Nice way of making Lou part of the story: Just a random guy, trying to figure out what crazy shit is going on.
Wouldn't have told him about magic though.... but I'm not the MC.
Would have been nice to name Eve ourself. Maybe there's more depth to her name in the future, so we shouldn't name her HotGranny69? xD Although Eve as the first woman is quite a fitting name.
Although nice to give her some depth as not wanting to hear Isabella's name and her being used as a puppet gives her a nice motive. Well done.
(Although she uses charles in a similar matter, not sure wether she agrees with me or not.^^)
MC was a bit plain/obvious with his words to pause Eve's plan, but he just turned 18; he'll get wiser with the years. ;-)
...or maybe he was just nervous at the begin; his reasoning got much better in the next scene.
Laughed hard about our sister throwing a fit cause of her feminine items. :-D :-D
I don't think it's unappropriate to ask a women about her jewelry, even more if it is her only piece of clothing: Worst case she won't tell you anything...
Not sure wether it is a good idea to imprison a murderous, psycothic bitch with "no morals" with just one pair of handcuffs on one arm to pole. She'll nag off her hand just to get back to us.... or we just have not seen the doors or other security stuff to keer her locked. ;-)
(Okay, at least a barn door.)
Fantastic cliffhanger at the end.
Nice story update, Keep it up dev.
Dissapointed though about Agatha's lack of pubic hair.