Solid content, good work, the dialogue is a bit spotty but it's already clearly stated that the writer is ESL (English as a Second Language), so it's no worries. It's good enough to be understandable. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this one.
At least that one person in the thread stopped jerking around, the one who claimed they could do better, brushed off their insults as honest criticism, and then proceeded to mangle their syntax, grammar, and spelling in almost every comment. That's called irony, folks! Perfection isn't expected but if you're gonna talk shit then you better be a world class typist and possibly have a degree of some kind in creative writing.
Yeah, no, solid game so far. Nice work!