- Thread starter Wallaky77
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These types of games need a really good writer to be successful. Unfortunately between the poor grammar and plot it is too hard for me to get into the game. And sometimes the writing is just down right confusing, especially when he and she is mixed up during dialog between two characters.
The idea is alright I guess, but having everyone in your life turn on you at the drop of the hat seems a bit too unbelievable. Especially since there is little to no evidence against you. Even if everyone that works at your precinct is corrupt it would still be hard to believe.
It just all happens too fast. Maybe it would be better if you could play some of the time you're in prison. Allowing for character development by slowly becoming corrupt while trying to survive life as an ex-cop in prison. I'm sure that could force you to make some devious decisions. Possibly allowing you to make contact with someone that has information about your false conviction. Which could help set up the plot for your slaver job once you get out of prison.
The idea is alright I guess, but having everyone in your life turn on you at the drop of the hat seems a bit too unbelievable. Especially since there is little to no evidence against you. Even if everyone that works at your precinct is corrupt it would still be hard to believe.
It just all happens too fast. Maybe it would be better if you could play some of the time you're in prison. Allowing for character development by slowly becoming corrupt while trying to survive life as an ex-cop in prison. I'm sure that could force you to make some devious decisions. Possibly allowing you to make contact with someone that has information about your false conviction. Which could help set up the plot for your slaver job once you get out of prison.
- Jul 21, 2018
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this game needs more work before i'll look at it again, no real form to it as yet that i can see.
- Feb 5, 2018
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"where you play as a man who lost his life.".... "He got a second chance from an unknown person"
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- Aug 10, 2017
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Okay so not a bad start. Needs more time to actually be worth investing into it, but as a proof of concept it's good.
I like this instant "rough approach" to things, but gotta wait and see how it gets written and if it goes overboard or just devolves it to a basic "theme" where every interaction would be the same if just basic words were replaced.
On a side note I think the dev is Hungarian? Some of the folders within have Hungarian names. It's not important I just always find it cool when I see a game made by a fellow countrymen.
I like this instant "rough approach" to things, but gotta wait and see how it gets written and if it goes overboard or just devolves it to a basic "theme" where every interaction would be the same if just basic words were replaced.
On a side note I think the dev is Hungarian? Some of the folders within have Hungarian names. It's not important I just always find it cool when I see a game made by a fellow countrymen.
Just started and i have an issue, it is all over the place. I like pictures, but they have to make sense. You cant just dump 6 pics. Also the women in pictures change and dont correspond to the story. When i meet a woman in a ahrdware shop she cant be standing in a bedroom on the picture. The style of the game also changes. Choose one and stick to it. Either its bubble or text.
- Aug 19, 2017
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Hey, having some trouble running this game - it loads, but when it's time to press "Accept" or "Accept(Skip Prologue)", nothing happens. I don't seem to have this trouble with any other twine-based game. Using Firefox - any ideas?
- Aug 10, 2017
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Yeah I THINK it's because those links are wrapped within <button> tags which as far as I can remember don't allow link within them.
I'm a web developer and I KNOW I should know this, but I've never even had the idea to do something like this so I'm clueless.
I dont know ur country, but in my country jail and prision do that to ppl. Prision is the university of crime if u go to prision only for having some dope u become more agressive more criminal and u get to know ppl that know ppl so yeah prision can do that to ppl.
- Jul 1, 2017
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"He have to be dominant and brutal to make this job done". I fucking LOVE it already! A breath of fresh air in among all of these "sissy, trap, female protagonist" "games".
- Jun 24, 2017
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Hello guys, thank you very much for the first opinions. I worked on the problems, and rewrite a little in the story. Changed some pics with your helps.
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Thank you again for your comments, have a good time.
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