As I've already explain, it works as intended. I wanted that end to be disturbing and painful. It's a bad end, so it has to hurt. You have to feel the burn of the failure and the consequences of your actions. And about the choices themselves, it's not really about what the choice says, more about what it imply on the long term.
I didn't mean to imply that I have a problem with a disturbing bad end. It's quite the sucker-punch, and kudos to that. It's just that when I was playing the game, I really had no idea how I got to that point or what I did wrong. Perhaps I misinterpreted the choices. Perhaps they were ambiguous. Perhaps I'm just a moron.
Unfortunately, it's been a while since I played(?) read(?) your visual novel (I'm obviously confused about how I should characterize how one experiences this type of media) and I can't recall what choices I made or why I made them. I do know that I didn't know or understand the characters in the beginning as well as I would have later on in the story. I can see myself making some wrong choices/responses just based on the wrong assumption that Eve rebellious wild youth that everyone thinks that she is. I'm not sure that this is what happened, but I can see that as a possibility.
Another possibility is that I simply didn't understand the choices, or maybe even what the characters where thinking and feeling. Text can be ambiguous like that. One example of the latter, that I actually do remember, is the last interaction between in Even and the MC (at least it was the last interaction when I played it.) Eve revealed to her brother that
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Either way, I don't think I'm going to trust myself to make the right choices. If others want to experience the VN at the seat of their pants and see where their own choices eventually lead them, then that's fine; it's just not for me. While I will eagerly continue reading this VN . . . I'm going to do so while hugging the living crap out of a guide in order to keep myself from wasting a precious day off from work.
About the Psycho twins being black. That topic bothers me.
It's probably a cultural thing. White, black, red or any other color, that doesn't make a difference to me. They're not the bad guys because they're black, and I never thought that it will enforce any kind of stereotype. I have some other characters of color that are more positive. You only met Kelly so far but some others are coming in more minor roles.
I suppose that it depends on where you're from. I'm from the United States. Our entire history can be summed up as a giant contradiction between championing freedom and denying it to a huge portion of our population. If one were to point a gun at my head and ask what the single most prominent running theme driving the history of our culture is, then it would have to be the great divide between white and black.
The characterization of black men as rapists seeking to victimize white women has long been a favorite fear-mongering propaganda tool among white-supremacists. Sadly, this characterization was the motivation behind many lynchings. If you are not from the U.S., then I could see how something like this never crossed your mind at all, but for those of us who grew up here, it's pretty hard to escape the implications of two of the only black characters (so far) in a story being rapists. I never actually thought of Kelly as anything but really tan. >_<
May the filmmakers who created 'A Birth of a Nation' and similar propaganda-pieces rot in hell.
Either way, your affirmation that this was in no way intentional is all I need to rest my concerns. It's good to hear it from the horse's mouth.
And to go further, are the psycho twins really evil ? They sure are presented that way, but are they really ?
Well, I mean you just characterized them as 'psycho'. If they can be diagnosed as being either psychopaths or sociopaths, then that means that they have an extremely diminished or completely absent capacity for empathy. People with these personality disorders simply lack the ability to care about or love others the way you or I would/can. If there's a such a thing as 'true evil', then I would say that 'psychos' fit the bill about as well as anyone could.
That said, we're talking about rape. It's a cruel, dehumanizing act. I'm not going to pretend to be an expert on the subject, but it's my understanding that rapists tend to display
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Perhaps the one-time drunkard who doesn't stop at 'no' the one time might be able to feel remorse, but generally speaking, rapists don't. Here, we're talking about two guys who are actively seeking to harm a young woman in retaliation for what they perceive as a transgression on the part of her father. That sounds pretty freaking evil, any way one spins it.
We're talking about a pre-meditated attempt at rape, for the sake of retaliation--for the sake of inflicting cruelty, and towards an indirect target at that! I don't personally think that these guys could be redeemed if they are willing and capable of something even remotely like this.
When I was still running around in fanfiction circles (eh, rather not talk about it, lol) the majority of authors handling of this type of subject-matter was often cited as a huge pet-peeve. Attempting to redeem a rapist or attempting to get readers to empathize with them just sounds like the writing equivalent of running around with a live grenade to me.
I have no idea how much research you've put into the subject or what you're planning, but I'm sure that even if I don't agree with whatever you decide with your antagonists, that it won't dissuade me from reading. Ultimately, I'm in it for the unusual romance going on with the main characters (and well, also my own perversion).