What a full and expansive world that was created here, which is prompting me to share my thoughts and feedback!
The following contains several CAPITALIZED words that are only used to highlight certain sections, making them stand out as important points throughout this post.
I love TRUE virtual novels that give the reader SO many options and branches to take the story in, I know how difficult it must be to write in this format, but is something I DEEPLY appreciate and look for as a potential FAVORITE, much like when I have read several "Choose-your-own-adventure novels" that I ADORED back in middle school (I can never find gems like those!), this ALSO gives the game a HUGE re-playability, where you can guide the story into vastly different directions and outcomes, cementing your audience through SEVERAL additional journies.
The character's dialog and art have progressively gotten better within each update, the exception being Michael almost exclusively, (and a couple of others that seem to include the same art style), which to me resembles the drawings of an ex-girlfriend from early high school (usually the eyes, mouth or other facial irregularities shown here).
The MC though was clearly influenced by a now-deceased Peter Steele who was the frontman of a band famously known as "Type O Negative" (Incidentally whenever I require a last name while playing a game, it has ALWAYS been 5teele, first name is always 7empest)
Alice looks like a colorful preying-mantis might, with her obvious Asian mother's attributes, or that's how they translate to me while going through this.
The comical factor of Derek/ Deryl/ Daryl was not lost on me ("Hai, I'm Larry, this is my brother Daryl and my OTHER brother Deryl, we are here to fix your septic tank", spoken in a heavy southern very uneducated drawl), I am sure those that enjoy classic sitcoms might come across something like THAT in their search)
The story, WOW did it ever expand to carefully and safely include such a large cast, AND they developed it where many received dialog semi-consistently (of course though, it was clear that later on, the story had to focus primarily on a few key characters, leaving many temporarily in the background, yet we were NEVER sitting here wondering what a certain character was doing for very long.)
The MYTHOS and supernatural elements that are thrown into the narrative are incredible.
I enjoyed the inclusion of the older "Monsters" which naturally made their dialog spoken more ancient, though it could have been brought MUCH further back to long-forgotten languages like Aramaic, as in how Nyx is currently uses Norweigean RUNES in my opinion.
ALSO, story-wise, there were several points of interest where I, the reader, had to wonder WHY the MC wasn't handling certain situations vastly differently when we KNOW the abilities he currently possessed, almost like those ideas SHOULD have been prominent and utilized.
By this version's number, I can theorize that it is closing in to be the end of a chapter, since there is a LOT of ground to cover MUCH more story, due to so many intricately woven characters that the devs can draw from, and/or segway into.
The ONE set of areas that I had a PET PEEVE about, has to do with some of the dialog:
"I Mean" STARTS many of the sentences which would be fine WITHIN the narrative (in the middle of a paragraph), is just PAINFUL to read.
There was a conversation in which even an ancient DIETY started a sentence like that...wow talk about ripping me RIGHT out of the emersion I was invested in.
"I GUESS" never needed to be included in almost ALL the times it was utilized,
"Yeah, no" not needing to be used anywhere at all!
I cannot read those dialog choices without picturing the characters using them as being a little retarded, but HEY that's just MY OPINION right?
Anyway, I am looking forward to seeing how deep this rabbit hole goes, and what's new in the world of...
SUPERHUMAN.
