Thanks to the feed back! I very much appropriate any and all constructive input. Criticism or otherwise. The interaction from the forum has been invaluable in making this project the best it can be!
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I do agree the dialogue for the epilogue could be improved (and this specific aspect enhanced). Writing the epilogue was a struggle for me, and while I don't have any near future intentions to make revisions to it, that doesn't mean I won't ever revisit it (although, again, not soon).
And, as always, the game scripts are just plain text, feel free to spice up your local copy (I do it for many of the games I play).