Thanks for review!
Gotta admit that hastily paced action was mistake from me, I thinking of edit this part of game in next versions or make this as prologue. I also not planned to make this as porn fest game, my primary goal is - dark themed game with own characters, lore, different endings and stuff. ( By the way, I love female protagonists )
but right now I not sure if anybody interested in future about this game
It takes time and experience to balance stuff out, so remember to take your time and get things done at your own pace... Learn as you go...
The concept of this VN/game being a erotic thriller about secret government agents is a creative idea, and personally I found it intriguing when I first began playing/reading your VN/Game... So don't beat yourself up about the original concept... If you want it to have story as it's basis, you just need to work out the proper pacing and every story, even fantasy, has to have some roots in reality to make it both somewhat believable as well as to give it depth and meaning... As a suggestion, think about any secret agent movie you've ever watched or book you've read, and then think about how you would react if you were that secret agent... Then begin creating a story around that character, taking advantage of the skills, talents, and vulnerabilities you think that secret agent would have... Then throw that character into situations that would be somewhat plausible and show off that secret agents skills, talents, and vulnerabilities... Just remember to have some sort of lead up when you can, as that will build up to those situation, giving them more substance... This is typical story writing technique, developing the characters, building up the story, creating a sense of immersion for the player/reader, and then rewarding the reader/player now and then (in the case of erotic/adult visual novels/games this is usually with erotic/sexual scenes and/or story crescendos/climax's)...
In the end, it's your baby... Do with it what you will... Take what folks say with your own grain of salt... Feedback, good or bad, can be useful and should never be taken too much to heart... Learn and grow as a creator, and become better and better at what you do, at your own pace... These things are tough to make, and even tougher if you have no experience at story/game creation... If you want to make it a porn fest, or make it more story based, or want some balance, just do it how you want... Be your own muse... But still be open minded as well, while maintaining strict creative control...
I've already mentioned that it feels more like a teaser? It sure does to me. So what is shown in this demo(teaser?) is not how things gonna works.. thats gonna be awesome!
