VN Ren'Py Stray Incubus [S2 Ch.2a] [Flynn974]

[Flynn974]

Sorry but ill be mean a bit, this game is shit. You have so many cool girls to "fuck" and majority of of the story is just teasing. There is remarkably low H-scenes with so many cool girls. And let's not talk about half of the game is a fuking horror story.... and the ninja training ark, witch I thought will be full of content is just people talking... with zero fuking interaction with heroines.... It feels that this game doesn't want to be a porn game... contrary to most beliefs I play port games to masturbate and this game its just annoying... you can build a great story and have people jerk off to at the same time, those games are masterpieces. Witch this game is not a part of any of that, it fails in M-material, and in story too. As a constructive criticism, I can say 2 things, more porn, and less fuking teasing with good looking female protagonists. Don't get me wrong I want this game too be good, I liked it in what could have been, not what it is. That is the problem.
I should probably make this comment as a review, but I don't want to drag down score for my negative opinion.

Honestly, I respect and appreciate the fact that you didn't leave a bad review. I guess the game simply isn't for you. I personally don't like quite a few games which lots of people like and are highly rated here, which I think is healthy. Maybe come back after a few months when the game has more content that you might like. And if the day comes I'll give you a gallery-unlocked save file so you can reach the 'good stuff' right away.
Have fun!

 

[zeph19]

Great update, all in all. Many thoughts about it, so I'll just write them down without order.

- I really like the introduction of sounds to this game. They were subtle, but improved the overall "mood" while playing this game.
- I find it funny that there was such a disclaimer for the sandbox, because it was THAT easy to navigate. No chance to get stuck at all. Good stuff.
- I really dig the mixing of greek mythology, ninja arts, angels, succubi and whatever else will be added in the future, maybe. It's wacky and fun. Sometimes hard to follow or remember because Torr is a druid in my mind and why would she be linked to Hephaestos / fire, but I'm not criticising here.
- The missions system reminds me of naruto!
- The missions themselves are fun. Could've used some more downtime between the butcher/harpy and mirrormirror, I think.
- If the healing powers are not because of MC's demigod/incubus nature, maybe the "spell" he received is something like Avalon, from the "Fate" universe.
- I like the comic-like lines that were added to the bokken-swings in the gym while Anabelle and Yumi were sparring. Small detail that doesn't matter, but it was cool.

Now criticism. I personally would've wished for some more Candy/Torr/Anabelle/Yumi/Seira progress. Those to me, and I may be very wrong here, are the "main" girls and although Seira got two small scenes, it was unfortunate that they didn't get any action. The fransisca scene was pretty hot and so was the throne-shot after. With so many great and appealing characters already in the game I was lightly annoyed that the redhead assistant got a scene!

I think that the buildup with the girls is very well done. Gabbie's scene, even if it didn't lead to anything, was hot as hell. Flynn has a great sense of how to make scenes sexy using poses and facial expressions whenever the incubus power kicks in and the females succumb to MC's power. Good stuff, really. Very few who are able to to it like this. Only Caribdis and Hot Tomato come to mind right now.

I'm really looking forward to the next update!

 

[Danv]

please fix dates in the OP (2022->2023)

 

[Danv]

error after meeting with Seira after illusion drill, although ignoring it seems not break anything

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[Flynn974]

error after meeting with Seira after illusion drill, although ignoring it seems not break anything

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Weird... I honestly have no idea what that means. I'll recheck the code.

 

[Danv]

Weird... I honestly have no idea what that means. I'll recheck the code.

looks like you got comma there instead of a dot
script.rpy line 13043, with Pause(2,5) -> with Pause(2.5)

 

[Flynn974]

looks like you got comma there instead of a dot
script.rpy line 13043, with Pause(2,5) -> with Pause(2.5)

It's true! The error didn't appear with me despite the 2,5 being there, for some reason...
Anyway, I fixed it. Thanks!

 

[Froilan]

Wow nice game, waiting for more

 

[BlasKyau]

Margot isn't a LI, right?

 

[jhustrue]

I was pretty skeptical about this one due to the MC's sort-of androgynous shota look when I first tried it a while back but this one has quickly become one of my favorites.

 

[Uguei]

Just finished the update and it was great! I'll organize a little bit the things i have to say about it:

- The new "technical" stuff (animations, cutscenes, sound) was very well implemented. It definitely helped with the atmosphere and setting the mood on the scarier bits. Besides, i really liked the piece chosen for the main menu. Just as a suggestion for some QoL changes (not that important, but still), maybe you should consider having an icon during the cutscenes or maybe even a warning text prior to them since at times i unknowingly skipped it and had to rollback. As i said, it's no big deal but i believe it's a small detail that could be worth taking into account.

- I loved the outfit Candy was wearing when she teased Torr. I really hope it isn't wasted and we get an scene with her in the future while she's wearing it~

- There were some misspellings but someone already pointed out all the ones i'd found~

- I really like the writing. It's interesting and it keeps having these mysterious hints without feeling as if it tries too hard. I did expect a bit more time inbetween missions though, but not really a complain, since i'm quite invested into the Mirror arc.

In regards to that, since missions are a resource to bring a breath of fresh air to the game (due to the posibility of new environments, plot progress and/or character introduction), i'd suggest using them with caution. Too many of them during the early game could burn some of the ideas that you have very fast, and that could be a problem in the future.

Having said that, the plot in its current state gives a lot of posibilities, even more so with the mix between gods, demons, monsters, etc. Besides, many of the characters already introduced have backstories that could be developed -without considering future additions-, so i dont think it's an issue to worry about, but it's still something to keep in mind.

 

[JohnF95zone]

Nice, the main menu music with the ocean backdrop and sound effects. The soft piano music is what I imagine Karolina Schwartz was playing in Chapter 6.

Oh man.. the opening of chapter is just awesome, Zycris's memory is slowly coming back to him ( in dreams ).

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Overall, the musics and sounds in Chapter 7 are great. In general, the musics fit in and feel right with the mood of the scenes ( my subjective opinions ). Flynn974 added a bunch of musics and sound effects which are more than enough IMO. There are other games that only contain 3 - 4 musics that were repeated back to back or changed depending on the scenes, and just by having it already improved the overall experience with said games.

The biggest drawback is that now playing the earlier chapters feels like crap. But it will be great again in less than 6 months I hope. #MIGA Make Incubus Great Again

Some recommendations for Game Development with regards to musics and sound effects:

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Lastly, I hope that players can support ( at the moment ) Flynn974 with this game ( as opposed to financial support ) by recommending awesome musics and/or sound efffects for the earlier chapters, preferably on discord.

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[Flynn974]

Margot isn't a LI, right?

Nope.

 

[Flynn974]

Flynn974
Oh I forgot to ask something since last update: Are you portraying Incubi as creatures that not just provide energy through sex, but also need to draw sexual energy from partners to survive?

I am all this time working under the assumption that since either the MC first activated his powers absorbing that goblin or having his first sexual interaction (either Nixie/Irena/Seira or Gabbie/Fransisca depending of your choices) he would be set on needing sex from the point on. Also when he gets captured, it clearly shows he is capable of drawing sexual energy, but so far he is having sexual interactions often enough that never had a chance of feeling any kind of withdrawal, I am really curious to see what would happen to him if he gets to this point.

They can exchange (draw or give) energy through sexual acts, but they don't need it to survive.

 

[Flynn974]

Nice, the main menu music with the ocean backdrop and sound effects. The soft piano music is what I imagine Karolina Schwartz was playing in Chapter 6.

Oh man.. the opening of chapter is just awesome, Zycris's memory is slowly coming back to him ( in dreams ).

Spoiler: Chapter 7 Only Contains Full Spoiler Don't Read Before Playing. You Have Been Warned! TL;DR

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Overall, the musics and sounds in Chapter 7 are great. In general, the musics fit in and feel right with the mood of the scenes ( my subjective opinions ). Flynn974 added a bunch of musics and sound effects which are more than enough IMO. There are other games that only contain 3 - 4 musics that were repeated back to back or changed depending on the scenes, and just by having it already improved the overall experience with said games.

The biggest drawback is that now playing the earlier chapters feels like crap. But it will be great again in less than 6 months I hope. #MIGA Make Incubus Great Again

Some recommendations for Game Development with regards to musics and sound effects:

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Lastly, I hope that players can support ( at the moment ) Flynn974 with this game ( as opposed to financial support ) by recommending awesome musics and/or sound efffects for the earlier chapters, preferably on discord.

Spoiler: My Ideas/Recommendations

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It's awesome! Thanks for this!
I agree with what you said about organising the audio files. I think I'll start doing something like that from now on.
All the tracks are used are offered for free on website and can be used for almost all purposes. I'll probably stick to that for now.
Thanks a ton, John!

 

[Flynn974]

In regards to that, since missions are a resource to bring a breath of fresh air to the game (due to the posibility of new environments, plot progress and/or character introduction), i'd suggest using them with caution. Too many of them during the early game could burn some of the ideas that you have very fast, and that could be a problem in the future.

Having said that, the plot in its current state gives a lot of posibilities, even more so with the mix between gods, demons, monsters, etc. Besides, many of the characters already introduced have backstories that could be developed -without considering future additions-, so i dont think it's an issue to worry about, but it's still something to keep in mind.

I'm really glad you like my game. Thank you!
Also, thanks for taking the time to write this!
I think I get where you're coming from. Good points here and there. I hope I won't run out of ideas that quickly. I occasionally pause writing for a few days until I'm struck by inspiration again. I don't want to write some half-assed nonsense just because I have to finish writing before a certain deadline. Which is one of the reasons why I don't want to open up a Patreon yet. Because I don't want to deal with deadlines to satisfy my costumers, so to speak.
Thanks for the insight, stuff like this and what John wrote is really useful to me.

 

[Hanny2000]

I was kinda had similar thought.

 

[BlasKyau]

Nope.

Thanks for the reply.

I guess I'll avoid her scenes then.

 

[Zareem]

The Ninja Village really is organized and has plenty of SOPs.

What does SOP mean?

 

[JohnF95zone]

What does SOP mean?

Standard Operating Procedure, commonly known as rules or sets of rules. During the last COVID pandemic, SOP is one of the most used words in many parts of the world.