VN Ren'Py Revenge of a Futa [v0.1.1] [Lady Lyris]

[sabadongelov]

in terms of sex with women vs sex with futa/femboys, it'll be about 60/40

Sounds great (personally not a fan of the femboys, but as long as that is optional, no problem (and even if it isn't optional, who cares if the rest of the content is great, all a player needs to do is click a little extra)).

Also like what I have seen so far. Good looking models for Koikatsu. A hot sex scene. I like were we are headed generally speaking, in terms of attitude of the MC. And of course, true futa, as opposed to shemales, is always a great plus in my book!

A couple of questions if I may?

1. Will there be impregnation down the line? Kali says that it can't happen as long as she's around, but maybe she won't be around (in the MCs head) throughout the entire game? Or maybe she's lying? Or can "turn it on" should the player/MC want it? Ah, no matter the reason, I'm just wondering if it will be there.

2. Will there be a corruption of the MC in the sense that she will get progressively more assertive/dominant/rapey/horny as the story unfolds? Or at least that this will be an option for the player?

3. If yes to the above, will there be scenes were the one getting fucked by the MC does not enjoy it sexually and is only in pain from the too huge cock (for instance when topping a rival futa), or will the focus be 100 percent "victim enjoys it"?

Finally, a note on tags. Just the single sex scene we've gotten so far means the game should be taged with female domination. If the game continues in the same vein, I would call it a core feature. Considering how many times Ruby says no and that she can't take it and Jade/Kali just continues, goes deeper and tells her that it is going to happen regardless of what Ruby says, I think it might warrant a rape tag too. Not the least because you otherwise might get a lot of players/members coming this thread to complain about the game containing non consent.

 

[LadyLyris]

Sounds great (personally not a fan of the femboys, but as long as that is optional, no problem (and even if it isn't optional, who cares if the rest of the content is great, all a player needs to do is click a little extra)).

Also like what I have seen so far. Good looking models for Koikatsu. A hot sex scene. I like were we are headed generally speaking, in terms of attitude of the MC. And of course, true futa, as opposed to shemales, is always a great plus in my book!

A couple of questions if I may?

1. Will there be impregnation down the line? Kali says that it can't happen as long as she's around, but maybe she won't be around (in the MCs head) throughout the entire game? Or maybe she's lying? Or can "turn it on" should the player/MC want it? Ah, no matter the reason, I'm just wondering if it will be there.

2. Will there be a corruption of the MC in the sense that she will get progressively more assertive/dominant/rapey/horny as the story unfolds? Or at least that this will be an option for the player?

3. If yes to the above, will there be scenes were the one getting fucked by the MC does not enjoy it sexually and is only in pain from the too huge cock (for instance when topping a rival futa), or will the focus be 100 percent "victim enjoys it"?

Finally, a note on tags. Just the single sex scene we've gotten so far means the game should be taged with female domination. If the game continues in the same vein, I would call it a core feature. Considering how many times Ruby says no and that she can't take it and Jade/Kali just continues, goes deeper and tells her that it is going to happen regardless of what Ruby says, I think it might warrant a rape tag too. Not the least because you otherwise might get a lot of players/members coming this thread to complain about the game containing non consent.

1. Impreg is not planned but could easily be done towards the end of the routes.
2. Yes. Corruption will be a huge plot point in the game and how it affects the MC's relationships.
3. I think I'll have to say no(I'll have to change up the first scene a little so it sounds less rapey) just because of patreon and the whole itch.io situation right now.
I don't control the thread but I can say you won't see much of the MC getting dommed until later on. People can complain all they want, if its solid complaints then I'll try to correct it. If it's just opinions like "I don't like this character" then they can sit in the corner like a good boy.

 

[sabadongelov]

1. Impreg is not planned but could easily be done towards the end of the routes.
2. Yes. Corruption will be a huge plot point in the game and how it affects the MC's relationships.
3. I think I'll have to say no(I'll have to change up the first scene a little so it sounds less rapey) just because of patreon and the whole itch.io situation right now.
I don't control the thread but I can say you won't see much of the MC getting dommed until later on. People can complain all they want, if its solid complaints then I'll try to correct it. If it's just opinions like "I don't like this character" then they can sit in the corner like a good boy.

Thanks for the quick reply!

1. Great!
2. Great!
3. Aw. And double aw to changing the existing sex-scene, I liked as it were, just because it was a breath of fresh air compared to more lack-lustre depictions of domination and non-consent (I shouldn't have said anything! Then again, you might get Patreon breathing down your neck, so...). But I understand and you do the game you want to do. And curse Patreon for their hypocritical bullshit (I don't see them banning games where you can go around and murder people left and right, but murder is moral, right?).

And I agree in the sense that who cares what the haters think. But since they can do shit like review bomb a game they don't like or start flame-wars in the thread, it doesn't hurt to be mindful on how to minimise their acrimony.

Anyways, good luck with your game! I will be watching.

 

[LadyLyris]

Thanks for the quick reply!

1. Great!
2. Great!
3. Aw. And double aw to changing the existing sex-scene, I liked as it were, just because it was a breath of fresh air compared to more lack-lustre depictions of domination and non-consent (I shouldn't have said anything! Then again, you might get Patreon breathing down your neck, so...). But I understand and you do the game you want to do. And curse Patreon for their hypocritical bullshit (I don't see them banning games where you can go around and murder people left and right, but murder is moral, right?).

And I agree in the sense that who cares what the haters think. But since they can do shit like review bomb a game they don't like or start flame-wars in the thread, it doesn't hurt to be mindful on how to minimise their acrimony.

Anyways, good luck with your game! I will be watching.

Existing sex scene, after reviewing it I think that it's fine. I'm just going to add a line or two of Ruby saying how good it feels to make it sound a little better. Honestly doesn't even sound like noncon given the circumstances.

 

[SS4312]

1. Impreg is not planned but could easily be done towards the end of the routes.

I would like to second the pregnancy request, thank you.

 

[Noxedia]

Jade really went from ‘tragic orphan’ to ‘college-level chaos coordinator’ real quick

 

[LadyLyris]

Jade really went from ‘tragic orphan’ to ‘college-level chaos coordinator’ real quick

Lmao that is not what happened at all

 

[LadyLyris]

Requested by, you know who..

New version is out now on my itch.io! Can't advertise because reddit shadownbanned me :d
I have also added an android version!

 

[Bob69]

New version is out now on my itch.io! Can't advertise because reddit shadownbanned me :d
I have also added an android version!

You should use the report function next update, that way all of us uploaders know about the update

Bottom left of the game thread "Report" -> "Game update" -> Let us know in the "More Information" box the reason for the report + add links & changelogs.

 

[LadyLyris]

Thank you so much I'm still learning the platform and I really appreciate the help.

 

[sabadongelov]

Existing sex scene, after reviewing it I think that it's fine. I'm just going to add a line or two of Ruby saying how good it feels to make it sound a little better. Honestly doesn't even sound like noncon given the circumstances.

Sounds great!

 

[Rexermus]

Interesting start. Some nice promise

 

[AureliusBlaze]

Not a bad start.

Critiques:
The weakest link so far would be the sex scenes. They're arguably the most important part in NSFW games. You should not cut to black as a substitute of showing something, and writing dialogue for what happens does not make up for it. Flow is also important. Show how we get from A, to B, to C etc. Of course there are cases where you'd skip around, or skip certain parts. But you should wait with doing so until you've mastered the standard flow. To make what I'm saying more tangible:
You do the flow pretty well with Ruby, then when we reach the dick reveal scene you cut to black and we hear her reaction before it cuts to the actual scene. It's somewhat rectified with that we do get to see her reaction, but it's something to be careful about. Don't forget this is also the very first full mast reveal to the player as well. I would've personally preferred watching Ruby take off Jade's pants, even if the clothing is off-screen (for engine reasons), so we see her reaction in real-time as well as see it "ourselves" (as the player) at the same time. More importantly, for the BJ you cut to black with a description of what happens — but you really shouldn't. I get saving on renders is nice, assuming that is why, but the whole strength here is showing the process. The starts of various scenes are still really important. "Show, don't tell." The build-up is like the spice that increases sexual tension, and as such the payoff is much better.

This is even more so the case for the vaginal penetration. Again the black screen and description, then cut into action that's already on-going. If animating first insertion and similar is too difficult, then images will work just fine. I'd argue showing first insertion is even more important when there's a large focus on a big dick and how it won't always be easy to just insert it. But I digress. The sex scene is happening, but the camera is static the entire time in terms of not showing more angles. Make use of the strength that is a 3D "game" — you can easily give us many angles to, at a decent rate, cycle through as the dialogue goes on. You should also change their positions every now and then so it's not completely static. Ruby moving her hand to cover her mouth (like you did) is a good start. You don't always have to completely change the position, a smaller thing like that is also good. I already addressed multiple angles, but I'll re-iterate that it's quite important. In the sex scene there's a lot we don't even get to see because it's blocked.

Now for the climax of the scene. This is a, in my opinion, common shortcoming of many NSFW games. The climax is the literal and figurative climax, especially don't cut away from that. Show it! Sound effects (

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) of Ruby being filled, bonus points for showing her stomach cumflate, even if just the little bit you mentioned in the description on the black screen! (On a biased note, more cumflation than "just a bit" would be nice and plays well with a large dick, especially with magic involved )

As a smaller thing, since it's more of an experience kind of deal, the sex loop is a little too stiff in terms of their movement.

I would suggest taking a look at stuff like "Futa's World of NTR" to get ideas how how to specifically improve render quality.

Well done on the loops though. There is a little bit of a jarring jump during the BJ, but the sex scene loops nicely.

 

[ashkar666]

Is there going to be a way to break free from Kali, cause having her free to use Jade like a puppet to do as she pleases is kinda fucked. Jade doesn't even have any say in her first time having sex, Kali just takes over and does it all without caring what Jade thinks at all.

 

[Carnack Ketral]

This looks like it has potential. I will keep an eye one it.

 

[Angelmaximo]

The character designs look great, and I really hope you manage to give proper depth to the story, the premise already sounds quite emotional and has a lot of potential for character growth.

Personally, I’d love to see a possible romantic route with the girls, not just pure revenge. I get that vengeance is the main theme here, but it would be interesting to see Jade prove to those who hate her that she’s more than what they think, that being futa doesn’t define her as “wrong.” That kind of development would make the story far more meaningful and satisfying.

As for femdom, I’m not really into it. It kind of takes away from what makes futa unique to me, the idea that it’s mostly centered around female relationships and perspectives rather than focusing on male dynamics. But I understand that including a variety of fetishes can appeal to a wider audience, so it’s completely fine if it’s optional.

In any case, I really appreciate the effort behind projects like this. Developing multiple storylines and keeping everything coherent isn’t easy, and I respect that. I’ll definitely check it out if it leans toward a story, driven approach.

 

[gfdjk047]

good

 

[LadyLyris]

The character designs look great, and I really hope you manage to give proper depth to the story, the premise already sounds quite emotional and has a lot of potential for character growth.

Personally, I’d love to see a possible romantic route with the girls, not just pure revenge. I get that vengeance is the main theme here, but it would be interesting to see Jade prove to those who hate her that she’s more than what they think, that being futa doesn’t define her as “wrong.” That kind of development would make the story far more meaningful and satisfying.

As for femdom, I’m not really into it. It kind of takes away from what makes futa unique to me, the idea that it’s mostly centered around female relationships and perspectives rather than focusing on male dynamics. But I understand that including a variety of fetishes can appeal to a wider audience, so it’s completely fine if it’s optional.

In any case, I really appreciate the effort behind projects like this. Developing multiple storylines and keeping everything coherent isn’t easy, and I respect that. I’ll definitely check it out if it leans toward a story, driven approach.

Multiple character paths will def be a thing in this game.

Is there going to be a way to break free from Kali, cause having her free to use Jade like a puppet to do as she pleases is kinda fucked. Jade doesn't even have any say in her first time having sex, Kali just takes over and does it all without caring what Jade thinks at all.

Not everything is as it seems

 

[macrg01]

Im a big fan of futa on futa. The protagonist being the one being submissive like Accord and/or Futa's world of NTR.
Will there be anything like what ive described in the game?

 

[LadyLyris]

Im a big fan of futa on futa. The protagonist being the one being submissive like Accord and/or Futa's world of NTR.
Will there be anything like what ive described in the game?

I will be including MC Sub scenes. It'll be one of the toggles in the game's intro to allow players to not only have just DOM. If it's not toggled off, the player will be given the choice of either a dom scene or sub scene.