Nice update! I enjoyed getting to know more about the various girls, and the fight mechanics were interesting. The sex scenes were still confined to side characters, but they were well done overall (and no dream sequences!).
Kana's coaching of the MC was fun (though a little simplistic; MMA fighters aren't playing characters the way wrestlers are). I also liked Elspeth's motorcycle maintenance scene; I know some people find her secrecy irritating, but to me it comes across as a natural result of a person who's just very private. Amrit and Vi got some fun lines too. I have trouble seeing them as viable LIs when they seem so much less mature than the MC, but they make great foils as friends.
Ines fell flat to me, though: the virgin BFF who talks a big game was already done in the Author, and it wasn't my favorite there, either. I'm also not too keen on the larger role for head-Davis this time. He was fine in small doses, but I think the schtick feels forced when the MC is constantly interacting with him.
I also wish there was a written walkthrough available for the game. We get a lot of choices and there are apparently a lot of variables under the hood, but from this side of the screen it's very opaque. I don't mind roleplaying choices and seeing what happens, but that would be more fun with more feedback. The characters have fairly understated responses, and with no stats or similar visible changes, it's unclear just whether my choices are being interpreted by the game in the way I intend. It's a bit frustrating at times and makes the game feel more linear than it probably is.
But those are relatively minor complaints. The game is well worth playing and I'm excited to see what happens as things develop.
