Please stop with the "this is my (first) ever project" "no one is perfect in their first try" " things improve with time, you gotta take it slow" excuses. It won't make your game any better if you go easy on yourself. Whether this is your first game or your 100th game doesn't matter to us. Show us that you are trying your best to improve. Perhaps you are reading lots of modern English sci-fi or maybe you are taking English classes? Let us know and we will appreciate your effort.
Dude I am trying my best here, One month ago I didnt even know coding, now I have made a game. I know its not much, but I am putting effort. You sound like I am doing nothing. I am still learning coding everyday about various future modifications for the game like choice routes, gui customization, multiple paths and such. I did not made this game as a joke, I am serious about it. You dont wanna hear about my 10 year old laptop or about how half the keys in there are not working. But i am still not giving up.
Back to the game itself, the introduction doesn't define the relationship between "faces" "emotions" and "persona" clearly. The "The Japanese say you have three faces" you used would have been a great start for your game. It could be a sound argument for your "We all have different faces" theme except the Japanese never said everyone has three faces. There has never been such saying in Japan. Its just something wrongly spread around the world. This is a terrible mistake for a sci-fi and is a big turn down to anyone who knows the truth. I also prefer a shorter intro and discover more about facetek as the game goes but that's just me.
As you said about connections and relationship between "faces" "emotions" and "persona". I guess i have included pretty much everything i wanted to convey in this release. You dont really expect me to reveal everything in only the first release.
while writng the script I had two options, either show the intro in the beginning about whats happening, OR , I could reveal the facts as the story progressed, but guess i was to be held guilty in bioth the cases. If i had done the second option, people would say, we cant figure out whats happening here, the points are loose, and its still happening with the first option.
I admit I made it super long, but I will fix that in the next update, along with various points here and there.. And the japanese saying. I had done research and never found anything that contradicts with the saying or that they never said it. Whatever the case maybe, its just a saying, you cant really focus on that one point that much. Maybe they said it, maybe they didnt. I dont think it makes a drastic effect on the gameplay or the story i want to convey.
The game is better after the introduction. The photos and real porn is great. Some porn scenes seem slightly too long (probably coz we don't have the control UI and dunno when the scene will end) but overall still good. Dialogs like "bend over" and "get on your knees" could be directly attached to the next video instead of having photos for those lines.
I will try to fix everything form this version in the next version.
While its nice to have some porn already in v0.1, the plot isn't there yet and choices are kinda meaningless. People who like more porn in games would like this. I'm more story based and I haven't seen anything interesting in the plot yet. All I've seen is a rich man fking around and facetek never appeared after the intro. Keep in mind that people stop reading a novel if it can't draw their attention in the first chapters.
Nah man he is not just fucking around without any plot, you cant deny that, that there are events leading the sex scenss, not randomly here and there. Its real sad to hear that. The whole dog chase episode created the plot that opened various routes for the MC. . About the facetek never being mentioned, theres still a story behind it, that i think i would like to reveal in coming updates. There will be plenty times where it will be mentioned in fututre. Its just a start man..
But I am glad you are honest atleast, thanks for telling me all these important details and points.
I cant say more than that I will really try to fix all the plotholes and grammatical errors in the future updates.
I had a vision when i first thought about this game. And one day i will show you all what this story is capable of.
peace
