Noted, you were right and thank you very much and already fixed. I have two weeks until I am allow to beacon call for an update here, so expect it to be combined officially with my Ch. 2 initial release coming soon BUT I might take extra time to ensure Chapter 2's initial release is perfect unlike Ch. 1's which was less than up to my standards...
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Here it is UNofficially though. Just replace the Script Ch.1 file and you should have it fixed, if that doesnt work. Please let me know. <3
Some people consider Netori a subgenre of NTR. I put them together to explain thats what it is because there is no dedicated Netori tag. So I have to ensure I explain it for those who like/hate it so they know and can avoid it if they disapprove.
It's may be forgiving for a relatively new project, but I'd have to say visuals and design are definitely not the strongest points of this visual novel.
Things that were really out of place/not looked good:
First thing we notice when the game starts is MC (pre TF version). As description says "average guy", that's totally fine, accept for this guy clearly have non-average chest. Background is nice though.
Usage of IRL pictures. The more different styles will be mixed in game the more fragmented it will look like.
Throughout the game no one changes their face expression. There are many things that can ruin your enjoyment from VN and permanent pokerfaces are definitely one of these things.
Weird character placement. We have entire screen free for action, but for some reason every character is afraid to take even 20% of it. This game definitely needs more close-ups.
First H scene. I don't even know what to say here: it's supposed to be 1st person or 3st person? Depending on the answer there can be ways for improvement. Also, it's just me, or 1/4 of the screen is just black and completely unused?
Inconsistent character models. In H scene you can clearly see 2 tattoos (red and black) with similar design one above other and after scene - 2 overlapping (red crescent and pink with previous design).
It's may be forgiving for a relatively new project, but I'd have to say visuals and design are definitely not the strongest points of this visual novel.
Things that were really out of place/not looked good:
First thing we notice when the game starts is MC (pre TF version). As description says "average guy", that's totally fine, accept for this guy clearly have non-average chest. Background is nice though.
Usage of IRL pictures. The more different styles will be mixed in game the more fragmented it will look like.
Throughout the game no one changes their face expression. There are many things that can ruin your enjoyment from VN and permanent pokerfaces are definitely one of these things.
Weird character placement. We have entire screen free for action, but for some reason every character is afraid to take even 20% of it. This game definitely needs more close-ups.
First H scene. I don't even know what to say here: it's supposed to be 1st person or 3st person? Depending on the answer there can be ways for improvement. Also, it's just me, or 1/4 of the screen is just black and completely unused?
Inconsistent character models. In H scene you can clearly see 2 tattoos (red and black) with similar design one above other and after scene - 2 overlapping (red crescent and pink with previous design).
Never need to be sorry in my thread about offering constructive criticism done earnestly. A few things you said have never been mentioned by anyone until you said it. 6 and 7 is a surprisingly easy fix. Chapter 2 is taking time to ensure I get even minor details right like that. Personally speaking, I need to write down my changes and what I need to change to keep personal organization. It's always been shit. lol
1 was a design choice, but yeah he needs a tiny breast reduction. You arent the first to mention it.
2 is product of very early development that's going away in time. Trying to make things uniform is a plan. I have been making background in scenes for Ch. 2 in KS just like my sprites. I didnt in Ch. 1 because I dont have anything sci-fi adjacent on hand, so I got creative...
3 and 4 are the product of my relative inexperience as a dev. I found a tool to help, but couldnt get it to work before last update. I figured it out now. Example:
5 is supposed to be 3rd person but as an overview because my sprite did weird clipping and I wasnt happy with their appearance. So I kinda hid the fault to improve the appearance overall. It's not perfect, but its an acceptable placeholder until the BETA period. The partial black screen was to ensure my render fit properly. More inexperience. I just figured out how that will be solved permanently in the BETA.
Thank you for your feedback. I will bookmark this and seek to improve everything said here. If everyone says rainbows and sunshine, I'll never improve. So thanks again.
Renpy asked me to download a particular Javascript addon to make an android version possible. I did. It now asks me to redownload the JS add-on every time. I have since given up.
