RPGM Sword Art Online: The Trap of Breath Concealed Magic [verβ1] [Fujino]

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AlphaOmegaMale

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MarlokRitual said:
Hello, and marry Christmas! I'm having trouble playing part 1. Could someone explain how I can download it properly?
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What do you mean by that? does it run at all? Cause part one specially if you are trying to skip text has a tendency to freeze and crash I find. Not sure that can be fixed
 
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EdenGenesis said:
You make some great points about the contrast and how it can enhance the emotional and erotic impact of NTR scenes. I think the story could be even more compelling with a deeper exploration of Asuna’s emotions, desires, and her eventual revenge.

Imagine this: Kirito catches Asuna cheating with Inoda and, instead of immediately breaking up with her, he decides to show her just how much she’s lost. Filled with rage and heartbreak, Kirito has rough, intense sex with her, showing her that he’s capable of giving her a kind of pleasure that she’s never experienced before. In that moment, Asuna feels something new, something stronger than anything she had with Inoda. She believes that maybe, just maybe, she can win back his forgiveness.

But after that intense encounter, Kirito coldly breaks up with her, telling her she doesn’t deserve him, and walks away, leaving her devastated. Asuna is filled with regret, realizing what she’s lost and how deeply she betrayed Kirito. Then, to make matters worse, she learns that Inoda had been manipulating her all along, playing her for a fool. This realization crushes her even further.

In an attempt to fill the void left by Kirito, Asuna sleeps with multiple men, trying to recreate the pleasure and connection she once had with him. But nothing compares to the rough, passionate sex Kirito gave her. No matter how many men she sleeps with, she can’t replicate that raw intensity, and it only makes her more frustrated. She becomes angry, and this anger turns into jealousy when she sees Kirito with other women. The realization that he’s moved on, while she’s left feeling empty and regretful, only intensifies her feelings of loss.

But Asuna isn’t one to simply wallow in her pain. She takes matters into her own hands and decides to get revenge on Inoda for manipulating her. She locks him in a chastity belt, hiding the key in a place where he can’t retrieve it, and tortures him emotionally by showing him erotic videos or engaging with others, knowing that he’s unable to act on his desires. For an even more extreme punishment, Asuna uses a strap-on to sodomize Inoda, humiliating him and making him suffer for what he did.

This combination of Asuna’s sexual frustration, her eventual revenge on Inoda, and the jealousy she feels watching Kirito move on would create a powerful, complex narrative. It adds emotional depth to the story, making the erotic moments feel more charged with both physical and emotional intensity. The mix of betrayal, regret, revenge, and unfulfilled desire would make the game much more engaging and unpredictable, as Asuna tries to come to terms with her actions while trying to reclaim the connection she had with Kirito.
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Ok, now we are getting somewhere.
It's an interesting plot and it uses sex for moving through it.

I just want to point out one small but[t]:
Your story basically breaks into 2 parts, that flow completely independently from each other:
- Asuna with her revenge on Inoda.
- And Kirito with his 'I don't care'.
It's a bad thing when your story crumbles into several pieces. Story, generally, needs to be as intertwined as possible - so every scene would flow into the next with as strong of a pull (and 'promise') as it can.

For example - in my opinion - it would be a stronger, more connected story, if:
- Kirito would be trying to show that "he doesn't care" - but we, as omniscient viewers, will see that he's doing everything with a side-look at Asuna - what she's doing and how she looks at him. While desperately maintaining his edgy-cold attitude, that suits him so much (that contrast could be quite cute).
Asuna is still the center of his world - but more like a rival is your center of the world.
- And at the same time Asuna is not just miserable - I don't think that would be very sexy - but her jealousy goes to another level. That is the new step in her character arc.
Her becoming a full-on stalker-yandere.
And maybe she even uses Inoda to make Kirito jealous or steal his future girlfriends she is so jealous about. Kinda like Tara from Nemesis Party (if I remember her name correctly).
...Because, in all honesty, I don't think I would be very excited to watch Inoda in a chastity belt for multiple scenes.

Basically:
- Kirito: edgy-cold <=> but still in [bitter] love.
- Asuna: an angry-jealous stalker-yandere.
They are not together, but everything they do is about each other. Tying 2 separate blobs of sex together.
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is a good illustration of such plot composition.
 
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abirvg said:
Ok, now we are getting somewhere.
It's an interesting plot and it uses sex for moving through it.

I just want to point out one small but[t]:
Your story basically breaks into 2 parts, that flow completely independently from each other:
- Asuna with her revenge on Inoda.
- And Kirito with his 'I don't care'.
It's a bad thing when your story crumbles into several pieces. Story, generally, needs to be as intertwined as possible - so every scene would flow into the next with as strong of a pull (and 'promise') as it can.

For example - in my opinion - it would be a stronger, more connected story, if:
- Kirito would be trying to show that "he doesn't care" - but we, as omniscient viewers, will see that he's doing everything with a side-look at Asuna - what she's doing and how she looks at him. While desperately maintaining his edgy-cold attitude, that suits him so much (that contrast could be quite cute).
Asuna is still the center of his world - but more like a rival is your center of the world.
- And at the same time Asuna is not just miserable - I don't think that would be very sexy - but her jealousy goes to another level. That is the new step in her character arc.
Her becoming a full-on stalker-yandere.
And maybe she even uses Inoda to make Kirito jealous or steal his future girlfriends she is so jealous about. Kinda like Tara from Nemesis Party (if I remember her name correctly).
...Because, in all honesty, I don't think I would be very excited to watch Inoda in a chastity belt for multiple scenes.

Basically:
- Kirito: edgy-cold <=> but still in [bitter] love.
- Asuna: an angry-jealous stalker-yandere.
They are not together, but everything they do is about each other. Tying 2 separate blobs of sex together.
You must be registered to see the links
is a good illustration of such plot composition.
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then Suguha comes and says to Asuna: the only person who can be a Yandere is me:cauto:
:LOL:
 
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chronoTrigg said:
Well from past experiences most of Fujino's 2 month updates are quite good. I personally am looking forward to it a lot.
I wonder how long slutsuna can last against Inoda's relentless assault haha.
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Hello there, I just wanna ask, Did Fujino say he's not planning on posting this month?
 
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Are we getting an update this month? I didn't see his Patreon say were skipping this month, unless I looked over it
 
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chronoTrigg said:
Well from past experiences most of Fujino's 2 month updates are quite good. I personally am looking forward to it a lot.
I wonder how long slutsuna can last against Inoda's relentless assault haha.
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I think the plot will be something like this. Inoda will pester Asuna with requests to masturbate him and he will be satisfied, but Asuna gets nothing from it. As a result, she will ask Inoda to have sex with her, but he will refuse her (if Fujino is ready to implement this option). As a result, Asuna will do what she feared Inoda would do - climb on his cock while he was sleeping or playing the game (in fact, Inoda will just pretend). Since Inoda will just be lying on the bed, Asuna will have to do everything herself and maybe even cheer herself up with dirty expressions (some kind of repetition of the events at the hotel in the game).
After that, Inoda will pretend that he has just woken up and accuse Asuna of "violence". And he will even be able to blackmail her with this for later having sex in reality, since he will have a video of Asuna fucking him while he sleeps)))
personally, I would prefer it to happen several times to show the complete collapse of the Asuna (the first time she fucks Inoda when he is really in the game, and then he sees it in his hidden camera, the second time he pretends and enjoys, the third time he "wakes up" and blames her), but I understand that such repetition will just inappropriately delay the game, so it won't happen(
 
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i got stuck here, i can't get out or do anything like that i was at the part where alice was sucking the brothel guy's dick, but now i can't get out. anyone can help me?

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MarlokRitual said:
No, actually whenever I download it it shows as a document and not a file with the game in it to extract. I'm kinda lost...
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Unsure where you are clicking but its a near 2gb file from the link part 1 gofile what I used works fine for me other then sometime can glitch and freeze when skipping

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