All good Sotak, and great feedback!
Alright... so in the first 5 days, I did make mistakes in my writing. There are a few reasons for that (aside from just lazy writing at first). The biggest mistake was that I left out too many details in my writing early on. With that said, you should know the "Book" (Serenity Island) isn't supposed to be a physical book. The way you see it in Jasmine's house was how it was intended to be. That first book was supposed to be Mom's journal. This is how Serenity breaks the third wall just a bit by making you a real part of it. People dream, everyone dreams... you're dreaming the same dream as MC - living his life. It's a confusing approach I know. And I should have written it better. But, being my first go at this, I made some mistakes of course.
As for Mom... sometime after those first releases, I got so much good feedback on her that I couldn't bring myself to remove her. So, I made a change to my story and kept her in. The only problem was - I totally should have elaborated more on the girls' reactions to this situation (Mom being written back in). So that was another mistake.
Cammie - have you played the first episode of Chapter 2 yet? Just in case, I won't spoil it for you. But her situation is pretty much brought to light. The main problem with Cammie is well... damn I made her so hot lol. So many have fallen in love with her. And I've had to say this a million times but there will be no incest in any project I write. All the girls get "hot and bothered" around MC, and I wrote that bedroom scene that way because I wanted to show that she was fighting that conflict also. That was the closest to 'incest' I will ever get. I figured it was a nice way to give readers a sexy look at her without it being "lesbian". Anyway, as for her future, the scene in episode 1 of chapter 2 between her and Mom pretty much lets you know how that will go.
I'm no major writer and don't claim to be. Hell, probably 80% or more devs on here are just like me in that regard. They have a story in their head and try to tell it. But I've also learned a lot about writing in the last 2 years of doing this. Through writing some of the stuff you brought up, I was also rewriting Last Human at the same time - another big mistake. Focus on one story at a time. Things feel much longer than they are in reality when you're writing. So my earlier writing seems to move way too fast. When you write and rewrite lines/scenes multiple times, well it starts to feel like its really long. Its a difficult scale to balance. And one that I am only just now learning to address and correct.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback. I can be honest and upfront about these screwball mistakes I've made. Much like those early renders... I redid them after I learned more about the graphics and posing work. And now I want to go back and redo them all again because I know they can be better. But I have to draw a line somewhere I suppose. I still plan to redo all of "Day 5" because I fucking hate that whole day. The sex scene with Cassie and Samantha was awful to say the least.
Well, now I'm rambling lol. And I need to get to work so I'll stop here.
