made possible wouldn't at least in theory be particulary complicated. I read an interesting article on this some time ago that mentioned that we are probably just a few decades away from this and that the biggest issue in their opinion would be how to deal with changes to society because of so many people living for at least several centuries and the mental toll it would take on people.

So I'm not really sure how far out it would be to just assume they can change their physical appearance to some degree. I mean even here we have medication that can boost hair growth to some degree and dependence on gender so I never really thought of it being far fetched that Jamie deciding to be more womanly would decide to lengthen her hair. There are also tons of other ways like using a wig, extensions or what not to artificially make your hair longer so why wouldn't there be better or cooler way to do it some 60 years into the future. But if you say there isn't any way to do that then yeah there isn't any since it's your world.

Again this is just me liking the story so much that I wanted to talk about it but I can't really do that with my friends since I'm the only degenerate on here far as I know

 

[asmrfan23]

Again this is just me liking the story so much that I wanted to talk about it but I can't really do that with my friends since I'm the only degenerate on here far as I know

corrupt them coward

 

[Jacowboy]

My dude, the side stories are during the timeskip, I didn't think anyone would need it spelled out for them.

Eh... it's kinda confusing 'cause of how it's presented... that's one of the things that could use some improvements, tbh.

 

[Isman]

this game made me laugh so much... and I love it!

 

[Aeon_RHS]

Again this is just me liking the story so much that I wanted to talk about it but I can't really do that with my friends since I'm the only degenerate on here far as I know

While my friends aren't on F95 I am 3 for 3 in convincing some to play AVNs, the last of which I started off with Pale Carnations. You can do it!

this game made me laugh so much... and I love it!

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I was laughing so hard, that was the moment when I decided to really give the story time to develop.

 

[chacal45]

Hello, what a great community, does anyone know if there is a Spanish translation available for this nv?

A big hello to all!

 

[Nennius]

Hello, what a great community, does anyone know if there is a Spanish translation available for this nv?

A big hello to all!

There's one up to chapter 10 on the Discord, there's quite a lot of Spanish speaking people on the server.
But the majority of the game is untranslated.

 

[bigdicknig]

Nice

 

[Derik X]

Hi Story Anon

First I would like to say, this is a well developed story based game anime. I don't find faults with your game. But, I have to mention this is a "Kinetic Novel" not a VN, VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices. But, this game does not have any of those, I played like 15 Chapters in , and I see your effort in building this game and it's good. I would appreciate, you mention few things in the OP, like it is Multiple POV tag, like you have to go through different characters perspective, Not just one , but each one has their own point of views, which makes it good for story telling, which is good for a Kinetic Novel. But, that is not part of choice based VN. If this is tagged as KN, and many tags are missing, especially the MultiProtag or Multi POV, that is important. Kindly adjust them, so people who go into the game expecting a VN and see slow burn KN, don't get disappointed and reduce your game review which might be not fair to you. As the game is good on its own accord, just not as it is advertised. . Thank you

And the Trailer was more like intro on characters available in the game, which is not a bad thing, but I was expecting something along the lines of what this game is about. But, as a first time watching the trailer without knowing anything about the game, it would be helpful to have that impression. But, after playing the game coming back to see the characters in trailer it's fine, but from what I understand new people watch the trailer for first impressions to understand what the game content is like or story is about . Anyhow no need to focus too much on trailer as we can totally skip trailer altogether and just play the game as it has not much impact , if we decide to check out the game after looking at images samples.

Edit: I am elaborating on what I wanted to talk about Trailer, as it was not clear earlier.

 

[soyuyuka]

Hi Story Anon

First I would like to say, this is a well developed story based game anime. I don't find faults with your game. But, I have to mention this is a "Kinetic Novel" not a VN, VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices. But, this game does not have any of those, I played like 15 Chapters in , and I see your effort in building this game and it's good. I would appreciate, you mention few things in the OP, like it is Multiple POV tag, like you have to go through different characters perspective, Not just one , but each one has their own point of views, which makes it good for story telling, which is good for a Kinetic Novel. But, that is not part of choice based VN. If this is tagged as KN, and many tags are missing, especially the MultiProtag or Multi POV, that is important. Kindly adjust them, so people who go into the game expecting a VN and see slow burn KN, don't get disappointed and reduce your game review which might be not fair to you. As the game is good on its own accord, just not as it is advertised. And the Teasor Trailer, makes no sense, maybe update it. Thank you

There are no big changes but there are some things that affect what scenes you see in later chapters a little. And you're only through like 15%-20% of the game current content by the way. First 15 chapters are very short and are more like extended prologue.

And it was explained just a few posts above why female protag/multiple protag tags are not there.

And the Teasor Trailer, makes no sense, maybe update it.

What?

 

[WhitePolarFoxxx]

What?

No Cro — No Sense

 

[Nennius]

First I would like to say, this is a well developed story based game anime. I don't find faults with your game. But, I have to mention this is a "Kinetic Novel" not a VN, VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices. But, this game does not have any of those, I played like 15 Chapters in , and I see your effort in building this game and it's good. I would appreciate, you mention few things in the OP, like it is Multiple POV tag, like you have to go through different characters perspective, Not just one , but each one has their own point of views, which makes it good for story telling, which is good for a Kinetic Novel. But, that is not part of choice based VN. If this is tagged as KN, and many tags are missing, especially the MultiProtag or Multi POV, that is important. Kindly adjust them, so people who go into the game expecting a VN and see slow burn KN, don't get disappointed and reduce your game review which might be not fair to you. As the game is good on its own accord, just not as it is advertised. And the Teasor Trailer, makes no sense, maybe update it. Thank you

Yeah mate I hate to break it to you but there are choices that do matter within the game even if it ain't asking you to pick CKs sock colour or giving you the ability to rename him "Big Chungus".

The protagonists tags are how F95 decided they should be because when it used to have those tags you want people would bitch and moan constantly. Turns out that the female protagonist tag is mainly meant to represent pov for sex scenes, and sexually CJ is the pov protagonist.

And as far as the Trailer goes what in that confused you? were the words moving to fast for your brain to comprehend or something?

 

[WhitePolarFoxxx]

Akchually...

Hi Story Anon

First I would like to say, this is a well developed story based game anime. I don't find faults with your game. But, I have to mention this is a "Kinetic Novel" not a VN, VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices. But, this game does not have any of those, I played like 15 Chapters in , and I see your effort in building this game and it's good. I would appreciate, you mention few things in the OP, like it is Multiple POV tag, like you have to go through different characters perspective, Not just one , but each one has their own point of views, which makes it good for story telling, which is good for a Kinetic Novel. But, that is not part of choice based VN. If this is tagged as KN, and many tags are missing, especially the MultiProtag or Multi POV, that is important. Kindly adjust them, so people who go into the game expecting a VN and see slow burn KN, don't get disappointed and reduce your game review which might be not fair to you. As the game is good on its own accord, just not as it is advertised. And the Teasor Trailer, makes no sense, maybe update it. Thank you

I've just checked kinetic novel tag, and... Huh... Most games with that tag have VN prefix too. You must be confused visual novel with dating sim.
And there is no way to put kinetic tag, because Out of Touch has open world segments. I don't wanna see here kinetic novel fans do they even exist? melting down from open world in their kinetic novel

 

[soyuyuka]

No Cro — No Sense

True, trailer lacks Cro. Give more Cro

 

[asmrfan23]

Hi Story Anon

VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices.

If you don't do something in Chapter 2 you miss scenes across the game. So.. checkmate atheists.

 

[Crepusculum]

Hi Story Anon

First I would like to say, this is a well developed story based game anime. I don't find faults with your game. But, I have to mention this is a "Kinetic Novel" not a VN, VN should have choices of dialogues that have impact on the story, or paths to choose for MC, change the way character behaves based on choices. But, this game does not have any of those, I played like 15 Chapters in , and I see your effort in building this game and it's good. I would appreciate, you mention few things in the OP, like it is Multiple POV tag, like you have to go through different characters perspective, Not just one , but each one has their own point of views, which makes it good for story telling, which is good for a Kinetic Novel. But, that is not part of choice based VN. If this is tagged as KN, and many tags are missing, especially the MultiProtag or Multi POV, that is important. Kindly adjust them, so people who go into the game expecting a VN and see slow burn KN, don't get disappointed and reduce your game review which might be not fair to you. As the game is good on its own accord, just not as it is advertised. And the Teasor Trailer, makes no sense, maybe update it. Thank you

While i can't dispute what you said about KN and VN, as i really am not knowledgeable enough about it, i can say that If you're specifically looking for big branching, this may not be the prefect story for you (check out Pale Carnations if you haven't, they started doing in recent updates after an amazing build up)

However, if you enjoy immersive stories/books filled with foreshadowing, without intricate branching paths, then Chapter 15 is just the tip of the iceberg. Think of it as character buildup in an anime, like Steins;Gate (the anime) up to episode 7 (or is it 13?). If this appeals to you, delve into chapters 16-22, where the true essence of the story unfolds. If you do decide to read them, I would be thrilled to hear your thoughts.

 

[Derik X]

While i can't dispute what you said about KN and VN, as i really am not knowledgeable enough about it, i can say that If you're specifically looking for big branching, this may not be the prefect story for you (check out Pale Carnations if you haven't, they started doing in recent updates after an amazing build up)

However, if you enjoy immersive stories/books filled with foreshadowing, without intricate branching paths, then Chapter 15 is just the tip of the iceberg. Think of it as character buildup in an anime, like Steins;Gate (the anime) up to episode 7 (or is it 13?). If this appeals to you, delve into chapters 16-22, where the true essence of the story unfolds. If you do decide to read them, I would be thrilled to hear your thoughts.

Hi, thanks for the suggestions on other games and giving some insight on how this particular game progresses. I have played Pale Carnations. I was not in particular looking for big branching games, but as you said, maybe just going through first 15 chapters, which turns out from your explanation is like a prologue, maybe there are meaningful choices in later chapters. I am not against content like this game, this is a good story and feels more like I am watching anime. But, I was expecting more as other games which had a set choices of dialogues to choose from, when we interact with other characters. Not particularly in dating sims alone, but also other games there usually comes up two choice of actions or dialogues and you can choose one of those. But, I understand now that 1-15 chapters being prologue, it doesn't give much dialogue choices and maybe further down it does. Quick question though, does this game end up with Love interests having sexual relations with each other or other than CJ?