theickobicko
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mac version not working. the app file won't start and don't show any errors, what can i do to fix that, or at least see some error log?
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apparently a lot of people hare having trouble with renpy and mac lately. what works for 1 mac may not work for another. Ive been trying to research it but finding nothing but people having issues, and no fixes.
Game needs a proofreader. Elipses are 3 dots long not 2, sentances start with capital letters and I'm requires '
I saw a short MC, thought about skipping, glad I didn't. its a good game. I only noticed one graphical issue, although it is a very big one. In one of the early scenes, the little sister's navel is... uh... mobile... shall we say.
Yes. That fucking belly button has been a thorn in my side.. I'll probably fix that later , But I'm being very mindful about it now.
Thanks for playing.
Dr. Stranglove
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How is this slow burn? There is literally a lesbian sex scene in the first update!!Definitely liking this one so far. I haven't come across too many good horror/supernatural games here. Slow burn is just fine as long as there's great story to it. Keep up the good work and can't wait to see more
Wtf? Why? Because you made a mod? Strange.Really nice start with good story/storytelling/renders. It's of course still early in the developement, and quite some typos in there (according the info above a proofreader is now in the dev team, too). But I still think this could get a really good one.
The game has already audio, but the music stops so far after the intro. I couldn't resist and added some more tracks into the game. Don't know if there is coming more from the dev himself, then I stop that of course again.
Edit: removed my Mod. Don't know why but got some not so nice suggestions I should stop that again
Maybe you can post it again...
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Well, I was surprised also. Got even privat messages...
Anyway, so far I've added the links again.
I will say that each update will be placing music here and there. up coming update will have some music retrospectively
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Thanks for the info.
By the way, nice game! And the video credits with the sneak previews at the end was outstanding for me, great!
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Good thing about the proofreader, that was really needed.
As far as criticism about the characters' decisions/behaviour goes...
In the end, this is your story, tell it as you like, however in general no one is above making errors, sometimes criticism, even if you don't like it, might be valid, sometimes something you thought might work doesn't really.
You yourself point out it is your first writing project, don't be above accepting criticism, because people rarely start their first project already being perfect.
There's a bunch of people here who for some reason think anything a dev does is beyond criticism, and you shouldn't even be allowed to voice a critical opinion. Well, they couldn't be more wrong.
Professional writers have editors, friends and colleagues who look over their work and suggest changes or point out where it doesn't work for them, they give out copies to people known for writing reviews to get their opinion etc.. Often they have people in charge of a universe or the overall direction of the story, showrunners etc.., who tell them what works and what doesn't. So all these people earning their living with their writing for decades, accept criticism and accept suggestions, but some guy who sets out to do a porn visual novel shouldn't? That's like the weirdest and stupidest approach ever.
If you read up on the topic(which I do, because I find the creative process fascinating), you will find that novelists often change characters, significant plot points, story twists etc.. after they receive criticism from those who read the original drafts.
The thing is, there are literally dozens of games here with similar beginnings, all these incest games with the magic dick MC who for god knows what reason has the mystic ability to make every woman hunger for his cock.
That makes it already really hard for your game to come out swinging, because the basic premise has been used so often.
And though you could call what happens character development, for now I really have to question, if one would call it good character development.
That doesn't mean your story can't work out in an interesting way, doesn't mean your characters can't become great or original, but otoh hand any professional storyteller/game designer will tell you, that you need to put your best at the start, you have got to hook your audience in the beginning, because most people decide whether a game or a story is for them in the first few minutes playing. And for me, having played hundreds of visual and kinetic novels, most found here on this site, I found myself frustrated about how much of this seemed like something I had already seen elsewhere.
As I pointed out in my previous post/review, it isn't that I have a problem with you or wish you anything but the best, but what is gained from buttering up to you and not pointing out what doesn't work for me so far?
I will definitely give your game another chance a few updates in, the original intro and the attractive models deserve at least that.
And I'll be the first to go praising your writing and story, if the game goes in a good direction, including changing my review.
Will that said music fit the theme of the game, or does it even matter? If the theme is horror, I wouldn't want to be bombarded with happy music, that's why I'm asking.
I am planning on adding music that goes with the theme. I dont want to use any happy music, or feel good music.
There may be a small bit of music that sounds...less horror and more curious? from time to time, but I'm also not going to try and overload the story with music. just music over some scenes to set mood. But again, each update will add a bit of music forward and backward where/if needed.
There may be a small bit of music that sounds...less horror and more curious? from time to time, but I'm also not going to try and overload the story with music. just music over some scenes to set mood. But again, each update will add a bit of music forward and backward where/if needed.