What Riley's love interest do you like more?


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status10

Member
Jul 18, 2019
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Dang, so hot. So vulgar... I hope you'll be able to fuck around with everyone there later. At least with the doc I locked all others out. Don't like choosing only one and having to play the game again and again to try them all out.
 

JNev

Newbie
Aug 17, 2022
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Why do you have an issue with me trying to point out grammar issues?
Don't worry. Mentioning these issues within the grammar is totally reasonable. It's not a big secret that a lot of AVN games are not created by native English speakers and that's why these things are always present in these games (more or less). Any help to make that experience even better is welcome.
 

hardzon

Newbie
Mar 18, 2018
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"Finally her perfect pussy is mine. That face she makes when I penetrate her is worthless."

I think it should be 'priceless'.
 

Balbaar

Member
Oct 14, 2017
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Why do you have an issue with me trying to point out grammar issues?
I gotta be honest mate, I've looked through them and most of the issues you're pointing out aren't grammar issues at all. They're simply preferences as to how it's being written.

For example, "Alright, let me introduce you to Ms. Riley Ito." is not grammatically incorrect. Just because you would've preferred that line being written in a slightly different manner does not mean it's a grammar issue.
Now I can agree that some of your alternatives to the radio comms would make it feel a bit more professional, but you do need to learn to differentiate between a preference and a mistake if you're going to point these things out.
 

Aqwaa

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Game Developer
Aug 25, 2022
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To give you guys a bit more insight and trying not to offend anyone, I fixed some of the commas and typos that were suggested by Cboy. Other things, like the use of "!?", are purely a matter of preference. Since neither Nev, Zegamez, nor I are native English speakers, I actually looked most of them up and made sure whether they were truly grammatically wrong or not. That said, I'll leave you some examples of what I fixed:
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I'm also waiting for more typos and errors from the translation to show up before pushing out an actual update for the game. Otherwise, there would be an update every few days. (for example a french native noticed some wrong grammar in the french translation)

PS: If you find more hit me up!
 

zegamez

Well-Known Member
Game Developer
May 22, 2019
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But what if a game has broken English and such?
CboyC95, I just wanted to say that I really appreciate you taking the time to create this list of mistakes, even if some people find it controversial. I'm not confident enough in my English to judge it myself, but I still value your effort.
Do you have an academic degree in English? I’m asking because some of the phrases you pointed out as wrong sound fine to other people. Maybe they’re acceptable in everyday conversation but technically incorrect according to strict grammar rules?
 

Balbaar

Member
Oct 14, 2017
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But what if a game has broken English and such?
If a game has broken English it would of course be fine to help the devs out by pointing out their mistakes. But you should make sure that the mistakes you're pointing out are actual mistakes and not just personal preferences or even intentional mistakes meant to convey a certain way of speaking (like with a heavy accent for example).

I don't have a problem with you correcting missing commas, periods and stuff like that by the way, and your suggestions regarding the radio/military jargon are also perfectly fine. My only issue is the ones where you sort of just rearrange or change a sentence that was already fine to begin with.
 
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