Ren'Py Abandoned Story [v0.3] [story and magic]

[Raziel_8]

Nice first release and seems to be a interesting story.
Overall i like the MC, althought i'm a bit confused why he want's to go home.
I mean, his life wasn't exactly good, as he said himself, neither his job or his gf...here he has magic, a young wife a friendly tribe, women which want his magic babys...so what is the reason he want's to go back ?

Althought i'm concerned about the magic loose if u knock girls up...after all i want knock many girls up, as often as possible.

As for the sex scenes, overall good. I think they could be a bit faster, but please no button smashing or other minigames in a sex scene, that takes all joy out of it.

 

[Kitchentable]

.... i'm a bit confused why he want's to go home.
I mean, his life wasn't exactly good, as he said himself, neither his job or his gf...here he has magic, a young wife a friendly tribe, women which want his magic babys...so what is the reason he want's to go back ?....

Human fear of the unkown, the lack of the like as electricity or running hot water,
solid weather proof housing made of brick and mortar and with central
heating or the life threatening wildlife, backwards societies with slavery and
despotism, could think of a few more but I get what you are saying.
The MC kinda landed on their feet but keep in mind that even Ash
did return to his world.

 

[Raziel_8]

Human fear of the unkown, the lack of the like as electricity or running hot water,
solid weather proof housing made of brick and mortar and with central
heating or the life threatening wildlife, backwards societies with slavery and
despotism, could think of a few more but I get what you are saying.
The MC kinda landed on their feet but keep in mind that even Ash
did return to his world.

Not sure which Ash u mean.

Yes fear of the unknown i can understand, althought he doesn't seem all that fearful after the first shock.
But i find the excitment to explore a complete new world, races and magic outhwight that by far.
A good house and amenities are a fine thing no question, but also surprisingly unimportant. At least thats my experience when u are some months on the road with just ur backback and a tent (the thing i missed most was a good toilet ).

If u have a place to sleep, which protects u from the elements u will hardly miss a brick house with central heating.
Or i should say, first u miss it, than it's kind of an eye opener that u really don't miss most of the things, which we all think are so important.
The thing most important is friends and loved ones, but the MC didn't really seem to be all that lucky in that department.

Wildlife is fair, but honestly we have that here too, poisonous animals, bears etc.
Same goes for backwards societies or oppressive governments, that is just mostly ignored/overlook, afterall it's in different countries or on a other continent. But even in the western countries, are cities where it can be dangerous to go in the wrong neighbourhood or even just the wrong street, criminals, gangs etc. and human trafficking as well as sexual slavery exists (althought not legal).
We know all that exists somewhere, but we normaly don't fear it, not as long as we don't face it directly.

But yeah, maybe the MC just needs a bit more time (althought i don't think many would complain if they would be in the MC's shoe's).
I think what i missed was a mainly the MC's reason, the why, after seeing his old life.

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Wonder if the title was purposely made that simple just to draw in more people. lol

Yeah, I call it the Prairie dog effect Did you hear something Fred?

 

[Fe195]

Human fear of the unkown, the lack of the like as electricity or running hot water,
solid weather proof housing made of brick and mortar and with central
heating or the life threatening wildlife, backwards societies with slavery and
despotism, could think of a few more but I get what you are saying.
The MC kinda landed on their feet but keep in mind that even Ash
did return to his world.

Ash from Evil Dead I believe

 

[story_and_magic]

As I promised here: I create a vote-poll in my Patreon page and my supporters will decide to keep or not the sex-mini-game.
Thank you for your constructive feedback, good words and reviews.

 

[Kitchentable]

Not sure which Ash u mean.
... time (althought i don't think many would complain if they would be in the MC's shoe's).
I think what i missed was a mainly the MC's reason, the why, after seeing his old life.

An elaborate reply! So people that can read and write more than 2 lines
do still exist on the interwebz!!! Kuddos to you!

Ash, the main protagonist of the legendary Evil Dead triology!!

But with backpacking not being a thing in my youth and your
lack of knowledge about 80s / 90s movies...I guess I am just old
and too comfortable!

As I wrote I get what where you are coming from.

Me, personally, I usually assume it's either art or plot if things
don't make that much sense to me.

Anywho. Cheers mate and have a good one.

Short edit while I am at it: WE WANT ELREEN! WE WANT ELREEN! WE WANT ELREEN!

 

[Tyrranus]

too obsessed with animations, sex scenes are pretty clunky and minimal interactivity, and animations go on too long w/o any way to interact or speed things up.
Renders and models are decent as are the scenes and props
DESPERATELY in need of an english native speaking proofreader

Decent enough start, but atm theres nothing to really make it stand out of the horde of other AVN

edit:
I also find the patreon's pricing very odd... why $6 and $11 tiers? Whats wrong with the normal $5 and $10

 

[Raziel_8]

Ash, the main protagonist of the legendary Evil Dead triology!!

I heard of the movies, althought i never saw them, was blacklisted in my country for it's brutality until 5 years back iirc.
Althought now we officially know, our laws don't cover violence against zombies, such was the judgement of our federal constitutional court

And yes, more Elreen !!

 

[Dereck112]

Amazing

 

[punisher2099]

Earth?...THIS IS SPARTA!!!!

 

[altmas66]

Im kind of lost...wat to do here?

 

[Devinebeast]

Im kind of lost...wat to do here?

For me i just made random clicks and it worked

 

[coldblade1]

Am i the only one having issues just starting it? clicked the .exe waited a full 10 minutes but it remains "unresponsive"

 

[Porn_Jesus]

- The name Gott has been replaced with Gort - (Turns out that in German has meaning and now I hope is neutral.)

Oh I bet the crying was strong with people who get their feelings hurt when their little cloud friend gets mentioned in a game. X3 I'm german too and I couldn't care less but religion and their victims are always golden. =3

 

[Raziel_8]

Oh I bet the crying was strong with people who get their feelings hurt when their little cloud friend gets mentioned in a game. X3 I'm german too and I couldn't care less but religion and their victims are always golden. =3

Nah no hurt feelings as far as i recall, it just sounds very strange to call someone god...
Still better what u read in some novels, i think i read one where some demon nobility was called Löffel and Besteck...i mean it just sounds extremely stupid to name them after tableware. Or another where one main character was called Frau...

 

[Porn_Jesus]

Nah no hurt feelings as far as i recall, it just sounds very strange to call someone god...
Still better what u read in some novels, i think i read one where some demon nobility was called Löffel and Besteck...i mean it just sounds extremely stupid to name them after tableware. Or another where one main character was called Frau...

Gives you those good old DB/DBZ vibes where it's about music instruments or food. I enjoy a good laughter and hey why not... imagine a tale about the mighty demon emperor Löffel! I would piss myself and enjoy it. X3

 

[moesanrath]

well wasn't a half-bad little game, the story seems to be interesting and I look forward to how the MC and Moala handle possible cheating and or extra wives, not going to lie though not a huge fan of the sex mini-game, it could certainly stand an explanation or two about it.

 

[Geowraith]

Remove the sex mini-game it sucks. Otherwise good game.

... or replace with system like that in Callisto, used in Captain's cabin at night.

 

[anon280]

It's all coming together...
Protagonist
Story