Not bad so far. Here's a few things I noticed:
There are still a bunch of lines with weird sentence structure throughout the script. Besides that, his/her are mixed up every once in a while. I also saw some mislabeled lines, but I neglected to take notes, so you'll have to find them yourself...
Even if you don't get into a conversation with Beatrice, MC will think "(Here's one of the repressed women Beatrice was telling me about.)" first encountering Adele.
If you followed Miriam to her room but left without helping with her vibrator, you'll tell Janine later that you didn't want to help Miriam because of how she had treated you that morning, which is not quite accurate. Also, when Timmy explains about the cameras at Miriam's house, MC comments about helping her with the vibrator.
After the cabin scene with Karen, it's possible (and maybe inevitable?) that the fireplace sounds continue indefinitely.
Finally, I haven't looked into the details around those scenes much, but the bathroom scenes with Beatrice have a potentially weird progression. If you accompany her to the bathroom the first time and only help her with her shirt (no looking at her boobs etc.), that scene ends without anything happening. If you then accompany her for the skirt incident, MC is suddenly way intimate with her out of nowhere, rubbing his crotch against her from behind...
This one is purely my opinion, but the incident with Adele near the end is a bit off, I think. I don't mean the altercation between MC and her, I can see that happening. I mean, MC just tying her up and changing into that ridiculous outfit, before then giving the player the option to back out. I mean, shouldn't we get the option to not even do all this preparation if we don't want to do anything? It just seems like such a weird sequence of events.
Anyway, I'll put this one on my watchlist. I'm curious how it's gonna turn out.