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ColossusProjectProduction

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How do I get my relation up with here I bought her the most expensive tent then the couch scene happens not long after and then I don't see her after that.
I'd recommend instead going back to the ambush fight, and trying a little more. That's all the hint that I'll permit myself to give.
 

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Computer totally screwed. free bc I don't know if I'll have access to any PC's for a while, and my Phone really doesn't like Patreon.

I don't like to beg, but if anyone had a dilemma about subbing, now would be a good time. Hardware can be expensive.
 

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Wow! Amazing!

I wouldn't say it was short if you are reading and not just skipping to scenes it took like 2 hours to go through pretty decent for a 0.2.

Really love everything about it the customization, the choices, the characters, the world building and the choices of photos. Cannot wait for more.

It's refreshing to play as medieval type game that actually has women hesitate and recognizes the significance of her losing her virginity rather than just jumping right to it.

Can't wait for more Annette. Can imagine MC finally gets her into bed oops she's bossy and wraps her legs around him or just tells him not to pull out. Comes back from sacking another town and she's pregnant. Yeah he's a noble and she's a commoner but depending on how wealthy her father is could make sense for him to marry her out of honor/love/a super big dowery.
 

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Wow! Amazing!

I wouldn't say it was short if you are reading and not just skipping to scenes it took like 2 hours to go through pretty decent for a 0.2.

Really love everything about it the customization, the choices, the characters, the world building and the choices of photos. Cannot wait for more.

It's refreshing to play as medieval type game that actually has women hesitate and recognizes the significance of her losing her virginity rather than just jumping right to it.

Can't wait for more Annette. Can imagine MC finally gets her into bed oops she's bossy and wraps her legs around him or just tells him not to pull out. Comes back from sacking another town and she's pregnant. Yeah he's a noble and she's a commoner but depending on how wealthy her father is could make sense for him to marry her out of honor/love/a super big dowery.
Glad you liked it, unfortunately my PC has broken down late last week, and still haven't managed to diagnose and fully replace it. Certainily, I plan on continuing, but for now it's basically a full stop as far as development goes.
 

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So I like the direction.
I am a sucker for these strategy inclined historic games.
There doesn't seem to be a monster-fantasy angle, which I think is great.


The text can seem quite long, yes I know it's a text game. Perhaps it's the formatting.
Text games usually benefit greatly from giving the player decisions.
Yes you get decisions in this game but they are pretty mild.
It's also better to write something like "Lead the charge to the right/left/centre" than simply "To the right/left/centre" as the decisions.
Yes it becomes obvious through the preceding text but it simply reads better.

So with the advancement of the story and the players stats I hope we'll see decisions that can only be taken if the player has certain stats.
Both in relation to characters, war campaigns and management.

Is fief management on the table?
I sure hope it is because games in these settings are rare and as a strategy games player I see fief management and think to myself "That's fun."


As far as images are concerned, perhaps be a bit more selective and don't put images of 18th century troops into the mix.
I realise that the porn aspect is tough, us not living in the medieval ages and porn not looking like that. Just try to stay clear of really obvious modern stuff.
One example: Bathtub sex - okay ; Shower sex - less so

For still images AI can do good, CAN. It has the tendency to be over the top.
 

ColossusProjectProduction

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So I like the direction.
I am a sucker for these strategy inclined historic games.
There doesn't seem to be a monster-fantasy angle, which I think is great.


The text can seem quite long, yes I know it's a text game. Perhaps it's the formatting.
Text games usually benefit greatly from giving the player decisions.
Yes you get decisions in this game but they are pretty mild.
It's also better to write something like "Lead the charge to the right/left/centre" than simply "To the right/left/centre" as the decisions.
Yes it becomes obvious through the preceding text but it simply reads better.
I will take the last part into account, definitely. Glad you like this.
So with the advancement of the story and the players stats I hope we'll see decisions that can only be taken if the player has certain stats.
Both in relation to characters, war campaigns and management.
There already are a number of choices that are quite specific to your stats that have been available from the first update, though the latest update has been mostly linear, with only three (?) scenes being different depending on relationship stats and/or previous accomplishments.
Is fief management on the table?
I sure hope it is because games in these settings are rare and as a strategy games player I see fief management and think to myself "That's fun."
Not in this first book. The sequel will have you "inherit" or rather run the Barony (or maybe more) after the war is over. The First book will have army management mechanics at most, and I'm still quite unsure about how to implement that.

As far as images are concerned, perhaps be a bit more selective and don't put images of 18th century troops into the mix.
I realise that the porn aspect is tough, us not living in the medieval ages and porn not looking like that. Just try to stay clear of really obvious modern stuff.
One example: Bathtub sex - okay ; Shower sex - less so

For still images AI can do good, CAN. It has the tendency to be over the top.
Haven't really managed to understand AI thus far, so I'm not going to be implementing "personally generated" AI pics any time soon. I always attempt to get the most fitting media, but it's very, and I mean very scarce. If you feel it's too "modern", I'm likely going to have to disappoint you on this. Unless my donations rise, I'm unlikely to spend more time developing and as such, the pics/vids are likely to stay mostly similarly unfitting.
 

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Welp, Patreon's gone. Subscribestar is now displaying a "Your profile is under review" message, so hopefully verification is going to come soon.
 

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Welp, Patreon's gone. Subscribestar is now displaying a "Your profile is under review" message, so hopefully verification is going to come soon.
Hey sounds like you may have bigger issues to deal with than my two bob so I'll just say that you've got a good start here and hope you can get past these setbacks. For game feedback, I like that the MC has decent morals (if you play optimally) and is not an idiot. Maybe you could make a few more viable paths where two paths lead to different stat and story outcomes but without one being "better" than the other. Other than the market purchases, the choices I explored had one optimal path, lessening the feeling of choice.

Your writing is largely good. I enjoy how descriptive you are and that you attempt to worldbuild. In service to that worldbuilding, I'd suggest leaning into styling your writing on a time period. Not "thee" and "thou" so much as staying away from modern idioms and terms. Hihihihi for laughter particularly felt jarring for instance and if you want the encyclopaedia (great idea btw) to feel official, you should avoid contractions. If you want it to feel more conversational like the Witcher's, ostensibly written by Jaskier, you really need to embody that "voice" the whole way through.

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Hey sounds like you may have bigger issues to deal with than my two bob so I'll just say that you've got a good start here and hope you can get past these setbacks. For game feedback, I like that the MC has decent morals (if you play optimally) and is not an idiot. Maybe you could make a few more viable paths where two paths lead to different stat and story outcomes but without one being "better" than the other. Other than the market purchases, the choices I explored had one optimal path, lessening the feeling of choice.

Your writing is largely good. I enjoy how descriptive you are and that you attempt to worldbuild. In service to that worldbuilding, I'd suggest leaning into styling your writing on a time period. Not "thee" and "thou" so much as staying away from modern idioms and terms. Hihihihi for laughter particularly felt jarring for instance and if you want the encyclopaedia (great idea btw) to feel official, you should avoid contractions. If you want it to feel more conversational like the Witcher's, ostensibly written by Jaskier, you really need to embody that "voice" the whole way through.

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Hello, thanks for the feedback. This is the kind of stuff that really helps me improve the game. Especially the grammar corrections.

On the Pathing issue, I would note that the game is still early in its development and has yet to develop the story in a major way. The two main Paths, which I will nickname for this thread the Failure and Success paths will be the Main branches of the Story. The Success one has thus far been the "Optimal" one, objectively offering more in terms of content, whether we're talking about porn or non-porn content. They will branch differently from each other and intertwine at a select few points to allow you to switch between them, and will most likely be based on your "Fame" stat. Currently, the two paths are distinguished between based on how you performed at the Ambush in your first battle.

I thank you for your kind words about my writing, but after looking it up, I still do not understand what contractions are (English is my second language), and I gather they aren't something to do with pregnancy (which will be included into the game at a distant point). Since your message reiterates the pathing point here, I will also reiterate that the Paths have yet to be developed and as development continues, things will start to look different. Not always better or worse, though sometimes perhaps that too, but certainly different.

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Once again, thanks for all the kind words and the corrections. I will continue the worldbuilding focus and perhaps even find a lore-friendly alternative for the onomatopoeia of a woman giggling. Until then - HIHIHIHIHI

Yours truly, Colossal PP.
 
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zargal

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Thanks for taking my feedback in the spirit it was intended. Hearing that English is not your first language makes this really impressive- I could not tell. I know plenty of native English speakers who struggle with its/it's.

I'm glad you recognize the pathing issues and have a plan for them. I think if it ends up that you can focus on any area and have an enjoyable experience without missing too much content, that'd be fine. I will note that it's wise for you to not go too far with life-altering choices this early otherwise you can end up tying yourself in knots later.

Contractions are simply the joining of two words with an apostrophe eg. that's=that is and you're=you are. Nothing to do with pregnancy haha! They're regarded as a more informal way of writing and are a way to make speech feel more authentic, but are out of place in scholarly or official texts. I'd have a look into them since they're a big part of English.

I feel your pain with trying to put a heap of information in one sentence, where if you split the sentence up it can feel choppy. I had a go at editing some of the more cumbersome sentences in the introduction and ended up needing to rephrase some things which may slightly alter the overall meaning. I'd concentrate on getting your story out for now, editing of this can be done later.

Regarding capitalizations, like I said, it's a bit of a stylistic thing. Personally I think standard usage is better, but as long as you're consistent it should be fine.

And yeah, hihihi. I suggest simply reading a few low fantasy works and seeing what they do. While you're there you might pick up some more period relevant idioms and expressions. Off the top of my head I suggest Darklands, an old rpg based in HRE Germany.
 

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Thanks for taking my feedback in the spirit it was intended. Hearing that English is not your first language makes this really impressive- I could not tell. I know plenty of native English speakers who struggle with its/it's.

I'm glad you recognize the pathing issues and have a plan for them. I think if it ends up that you can focus on any area and have an enjoyable experience without missing too much content, that'd be fine. I will note that it's wise for you to not go too far with life-altering choices this early otherwise you can end up tying yourself in knots later.

Contractions are simply the joining of two words with an apostrophe eg. that's=that is and you're=you are. Nothing to do with pregnancy haha! They're regarded as a more informal way of writing and are a way to make speech feel more authentic, but are out of place in scholarly or official texts. I'd have a look into them since they're a big part of English.

I feel your pain with trying to put a heap of information in one sentence, where if you split the sentence up it can feel choppy. I had a go at editing some of the more cumbersome sentences in the introduction and ended up needing to rephrase some things which may slightly alter the overall meaning. I'd concentrate on getting your story out for now, editing of this can be done later.

Regarding capitalizations, like I said, it's a bit of a stylistic thing. Personally I think standard usage is better, but as long as you're consistent it should be fine.

And yeah, hihihi. I suggest simply reading a few low fantasy works and seeing what they do. While you're there you might pick up some more period relevant idioms and expressions. Off the top of my head I suggest Darklands, an old rpg based in HRE Germany.
Just for curiosity's sake, what rank did you end up as?
 
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